Chapter 3 was a waste

Shirou is such a fucking pussy in this story, why can't anyone write Shirou like more than a wet blanket or a weakling

Shirou is too much of a wet blanket, just folding over for everyone besides Issei, also you are underpowering him so far

I hate how dxd fanfics jack off Freed, Shirou should be able to beat him without taking off the shroud, he has faced people hundreds of times more dangerous. Also, you are basically rehashing dxd but with Shirou

It doesn't seem in his character to hand over the fragments, he would want to protect Excalibur not give it to devils

Honestly, your style of writing is so repetitive and slow. The first arc should not have lasted as much as it did. And Shiro basically was a non factor. I wonder how would you begin to play catch up for Shiro on DXD considering the feats of other characaters. It is so boring. Have a nice day.

It's 4:30 A.M. and I've been reading this for many hours already only to find out about this now. wtf bro?
On another hand it was an amazing story

Amigo yo no me considero crítico ni nada por el estilo ya que aprecio las historias de todo tipo y más hablando de uno de mis personajes favoritos del anime...solo me hubiera gustado que siguieras con esta historia. Aunque claro que muchos podrían criticarla , la verdad me agrado la trama en sí y esperaba poder ver un final para ella sobre todo ya que se quedó en una buena parte y ahora ya no podré saber como terminó...haaaa si tan solo fuera escritor desearía terminarla...

Sad. Was enjoying this "timeline" you created. Oh well, I'll see what else you made.

WHY IN THE WORLD WOULD YOU HAVE SHIROU *WILLINGLY* HAND OVER THE *EXCALIBUR SHARDS*? *ARE YOU DUMB?* ~~YOUR IQ IS ROOM TEMPERATURE~~ sorry, ROOM TENPERATURE MEASURED IN KELVIN

Just saw that this one has a remake. Willingly adopted from you or not isn’t that big of a deal. Every person on the internet has the right to steal this plot idea and try and finish it since you aren’t the series’ original creators.
But besides that, I cannot for the life of me recall anything about this story so the rebirth/adoption/kidnapping while potentially having theoretically more chance of being this Fate-DxD version being finished, it’s still not very high.

why am i not supra red you suck at finishing a fanficon do yourself a faver and eat sh i te

Power Enough to Destroy the World.
Power Enough to Destroy Everything.

Umu, I think the satans were only strong enough to destroy a continent or something like that though I could have understood falsely.

Still want saber to come a bombshell the whole mythological community

Still hope that Artoria can be summoned besides that great chapter

Great chapter

Though I would love for arturia being summoned