Reviews for Bio-Boosted Kitsune
OnGuard chapter 2 . 9/18
Your story seems pretty good but the writing feels rushed. Your missing words and some of your sentences don't make sense because of that. Also, please don't put notes in the middle of your chapters, your interrupting the flow of your story.
Guest chapter 7 . 7/19
Yes they have ALREADY made their choice, but I don't agree with "doing anything to them will simply make you like them", no, their actions have WARRANTED punishment, naruto and others DID NOTHING. SOOO it's completely different... In FACT, by NOT DOING ANYTHING to them, you COULD view it as, that you CONDONE what they have done and that it's ACCEPTABLE behavior!
Guest chapter 3 . 7/18
So? Who cares if it makes unwanted heads roll? He's gonna have to do it EVENTUALLY, he's got all the power he needs NOW, so why wait? "die now, die in a little bit".. NOT MUCH OF A CHOICE, just treat it like a band-aid and RIP IT OFF in one FAST MOVEMENT! Nobody ready for the news? Well they've had 12 YEARS to prepare, so nobody can say it was "unexpected"... Or "sudden"... (if something takes TWELVE FRICKIN YEARS for the WIND UP! You'd better be PREPARED FOR IT TO FLATTEN YOU!) After all the hokage HAD to know (unless he's a complete and UTTER moron) that EVENTUALLY the "other shoe" was going to drop... When it came to naruto and the village.. Between the bijuu, the death god, the uzumaki clan and the prophecy, naruto is involved with FAR too many COSMIC things to think some little backwater village could do whatever to him and get AWAY scott free. It was really only a matter of time. Cosmic entities tend to take that whole "VENGEANCE" thing very seriously. and now naruto has something that's VERY NAME means "out of control"... It's basically a PLANET MULCHING WEAPON! (in the hands of a jinchuriki who by definition ARE ALSO weapons of mass destruction! He SHOULD be able to shred just about EVERYBODY in the series!)
Guest chapter 3 . 7/18
Why would it be difficult to get to the top of an essentially administrative building? Do you honestly believe ANY bureaucrat has stamina that god gave a FLY? Plus how was the "oh so important" civilians supposed to do it? (most of which need a cane or a walker just to walk on a FLAT, OPEN ROAD!) ff authors always make me laugh on their double standards.
Guest chapter 1 . 7/17
As for sasgay? Well this is another NO-BRAINER... One is ALWAYS GONNA RISE and the other MUST FALL... It's just how it is, balance.

Sasgay has nothing but rep, he doesn't deserve it, and his clan is dead traitors but it's all he's got...

Naruto has nothing but STRENGTH, personal, power, his family left him lots and he's a ruler of a country.

ONE of them IS GONNA FALL... It's inevitable... and it's kinda obvious it would be the first one.
Guest chapter 1 . 7/17
Orichi says "don't cancel the exams or I will will punish the leaf"..

Well number 1 he can't, If he could, he ALREADY WOULD HAVE! This is just stupid that they don't know

Number 2. You got the time... If he doesn't want the exams canceled then there is your time frame.

Number 3. He's got a dog in that race... If he cared, it would be more of a month/day thing, instead it's an even, that means he's not going to do ANYTHING until his pooch is called... (sasuke)... should be kinda obvious.

Number 4. If he's showing up after all these years, he's gotta think he's holding aces(trump)... so you can count on an invasion...
Add that in with sand sending a psychotic jinchuriki (even the weakest one) to it's ALLY and I think you got the entire plan down pretty easy.
Guest chapter 1 . 7/17
If you have said "don't do THIS in THIS AMOUNT of time because of THIS EVENT".. You've basically given the cops: what, when, where, why and who (you, for shooting your mouth off). It's not a real difficult proposition to even bring an IRL trial to life with that.
Guest chapter 1 . 7/17
OK, just for these EXAMS... Number one he lets a homicidal jincuriki in to them, now WITHOUT the homicidal part THEY ARE WEAPONS OF WAR.. so what "ally" sends a nuke with a timer going off?... More then that, WHY WOULD YOU LET A JINCHURIKI COMPETE? (and yes, I know this applies to naruto too). NUMBER Two he lets two ARMIES IN.. Didn't their chakra signatures give you a CLUE as to there are too many getting in here that AREN'T SUPPOSED TO BE? They do have that chakra barrier on the village which apparently does NOTHING(amazing, two armies a jinchurki all walk in and danzo's army is already in, and NOBODY notices huh?.. Yeah, I begin to doubt how the leaf SURVIVED three wars without a LOT OF HELP... and third: the complete TIP OFF from orochi himself, which basically OUTLINES everything and when he wants it to happen... And yet the third cowers like a normal coward and goes ahead with what he says.. THIS IS A LEADER?.. In what dimension?
Guest chapter 1 . 7/17
My problem with the "third hokage".. is HE DOESN'T ACT LIKE A LEADER, he acts like "one of the crowd", in all the ff's I've read and quite a few times in canon, he simply "goes with the flow", um no.. A LEADER sets the standard... A leader says "THIS IS WHERE the 'flow' begins and stops"... If he cannot control things? Then he needs to step aside and someone ELSE will do his job BETTER.
Guest chapter 1 . 7/17
Remember neo on the matrix in less then a second he went "WOAH, I know kung-fu"... Regardless of what you want for the story, when talking cosmic or celestial beings(demons, angels, gods, shinigami, avatars, vampires, gyuvers, werethings), dedication to martial arts is kinda a POINTLESS thing, they can get LIFETIMES OF USING THEM in under a second... Punching and kicking becomes banal.. really BENEATH them. When you can EVISCERATE someone by LOOKING AT THEM. (or in the case of the head beam, MELT THEM)
Guest chapter 1 . 7/17
I'm not really clear WHY it takes naruto 5 years to learn what he needs too, you realize that SHO, in the canon guyver, became a martial arts EXPERT in less then three seconds? FROM ABSOLUTELY NO EXPERIENCE, he went ninja in less then three seconds... Justu? More or less, it's make the correct "cat's-cradle" with your fingers and pump chakra into it, (isn't the HANDSIGNS supposed to shape what you want, it's kinda their whole purpose). SO that would take a DAY of training tops to teach him HUNDREDS! (affinities have NOTHING to do with what you can learn, just which you are powerful with and you can GAIN THEM as time goes on, OR power level goes through the roof). and again experience in Marital arts moves/fighting takes LESS THEN THREE SECONDS!
my 2 guys chapter 15 . 7/18
that was good keep the chapters coming
SPark681 chapter 15 . 5/11
NIce story so far wonder how the next chapter will turn out anyways keep up the great work!
StrongGuy159 chapter 15 . 5/6
Cool chapter continue & do The Pokèmon Jinchuriki & Naruto's Bloodline: Blacklight Style Stories please.
spyro259 chapter 14 . 5/6
i like the namikaze naruto:neos bloodlines, the bakugan no sennin, naruto namikaze: the ninja of the saints and the naruto and the bi-omnitrix; hero style story ideas and im enjoying ur stories big time
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