Fantastic joke. Found she was right.

Very well written. I’m enjoying this story greatly so far.

Lovely to see a different Hermione in her home environment.

Will the story still be updated on here

DAAAAAMN, so many twists!

I gotta say, the writing has really only gotten better as the story goes on and its still well plotted. That is extremely rare after a couple hundred thousand words.

Oh all the weaknesses to give harry yours will always be the most freakin weird one. A panic attack that only hits when you feel it's needed... There's so much more you could of done no offense but this weakness sucks Ass. Like you could of played on it way better then hit did but you kind of forgot about it till your like "oh yea harry hates being trapped... But he's okay in tight spaces locked trunks and all that"

I've noticed that a lot actually you forget about a lot of what you've wrote like harry suddenly being the youngest twin? When in the first chapter he was the eldest twin... Oh and being twins I'm pretty sure in the first chapter they weren't twins... But I don't know been a few days since I read it

primordial soul goo, huh? This one's gettin weird lol. I'm still into it though. ON TO PART 3

It would be easier for Luna to steal a tyrannosaur tooth from Londons natural history museum. Yes they do have some real T-Rex teeth as I've seen them.
Not as fun as the American theft though.

To fool suggesting this is a pedophile fantasy, Harry has no pulled a single move on those girls.
Like real life eighteenth century girls purebloods face marriage to men three times their age anyway. Muggleborns face death or being whored out. As title states, HARRY IS SAVING THEM!
My father was twice my mothers age and she pursued him until she got him. It's a hilarious anecdote in our family history.
Myself at thirty eight had to fend off amorous advances from a tipsy seventeen year old girl .. some girls grow up incredibly fast in UK!
I'm now forty four - my partner is twenty seven & she's far more mature than I'll ever be.

Juliet was 13 and Romeo was 14 when they made love.
Henry VII mother had him at 12. Wizard society is still partly stuck in middle ages - more so in this universe.
Get over it - this is a story & a pretty good one too.

Read chapters 58 & 59 on your website. Brilliant doesn't begin to describe them or rest of your story.

I tried to skim through it but I can't. You have an adult man manipulating little girls- not even 10 years old- over and over. It's basically a pedophile's grooming fantasy.

Back in the 80 a hundred pounds would be closer to 200 dollars but I don't know why you'd bring that up... They're supposed to be British in England? We don't give a shit about dollars we only hear about that on TV

I'm reading this fic for the 6th time now and each time i read i find new thing that i missed in the previous read. only sad thing is that this fic is not getting updated fast enough for lot of us :P dam can't wait the next one, next one and so forth

So, this review is basically two parts

First: You are a fantastic writer. You always seem to be coming up with new and interesting things about your magical world and new plot points that could themselves be the basis of a whole other fic. You are just always adding something new to keep things spicy, and you do a wonderful job of it

Second: I think the 57th chapter, as of now, the last chapter we published in over a year and a half, has major problems with how it affects the story. It just seems like it upsets the underlying structure of the story. Throughout most of the story, it has been about subterfuge, politics, and exploring the way the magical world works and it’s history. Now, we don’t get to see any house politics going on at Hogwarts, though I do have to acknowledge that that is not a problem started by this chapter, this is just the first where we see the effects. There is just no possible rival in Slytherin house that we can take seriously anymore. All of the dark kids in Harry’s year answer to him now, and you could try using an older heir, but you’ve already shown Volf, the dueling Captain of the entire house, is easily bitch-slapped by Harry whenever he feels like it. There’s just no more interesting conflict there. If you want to play politics outside of Hogwarts, that could work, but the tone seemed all wrong this chapter. Lucius and James’ arguments didn’t seem to fit their characters, especially Lucius. Often the tone of the argument felt as though it was meant to be comedic and a gag when throughout the story we have always seen Lucius take matters like this extremely seriously. It just seemed like you demeaned two great characters into becoming a sideshow joke. As for the Animagus ritual, how has no one ever figured out that killing a Unicorn is what Carries the curse? That seems like a pretty big detail. Also, the whole “being trapped in a timeless space for over a year” felt really out of place and like a fanfic of lesser quality had shoved its way in. There was so much build up to it, but then it was just “(Blank) learned how to do this” and then George and Harry had a conversation, also he figured out Harry is lord Slytherin. It just seemed very strange.

These criticisms don’t mean that I don’t like the story, in fact, I absolutely love most of it (Around the winter festival at the New Slytherin Manor is when I start to see problems with how the plot with progress). I just wanted to share my thoughts on the matter, because it seems likely that either you made this chapter, didn’t enjoy it very much, fell out of love with the project, or no longer has a need for it and lost interest, or, you had already lost most of your Interest and didn’t put as much effort into this one before stopping updating.

Regardless of everything else in this review, thank you for sharing your wonderful ideas with us! Good luck with your professional writing gig!

I’ve never seen an idea like this before in all of the Harry Potter fanfiction I’ve read over the years, you just keep coming up with great new ideas after great new idea! You definitely have what it takes to be a professional fantasy writer. Also, I love the way you’ve portrayed Lockhart, and how he isn’t actually a complete failure as headmaster. He actually reminds me a lot of the image of Dumbledore we’re originally introduced to in the books of the old and slightly senile headmaster who loves to have silly fun with his students. Great job!

It's been almost two years since I got the notification for this chapter. Here's wishing you well wherever you are, with whatever you're doing. And a hope that you'll return to this story