Reviews for The Return
Warrof chapter 5 . 1/31/2016
Good, A 2 female 'Harem' is much more believable. I can't imagine Tsunade wanting to share with even one other woman easily, much less 3.
Warrof chapter 2 . 1/31/2016
In Canon Nawaki died before Dan, but after Tsunade, Jiraya, and Orochimaru earn the title of Sannin (which is a really stupid title cause it just means 3 ninja, literally)... I believe at least. Cause Dan and Tsunade didn't meet until after Nawaki's death.
BelkaDidNothingWrong chapter 9 . 1/29/2016
Nice chapter, considering your age your writing style is very good. The story itself is interesting and it was a good idea to give Itachi a new purpose outside of akatsuki, which will probably change the dynamics of aforementioned group.
FanFicFreak6669 chapter 4 . 1/29/2016
Just out of curiosity, instead of 'Raion', have you considered using 'Shishi'?

I can't speak for all the fans of this story, but 'Raion no Konoha' sounds sort of... forced in my opinion.
dragonfighter11 chapter 9 . 1/24/2016
Itachi vs. Fugaku? I really hope you don't kill off Itachi like that xP Itachi is waaay more badass than Fugaku, EMS or not haha Great story, can't wait for an update~
Shoveler chapter 9 . 1/24/2016
really good
Razorbeast chapter 9 . 1/18/2016
Great chapter.

Can Naruto have chakra chains jutsu. :)

I hope Mikoto, Tusunde and Naruto can be a big happy family :)

Thank you for the update :)
flame55 chapter 9 . 1/15/2016
This is great
Guest chapter 6 . 1/14/2016
As far as the whole 'Flashback' issue goes, a small suggestion would be to summarize a part of it in the current timeline's dialogue. For instance, the Team Hiruzen flashback could be cut off after the quartet headed off towards the compound, with a quick narrative on what happened afterwards. Not only would it probably appeal to more fans, but it'd also help ease back into current-tense, as well as give more opportunities to further character/relationship developments.
Joker Army chapter 9 . 1/14/2016
Know the pain of high school good luck. Can't wait for itachi being hunting for revenge
Guest chapter 9 . 1/13/2016
Wow your nothing more then a low life piece of shit I could and can write a better story then every pathetic little bitch ass author on this website because everyone on this website is nothing more then immature children who suck dick at writing stories
Guest chapter 8 . 1/13/2016
Reported for sucking sasgays small pinky sized pecker
Guest chapter 7 . 1/13/2016
Reported for homosexual pairings
Brehze chapter 9 . 1/13/2016
AmaiJg xhapter
Latherial chapter 9 . 1/13/2016
Interesting story so far, looking forward to the next chapter.
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