Reviews for The Dragon of Duskendale
Machoking chapter 5 . 10/12/2015
The first action scene is quite good, as was Aelor's commentary, particularly the line about the hammer and the anvil. The usual thing would be to have your main character lead the decisive charge. It was a good change.
Machoking chapter 4 . 10/12/2015
Aerys seems appropriately paranoid. Maybe slip in a "burn them all!" next time?
Machoking chapter 3 . 10/12/2015
Duskendale really should be more politically important. It's somewhat large and near King's Landing, which would mean it could raise a decent number of men. I don't remember reading it mentioned in canon much.
Machoking chapter 2 . 10/12/2015
You write well. It isn't quite on the level of "can't tell the difference between you and GRR Martin" but it gets the job done. Your prose pretty much tells the story you want to tell without any obvious fanfic tells.
Machoking chapter 1 . 10/12/2015
I love the premise. You get a lot of "Robert's legitimate child" fics but I've never seen something like this.
G27th chapter 7 . 10/12/2015
I can't wait for the the battle against Robert and I hope rhaegar dies whether it be by the hands of aelor or Robert. As usual man, awesome chapter!
Hackslash24x7 chapter 6 . 10/11/2015
Glad to see a realistic character who is prone to mistakes unlike other stories and an even better battle scene. Amazing chapter.
Silver crow chapter 6 . 10/11/2015
Oh and I hope your considering the idea of Aelor kicking Rhaegars ass when he turns up Rhaegar doesn't deserve to lead anything at this point for the mess he's caused and it would hurt moral if he took over the loyalist army from Aelor think about it would the men rather have the man who spent the first part of the war hiding away in the tower of joy while they all died because he couldn't keep it in his pants and the man who has no real military experience or the man whose lead them from the start and is a proven warrior and General so when Rhaeger asks for command Aelor kicks the shit out of him and Jon C if he fan boys to much over his Silver prince getting hurt
Silver crow chapter 6 . 10/11/2015
I'm guessing the White dragon isn't happy now and great battle btw but like I said I'm waiting for his battle with Robert which im hopeing will take place soon and like I said I can't wait for Aelor to kill him

Anyway great chapter again can't wait for your next one
ReaderofFF1 chapter 6 . 10/10/2015
Ohh Aelor lost that one :( even though he defeated many the important ones managed to escape, while sad it also shows that Aelor isn't perfect something that makes the story better, there are many stories out there when a character is perfect and never faces any obstacle, that or any opposition is defeated in like 3 lines , and while I am fan of victory, such things just reduces the quality of the story. It is great to see that this story will definitely not become a victim of that :D

That said now that Aelor recognizes that his standard plan will not succeed every time he will need to correct this flaw, it is time to get better commanders at his side, that or being more creative, he has ser Barristan Selmy with him, he can get some experience from the strong knight who was a integral part of the war of the Ninepenney Kings.

Great chapter, the battle was very well done and it will definitely help Aelor to improve as a warrior and as a leader. Now it is time to go and crush Robert Baratheon that drunk, whoremonger needs to get his ass kicked by Aelor :D

Awesome read as always, Keep up the good work :D
Guest chapter 6 . 10/10/2015
I think Robert will escape to the Stony Sept in the Riverlands with an army. He can attack Ashford with a portion of his men, Mace Tyrell will see this as an opportunity to crush the rebellion and a fool looking to earn glory will most likely take it. Robert retreats, heads for the Stony Sept, the Battle of the Bells, Robert regroups with Jon Arryn and Ned Stark. Aelor gathers what forces he can, his men, Oberyn and the Dornishmen, Reachmen under the command of Randyll Tarly, sends Mace and the rest of his army to lay siege to Storm's End. Rhaegar comes out of hiding, assumes command of the royalist forces under the command of Ser Jon Connington Lord of Griffon's Roost and Hand of the King at the Battle of the Bells accompanied by Kingsguard Prince Lewyn Martell and Ser Jonothor Darry. Rhaegar convinces Aelor to join forces with him, as much as Aelor hates Rhaegar for causing the war, they needed each other to end it. And comes the Battle of the Trident.
G27th chapter 6 . 10/10/2015
Noyssss mate I like how your upping the word length for the chapters... Aelor better take that throne from aerys! Old bastard is worthless
Ramzes chapter 5 . 10/10/2015
Looks like things are turning the right way. Why don't you tell him all about them indeed, Rykker?
Hackslash24x7 chapter 5 . 10/9/2015
Great chapter. Hope there will be Aelor vs Robert. Keep up the good work man.
Silver crow chapter 5 . 10/9/2015
Please please please oh lord above I'm begging you have Aelor win this war and become king Aelor the Great Dragon at the end of the war it would seem pointless if you add a Oc as intresting and great as Aelor in this time period of game of thrones and not have him win

As for who his future Queen is I'll admit I was intrested when he though about marrying Catilyn but please don't marry him to Lysa that's cruel to him and besides Cat the only other woman I can think of it Cersei and if you do go down the path of marrying the Dragon and Lion have it so cersei and Jaime didnt act like the royal family at the time and they've got a normal brother sister relationship

Also bear in mind that in the future little finger can't raise to power as he only rose thanks to Jon so you might as well kill him off early

Also I hope Aelor kicks the shit out of Rhaeger when they meet and I hope he kills Robert in the last battle of the war anyway great story so far hope you update soon
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