Reviews for The Definition of Normal
oniforever chapter 5 . 9/18/2015
Once again, Albus Dumbledore has a lot to answer for.
JannaKalderash chapter 1 . 9/18/2015
What always gets me about the time before third year, is why Harry didn't call Dobby to help him out as far as food was concerned. Dobby would do anything for Harry, including snitching food from Hogwarts to feed him.

Or even make sure that the chores are done and that Vernon keeps his distance.

Poor kid, having to wait that long to go back to school and consider that to be his home, instead of the place he was raised.

Excellent first chapter.
carick of hunter moon chapter 5 . 9/18/2015
good development of the story one of the tests is re-reading as a reader you then spot error and development issue with in the writting this is why as a writter it a good trick to read you work 24hrs after writting it it help you spot issue with your writting keep working on this
carick of hunter moon chapter 2 . 9/18/2015
I think that the test of fan-fiction story teller is to start with canon, then to go beyond it by so they create a new story there own story as they build on the canon the writter then open up there writing and show creativity as a writer, your story needs to do this it still very close to canon and you need to develop this into your take on JKR Harry Potter not a retelling
carick of hunter moon chapter 1 . 9/18/2015
Brit pick Auto or Automobiles is US English in the UK we would use car or cars you have written a clasic into chapter
Which is what is need to start your story.
Now this would be better if it was longer a long chapter would give you time to put your own stamp on the story as it is what your written is same as many other story becuse there is nothing new been add to the story mix
123KSJF chapter 5 . 9/18/2015
Good chapter! Look forward to what happens next
anthea tronchard step chapter 4 . 9/16/2015
Will be Hermione, Ron and Weasleys bashing? Will the weasleys stole from him? Will be an illegaly marriage contract (Ginny-Harry from albus-Molly)?
Rainy Ravenclaw chapter 4 . 9/16/2015
Very nice story. I love it so far.
rb2312 chapter 4 . 9/13/2015
Great will reading.

one of the better ones i have read.

love that albus was denied attendance. Despite his claim of guardian ship. A possition that seams to be entirely self apointed.
And i am guessing that amelia will be wanting words with him about why he did not tell people that peter was secret keeper.

Really hope that the will leads to sirius being cleared. And as a bonus, snape easing up on harry.

the up and coming moony / padfoot reunion should be good. Especially as remus now knows that it was peter who was the betrayer.
afish.2far chapter 4 . 9/13/2015
*swoon* What a spectacular story! I can't wait to read more of it!
123KSJF chapter 4 . 9/12/2015
Good story so far!
kirsty21 chapter 4 . 9/12/2015
cool update soon thanks
ladysavay chapter 4 . 9/11/2015
I'm glad to see how this is going, but I could see no rational reason for Griphook to put off his meeting with them until tomorrow. He had planned to have that talk with him for days. It read like you changed your mind and went in another direction in order to have something else happen first. Additionally, Harry was told he could ask all the questions he wanted after the reading, and during it he had a bunch of questions he wanted answered, and yet, he didn't say a thing. Disappointing and kind of silly to put it all off, again, for no good reason. I'll continue reading but I suggest you write a brief outline of where this story should go chapter by chapter, so these kind of fairly jarring, and completely unnecessary alterations don't become a habit.

Having said all of that, so far the story has my interest and seems to be headed in a direction where Harry might get the help he never got in canon, soon. That's always a good thing. Thanks for writing this and sharing it with us.
adenoide chapter 3 . 9/8/2015
Dumby keep Harry ignorant about his heir's duty. I hope Sirius won't follow Dumby who didn't do nothing about to get him a trial. I will like to know who will the pairing for Harry. About the Weasley they are poor but the throw out the money they win for a trip when they need money for their children in school. For me what they did was stupid.
Tsukiyomi Sora chapter 3 . 9/9/2015
kyaaaaa me gusta, por favor continua, por favor
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