Reviews for Exiled
Guest chapter 21 . 6/5
Here till the end and yet, the author has abandoned this story as well as the Perzoe fanfic. The only question I have though, is why write when you don't want to bother caring about the story or your readers? You may get pissed at me for writing this which is fair but I just don't understand why authors like you, write good stories, have people like your stories and then you just stop working on them?
jademist chapter 1 . 1/24
Your story was a joy to read, and I really admired your writing style. The way you’ve brought your characters to life is truly impressive. I have some ideas related to your story that I think you might like, and I’d be happy to adapt them in my own style if you’d consider commissioning me. My Discord ID is jademist84 feel free to DM me anytime!
Renan Gomes chapter 21 . 12/4/2024
Pelo amor de Deus, continua :'(
hunter.reads chapter 21 . 9/27/2024
This was amazing! Just absolutely incredible. It has been a while since ive read a fic that I found as interesting, exciting and intriguing as this one. I was literally buzzing with excitement and exhilaration, as I read through this story!
I have so many thoughts and I know this review isn't going to be anywhere near all of them, but I'll try my best to get at least some of them, even if it won't feel adequate to express my adoration and love for this fic

Perseus and his story, the secrets of his exile and everything revolving around him; the way you write and introduce all of that is so brilliantly intricate and carefully put, I was at the edge of my seat to know more. Every little snippet and every little nugget of information just made me want to know more. And the way you introduced it bit by bit, slowly unearthing more information as we went along, was just genius. I'm not joking when I say I was on the edge of my seat, literally buzzing with excitement to know more and to read just one more chapter. Because I very much was.

And oh boy, what a story this perseus is! I was really apprehensive in the first few chapters, as we met this percy and got introduced to his anger and desire for "revenge" (feels wrong to call it revenge, because it is *so much more than that* but I also can't find another word for it). In the beginning, i was just apprehensive and tentative about percy and the anger he held towards olympus, the gods and Zeus. Before I knew his story, i was just in thalia's shoes, finding it hard to see where he was coming from and what he wanted and so very confused. But once I did? Oh boy, maybe I shouldn't cheer for him as much as I do, but man do I want him to succeed. Not only do I find him justified in his anger and hate towards Zeus and olympus, but I also find his reason to want to remake olympus and make the council better, and less dictated by a tyrant, to be very much reasonable, even *right*. At some point, as I read this fic, the more chapters I read, i just found myself on perseus side. I wish for him to defeat Zeus and remove him from the throne. To tear down the current tyrannical olympus and remake a new and better one, that listens to more than just one being. That has a place and understanding for more than just the olympians. A place for the Titans (the ones who aren't worse than zeus), for the shunned like Hades, and for the forgotten minor gods. At some point, I just found myself understanding perseus. His desire for a better olympus, yes, but also his hurt and anger and rage. And I love that. I love that he was such an enigma and a mystery at first (and even seemed like just an enemy), and then we slowly got introduced to him and his story and slowly got to form our understanding of him and his pain. It made reading this fic a fantastic journey, that we got to unearth this perseus alongside thalia and the other characters.
Honestly, because of this change we got to go under through the story as we got to understand percy more, as soon as I read the last posted chapter, I wanted to go back and reread the entire thing with my new understanding of perseus. So I could see him, truly see him, in those first chapters, where before he was just an apprehensive, terrifying, angry god, and instead see everything I now know about him and have that same excitement about him as I have now.

I'm also, surprisingly, really invested in perseus's well being and a part of me really wish he could just *talk* with artemis. But I do love the desperation and anger and angst that lie between them. Watching them clash is really exciting, and also heartbreaking, especially after seeing things from artemis's pov through thalia's dreams. Both artemis and percy are just written really well. And you make them work, and make their past and emotions and reactions work so beautifully and so realistically, that you've managed to make me, someone who avoids artemisxpercy at all costs, really intrigued and interested to see where this would and could go. You could take their relationship in so many directions, and I have no idea which one you'd choose and I'm just excited for all of them!

The way you've taken the whole Kronos war and conflict from the percy jackson books, and made them anew with this perseus and his war against olympus, is so cool and refreshing. I love and adore that you can see parts of the original books peek through, but then percy comes and completely overwrites it, taking such smart and clever routes, in its place. Getting Bianca and Nico on his side, taking them to Hades, making an alliance with hades who's shunned and set aside from the rest of the olympians. The whole honesty of when bianca and nico later clash with thalia and they say "of course he's using us, but he's being honest about using us and not hiding anything, including his intentions, from us" in stark opposite of thalia's position with Zeus and olympus. I adore that persues takes this kind of stance with the demigods on his side. He gives them all the cards he can, all the information he can, and he let's them choose. I love that. And his honesty and intentions in just giving them as much information as he can (and as he knows it) and then letting them choose. I love that he several times is like "yeah, but after I offered them all this information, if they chose camp halfblood I would've just brought them there and left". I just love that honesty and the *choice* he gives them, in stark opposition to Zeus. It plays very beautifully with his character and very much shows his intentions and how different he is to Zeus and olympus. Which I just adore

