bro you know that if you give the sayuri (indra) chakra to naruto, naruto can awaken the rinnegan without having the sharingan.

Well From chapter 20 you fucked up

this was a really good hoop to see the rest real quick

The CRA thing is stupid. Having the girl had multiple partner won’t help at all lol thats just dumb. Since the girl will be the one to carry the baby. So multiple partner is nonsense. This where i dropped this

Hahahaha! Fem Sasuke catches the sword by the bladed edge yet doesn't lose her hands? What a joke. For the strength you've made Naruto have you were may as well keeping the Truth Orbs as they should have been.

This fic has an interesting premise but EVERYTHING is rushed.

Picked a different chapter by chance to see if anything changed, and all I see is that you condone rape LOL You're disgusting.

Gave it my best, but it's obvious you didn't so much as give this a second glance before posting. Shame. We need more well written, and complete stories. Try harder, if you ever come back.

With the amount of Romaji you've been using, it was incredibly immersion breaking to see these 'Japanese' characters saying "Y'all". Might want to come back and fix this nonsense.

die in hell

LOVE IT. Def your best story.

ALL I WANT IS FOR THOES DUMBASS NOT TELLING EACH OTHER THEY LOVE EACH LOOKING ASS TO DATE EACH OTHER LIKE WHAT THE HELL AUTHER IT'S A HELL OF A STORY BUT DAMMMMMMMMMMMNN ALSO FINISH THE STORY!
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Pls finish this story things like this makes me feel like I left something out of my life so pls finish it
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The CRA that's such bullshit

yay

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