I kinda wish Everestein would meet Gilgamesh. I doubt you'd have that happen but still...

Your story is already perilously close to collapsing under its own weight with the upcoming Hogwarts, new dark lord, new magus order, alien invasion, Clocktower stuff and the tome's shenanigans. Worse still is your cast getting more bloated by the chapter. It's already turned to a Carnival Phantasm episode and actual HP part (with its 7 million characters) hasn't even started.

You're juggling too many subplots and characters and you're very likely to drop the ball. Or get burnout and quit. Which might have happened, looking at the dates.

I like what you're doing here, author. But you probably should've tagged it humor. Would've saved you some headache I'm sure.

OK I'm liking this CP direction you're taking, author.

I thought you were going for a serious vibe for your crossover, what with your modified Voldy and long Nasubabble treatises. This is a sharp turn towards Carnival Phantasm. I'm neutral about it at the moment.

Good job on being able to write sufficiently silly Nasubabble, author.

my favorite part of this story is how competent British magical characters are in the moderately AU Harry Potter universe.

it's less of a blame game and more of a deconstruction then most authors feel ready to tackle.

hope more gets posted soon! I really love this story

Why in the hell is there just randomly kakashi in this story!? Like no explanation or reason just fuck you he's there and it's not even like your trying to work in the naruto universe or anything from what I've seen it was a good story but this honestly kind of ruined it because now it just feels weird like your just throwing things together without care its lazy and doesn't make since if you want a character in then you should explain why and make it work up till then the world made sense now it just feels like a crack fic bye

...this story is too chaotic when it comes to point of views...i came to read a story about harry potter learning Obscure magic...instead hes basically a side character with barely any screen time. all i get from this story is a book is weird and has lots of knowledge.

Update?

The cross-overness is getting out of hand. Though it is funny to watch Kakashi blend with the fate characters, I wonder how Ichigo will do.

This was a fairly enjoyable read. For a crossover, you didn't use too many canon events, which made the original parts more interesting to experience. While the setup had some slightly contrived reasons, they allowed for interesting scenes. I really enjoyed the way you tried to tie the two worlds together.

My main complaint for the story so far has been the integration of different plot elements. I don't know how long it took to update the story between some chapters, but certain plot points seem to have been forgotten during the writing. For instance, the school Kiritsugu has been running was briefly mentioned in an earlier chapter. There was even a scene with a named character and his family being recruited by Tamamo. After that, there were only brief mentions of the school, and only in vague terms. Another point of confusion was Ilya's schooling. You initially stated she had gotten a letter - she even did some shopping for school supplies. But then later on, that plot point was completely dropped in favor of her teaching at the Kiritsugu school. It made me wonder for several chapters if I misread something. I don't know what your writing process is, but I do recommend reading your writing if you've forgotten things during the years. I certainly have been guilty of the same.

That being said, this has been a fun read. No matter how messy the plot has been in some points, I kept reading because your writing is fun. I look forward to what comes next and hope you take some of my suggestions to heart.

-Zetsumei

Can't wait for the next chapter and do you know when it will come out?

This is really interesting. And chaotic. Still good though.

At this point I'm just getting confused with where this whole story is going haha. Not really a big fan of harems either, I get shirou got some lady followers and I think I remember you said this was shirou from a different timeline from counter force guardian, EMIYA, harem shirou etc and now it just seems like it's mixed into harem either way. Well it was alright so far, kept reading through to see if anything interesting would happen but I guess I'll just stop here.