This was beautiful . Your writing style - so interesting - yet so lucid . And the short poems on the top were like the icing on the cake.. loved it . Keep writing

Ha! Love the random Tintin reference.
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Oh my god! Awwwweeee! I don't have any words left! You are a great writer and should write more!
Looooooovvvvvvveeeeeee it!

:)

Tobias' point of view

You are such agood writer! Please continue it I only want to know if they have kids!

Omg. I loved the last chapter and the epilogue. The end to the epilogue was so funny. I couldn't stop laughing. All in live this was such a short and sweet story! :)
Can't wait for November!
#Acacia

Yeah! Nice ending... I must say, chapter 9 is very... short and not that detailed. I mean, "I will" and then it goes to the epilogue and it's a bit weird. But thinking about it, that's what happens in movies. After "I will" the scene fades to the wedding scene, narrated by Tris and so on so... yeah, it's good that way. Thanks and MAKE ME A TIME MACHINE! I NEED NOVEMBER!

Haha the last chapter and the epilogue were very Nice! And the end of the epilogue was very funny too! I think it Is a really nice ending for the characters and you wrote that very week! i Just have a question: Did Tobias change of university? He was studying at Chicago wasn't he? But in the last chapter you say that he studied in Sydney...i am not sure i got it! XD and i also wanted to ask you: Where are the quotes you quote at the beginning of the chapters from? i really like them! ;)

I KNOW! NIALL IS IN LOVE WITH TRIS! :P Yucks.

Wanted to put Taken but the chapter is too happy :P

You know I'll beg, steal or borrow,
I'll bring you love, love, love
I, look at you,
And I see,
What I've been looking for,
Now it's very clear to me,
We should be together
You, make me feel,
Like could reach,
For the impossible,
And knowing how much you care,
I'll be there forever
You know I'll beg, steal or borrow,
To bring you sunny days,
And in a hundred ways,
I'll bring you love
You know I'll beg, steal or borrow,
To make your garden grow,
And most of all you know,
I'll bring you love, love, love
Love, love, love
I, always knew,
That the world,
Could be a finer place,
So why do I have to wait,
Better late than never
You, you're like me,
You believe,
Love makes it all worthwhile,
And although we've just begun,
We'll go on forever,
You know I'll beg, steal or borrow,
To bring you sunny days,
And in a hundred ways,
I'll bring you love
You know I'll beg, steal or borrow
To make your garden grow,
And most if all you know,
I'll bring you love, love, love
Love, love, love
You know I'll beg, steal or borrow
To bring you sunny days,
And in a hundred ways,
I'll bring you love, love, love
Love, love, love

It is either I am not feeling it, or it is too rushed.
Song! :
Na na na na na na
Na na na na na na
He touch you hand,
I die a little,
_
_
_
Na na na na na na
When you walk by,
I try to say it,
But then I freeze,
And never do it,
My toungue gets tied,
The words gets trapped
_
But I see you with him,
Slow dancing,
Tearing me apart,
'Cause you don't see.
Whenever you kiss him,
I'm breaking,
Oh, how I wish that was me

Argh, hahaaa

Arrrrrrrrr

DAFAAAQ?! 1 OR 2 HOURS?! Oh my GOD! That's hella crazy! This is so good, GAAAAH!
I'm so mixed up with feelings right now, like, I don't know how Tris will talk with Tobias.
I understand Tris, AND Tobias, I don't know whos side to take, sheez!
AND GOD ZEKE IS SO ADORABLE AND CUTE I LUV HIM!

BORING!
LOVE THE REFERENCES!
LOVE THE IMAGERY!
Girl I see it in your dissapointment,
'Cause I'm the foolish one that you've _,
I've weaved your heart,
I torn it apart,
And girl what a mess I made upon your innocence,
And no one in the world deserve this,
But here I am,
Asking you for one more chance
Can we fall,
One more time,
Stop the tape,
And rewind,
But if you walk away,
I know,
I'll fade,
'Cause there is nobody else,
It's gotta be you
Only you
It's got to be you
Oh, only you
:)