And of course, he'd never let Kronos rise, he actually ensures Kronos can't rise again for another long time to come. He just used his rising to have Atlas on his side for a bit and when atlas wouldn't see things his way, put him right back under the sky. (And I'd wager, uses it to send a very clear message back to olympus, when he lets hermes see him doing this and afterwards let's him return with that information. He's so very clever in how he handles things like this, plans upon plans, and I adore percy being clever).
Stuff like that, really drives home that percy isn't just looking for mindless revenge against olympus and those who betrayed him. He still just wants olympus to be better. Stronger and better and, honestly, kinder, than Zeus and his council currently is. Of course, he's still looking for revenge, but I love those moments where you can see perseus still pursuing what got him to challenge Zeus and then thrown into tartarus in the first place. A better olympus and a better council.

I also adore Zoe and Phoebe. Their position and loyalty to perseus. Their return to his side and their "betrayal" of the quest and olympus. It's beautiful and genius and honestly really fun. I love their loyalty to him, through all these years, it's still there and they dont appear to even hesitate to join him. It was just *mwah* chefs kiss.
Including phoebe's history with him, the dream thalia saw of Phoebe as a slave and perseus saving her. It was a painful story and absolutely devastating with everything thalia saw and how Phoebe talked about it with her later, when she reprimanded her for calling perseus a monster for his actions then, when she didn't know - couldn't possibly know, the true monstrous actions of the slavers against the little kids. That was just devastating and really painful to read, but I loved the glimpse it gave into Phoebe and her connection to perseus. She's a demigod. She's family to him, of course he'd be brutal to the slavers who took her and hurt her.

The fact that it was hestia who gave thalia all of her dreams about perseus and his past. Adore it. Love it. Can't get enough of it. Of course she would. She's the hearth, she's home and family. She sees and understands him. She's not gonna take a side with either Zeus or percy, they're family. But she still understands and sees percy. All parts of him. and that she wants to give thalia just some of that understanding so that she holds as much of both sides as she can, in the upcoming battle and her upcoming choice. Gorgeous and brilliant. And so very fitting.
Thalia's dream into Artemis's side of what happened, with Zeus killing her hunters and threatening to kill more unless she joined him and helped defeat perseus. That was absolutely devastating and heartbreaking. It made me *ache* for her and percy. Made me ache so very desperately for them both to just understand each other again. For percy to know why artemis betrayed him (and i know he does, in this last chapter, when thalia passes on the dream hestia gave her and makes him see what happened to artemis then. But I also feel like he very much does not process it. Doesn't process what it means or what knowing all that could tell him of artemis and her actions then and now. He sees but doesn't process, doesn't connect to it. And I'm certain seeing this is gonna ripple through his being and through the story, if you continue it one day, and the possibilities of him knowing artemis's side, excites me to no end)

Honestly, I don't even know what I'd want for Percy and Artemis. It feels impossible for them to ever be at each other's sides again, after everything that happened. But a small part of me still just aches for *something* between them. Everything Leto said to Percy after the confrontation on Delos and artmeis's own actions and words, makes me think they both love each other still. Love each other to their very core, always have and always will. There's just so much hurt and pain between them. It's hard to imagine they can truly reconcile and have it feel natural, but...yeah.. I'm just in pain about them and aching, but unsure how it could be resolved. But very much excited for any possibility. I am hooked and more intrigued than ever

I very much also loved artemis finally just sticking it up to Zeus and leaving olympus to take her hunters away and hide them from Zeus. That Apollo joined her (and actually was the one to seek her out and make sure she knew her hunters were in danger once again) was beautiful and I cheered for her when she flipped off Zeus. She has been waiting to do that since he killed the first hunter back when he began forcing information about perseus and the rebellion out of her and she finally got to do it. It was still very devastating, when they appeared on Delos and Leto warned her of her unwelcome. As soon as leto appeared I was sat in anticipation. I could just *feel* that artemis and Apollo wasn't welcome after they turned their back on perseus back then. And that confrontation and all the words exchanged was sweet music to my ears. Painful and devastating, but sweet music all the same. I love seeing the mother in Leto about this, and how she wasn't outright rejecting of artemis and Apollo, but still very much disappointed and disapproving.
I love her words to perseus and how she talks with him after artemis and her hunters leave. How she knows the truth in his heart, that, yes, her love for him made her say the words he asked her to, but she didn't do it without pushing back at him. And that she, with the no-nonsense of a mother, tells him that she's not the rest of his new council and he should drop the tough-no feeling guy act he gives everyone else.
She's his mother, of course she sees him. Of course she sees his hurt and pain and anger and, maybe even, brokenness, he carries inside and shows no one. Of course she sees all parts of him. And I love that she let's him know with the no-nonsense straight forwardness of a mother. She gives him what he asks for and needs, because she understands, but she also isn't taking his bullshit and pushes back at him, because she knows and feels it is needed. I just love that interaction between them on Delos. And it honestly just made my heart ache even more. Both for percy and artemis. You just write them so well and intricately, every new chapter with them is a new wave of indescribable devastation and hurt and pain. I ache for them both, and I adore that there's made space for both sides. That you give understanding to both of them; it makes the hurt even more in depth and even better, more intricate and makes it all the sweeter. And I adore that kind of pain in fics and stories.

