curse you and your amazing writing. i have two hours to sleep before my shift starts and i just keep reading chapter after chapter. From the first book to this chapter here, I've been hooked and my sleep schedule has been a mess. i just cant stop

I got too depressed to keep reading this.

didn't dora see jen lose her arm and leg? how was THAT not brought up in their conversation? it seems like it would be pretty important. especially with how youve made it clear that losing limbs to magic for everyone else is pretty permanent.

Jen should've just tortured Richard for a bit. Would be more effective.

Very interesting development. I've read a lot of fanfics and very few of them have such interesting developments in progress with no clear results.
Most of unusual circumstances are reserved for plot devices so the authors could say "and because of that and after that (continuing plot)".
Now I'm really curious about what Draco has planned for Weasley that has Bella laughing and who this mysterious admirer as well.

Huh, so the Ginny is succeeding in her quest? I would expect loads of other girls fawning onto The Brat Who Lived if that was that easy.

Unless I'm mistaking this story with another longfic I've just read, didn't Jen took out the entirety of Lestrangers vault to Black vault?
And since (fanon) goblins are considered independent nation and do not bow to ministry, theoretically they should provide access even to convicted criminals if they slip into goblin foyer.
So either Lestrangers did not invoice for a single galleon from their vaults,
or their trickle income have a buffer of gold for that (but didn't Jen also close the vault?..). Hmm.

Hehe. Well, then the lesson is - do not cut connections to your relatives then? Even if you do not approve of the man she married? Although now I'm wondering about the source of the white magic. Will that eventually make Luna a white witch too? That's some Romeo and Juliet shit, thanks, but no thanks.

Strong Worm vibe with this magical duel. I like it.

“Do you mean ‘firearms’, by chance?” the Minister asked in a too-bland voice.

Amelia sighed and pulled out her wand. “Do you see this Minister? With one word i could erase your mind and reduce you to irrecoverable catatonia. Another and you have no choice but to obey my every whim. Two words and you die on the spot, there is nothing you could do. Instant, inescapable death. One more word and an unquenchable flame with just enough sentience to desire the death of every living thing it can touch will level this city.”

Amelia took a moment to breathe and take in the horrified look on the muggle Minister’s face. “So, I’m very sorry that I occasionally forget the name of your insignificant little pellet shooter while I’m contemplating my ability to reshape reality to my whim and personally cause devastation with a flick of my wand which would require tens of thousands of muggles in combined effort using advanced machines.”

Uhh... is there a scene missing? When did the kids at Candyland forget about her?

Also, this thing with Luna is... well, dumb comes to mind. Jen knows that Luna is from a light family, and that the Diadem is a Light (capital L) artifact tied to knowledge. Her giving it to Luna is clearly her chewing on the idiot ball for the sake of plot, and not in character. "Firing that Chekhov's Gun" isn't an excuse if it's fired almost randomly at one's own foot. I'm now convinced that the Luna relationship is shoehorned into this whole story just because the author likes Luna and because it generates "plot", even if the latter makes little sense. I really dislike when smart characters suddenly become stupid just so that they can get into trouble. What's the point of even writing a smart character if you just throw all that work away when you need a sudden infusion of conflict? It really detracts from story immersion!

What's the point of the Luna romance in this story? The character doesn't feel remotely like Luna (who's one of my favorite canon and fanon characters), the two characters have nothing at all in common and nothing to offer one another, yet it takes up a rather large portion of the words on the page. I get that characters need conflicts, but the conflicts with Luna all feel manufactured rather than organic, and add little. Should've just stuck with the Krum romance and left it at that. As it is the Luna elements feel like the author just loved Luna and shoved her in willy-nilly, then wrote her in a very non-Luna way because otherwise she'd have wandered right out of the plot in the same fashion.

All that said, I do like the worldbuilding around the Powers. That's what keeps the story interesting.

The Department of Mysteries bit makes zero sense. Sure, they have blackmail material on her, and CAN force her to join them. But why would they? She's already EAGER to join on her own! The only thing telling her about their blackmail material does is stoke resentment in what would otherwise have been a great working relationship. You only use that kind of thing if she chooses NOT to work for you, AND you actually need her to for some reason.

The only reason that any of that was in the story was to add tension, but it makes absolutely no sense from Croaker's perspective. Jen was interested in the job. She showed up for the "interview". She was excited about it. If he did NOTHING, she'd likely join within two years and be a great addition to the department. Now all he's done is create an enemy with unknown abilities, powerful political backing, and only a passing relationship with the rule of law FOR NO REASON! He turned what could've been easy into a situation where not just he but his entire department and possibly even government will have to watch their backs for the rest of time. It's dumb, and Croaker isn't otherwise portrayed as dumb.

Regarding your disclaimer, I think Draco just found the cabinet when he went to the room.

This isn't really specific to this chapter or to Jen (who is admittedly a sociopathic monster), but the philosophical discussion made me think about it. I'm really not sure if this is a personal difference or some sort of American culture difference, but I've never really understood the HP universes extreme pacifism. It's just so completely alien to my mindset to be upset with someone who kills in defense of innocents. And honestly in a post-Marvel world, lethal vigilante justice isn't that much of a stretch either.

The HP universe is either at war, in which case the people involved are effectively soldiers on a battlefield, or citizens protecting their homes from invaders seeking to destroy them and their way of life. Either instance has been met with lethal force for ages and for a society so out of date, you'd think they'd be more ok with lethal responses, not less.

If they aren't at war, then they're effectively so corrupted as to make Gotham City look trustworthy and actions taken by vigilantes should at least find some popular support by the ignorant and scared sheep that just want to be safe.

Again, not sure how other countries would react, but we all saw how bloodthirsty the US was post-9/11. It's totally incomprehensible to me why nearly every HP character seems to be Ghandi. No normal character ever seems to think it's ok to kill someone trying to kill you.

And then to top it all off, they are all super ok with Azkaban, a prison that tortures inmates in the worst way imaginable and their capital punishment isn't just death, but having your soul sucked out by a monster. Literally every death caused by the AK is more humane than either of those options.