I also just love how casual perseus sometimes is when he shows up out of nowhere to have a chat with thalia. Not necessarily planting thoughts or doubts in her mind, but making her think. He doesn't see thalia as an enemy and I love that. Her and the other demigods, camp halfblood, they're not his enemy and he does everything he can to give them that opportunity to step aside. Olympus and Zeus is his enemy, and I just love how steadfast percy is in that. The entire time he's very clear about who his actual enemy/opposition is, and he never loses sight of that, no matter how much Zeus throws the other demigods into his path to stop him. So I just love how that shows itself, whenever percy shows up in front of thalia. Yes, he gets angry and provoked, at times. But he's also just very casual, sometimes, when he talks to her. He wants her to think for herself, to see olympus and the gods as they actually are, not as they want to be seen.
He just wants her to have a chance and a choice. Obviously, he's still wanting her to see the truth as he sees it, but I think, above all else, perseus just wants her to have a chance and a choice. A chance to be beyond the machinations of a corrupt and selfish olympus, to have her own choices beyond her father's. To me, at least, that's what he's trying to give her, every time he shows up and talks to her. Yes, partly because she's the child of the great prophecy, and the one to make the choice that's gonna preserve or raze olympus, but also just because she deserves to have those things. As does every demigod in the world. Which is what he's trying to give them, in his war against olympus. That same chance and choice he keeps trying to give thalia, that is what he's gonna give every demigod, once/if he defeats Zeus and can remake the council and olympus to be a better one. And I love how that shows in his interactions with thalia

I definitely have more to say, but maybe I should stop before this review gets even more absurdly long and ends up a rambling mess.
I love this fic very, very much. Just thinking about it makes me so excited and makes me buzzing so much i feel lke im shaking myself like I'm a snowglobe and I cant get enough snow. Your writing is beautiful and intricate, exciting and feels so carefully planned, every word feels like a brick laid in a temple or a thread inlaid in a beautiful tapestry. This fic certainly is a beautiful tapestry and the story and characters and just everything about it is gorgeous and exciting and so well written I'm in awe. If you ever return and continue this story, I will be an avid reader. And even if you don't, I promise you I will love this fic for years to come, probably till the end of the universe.

This perseus and his story has hooked itself into my brain and my thoughts have been haunted by your fic since I finished it two days ago. And if he ever stops haunting those thoughts i'll just return and reread this fic (which I will. I love rereading fics, and this one has skyrocketed to being one of my most favourite and most intriguing, so a reread someday in the future is set in stone, i promise you that)

Thank you so very much for sharing this fic. It is beautiful and gorgeous and so very fun and I love it with all my heart, and hopefully, I conveyed some of that with my many, many words in this review
lord of the east chapter 20 . 6/21/2024
Dammmmm
hodor450hodor chapter 20 . 6/6/2024
Your story is truly remarkable, beautifully written, and captivating from start to finish. It's unfortunate that it hasn't been updated recently. I sincerely hope to see it completed one day and eagerly await any possible updates in the future.
DodgyReptile chapter 21 . 5/10/2024
We can only ever hope this will get an update, sucks that it stopped here cause everyone was getting really invested in it
JettShay chapter 21 . 3/10/2024
I do hope you come back to this soon. I've read a few of your stories lately and the writing has improved after each and every one. This one might be my favorite so far
kevini33r5354 chapter 21 . 2/25/2024
hurry up man, this prolly the best fanfic ive read ever, but in the end percy and arty have to get together mk
Guest chapter 21 . 1/28/2024
Awesome story, really enjoying reading it - thanks so much for writing and sharing it!
romulocostacs53 chapter 21 . 1/15/2024
Você cancelou então, que pena, eu estava muito ansioso para ver o final.
coccacola99 chapter 21 . 1/5/2024
Please update
Guest chapter 21 . 12/21/2023
Grate story i started yesterday amd i love ir, it is still been write?
lukeanimelover chapter 1 . 12/12/2023
Will you be returning to your abandoned fics? I cant tell how long youve been gone or how long ago you wrote this but i hope you do. Im gonna follow your channel or whatever yoy call it
ReadingAddict335 chapter 21 . 12/3/2023
"Anaklusmos14" The legend is back
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