geez, we get it already. Dad's are just sperm donors and ATM's. give it a rest, the guy is dead.

Nice chapter, and yes Windu should come back as a force ghost. Though maybe after Anakin is already a Jedi.

balance the jedi have no idea what balance is. only by using both the light and the dark side is there balance

Uuhh, KP could be a pp joke somewhere somehow.

I cant wait until you get the plot moving again. It seems like at almost every step, Sidious is coming out a good bit ahead, and worse than that the GDL is already the underdog in this battle, and also the only side not controlled by the Sith. On one side, we have the Republic led by Sidius with worryingly large amounts of Humanist sentiment, on another there is the Separatists which are practically slaves of C’Boath, and then the last, tiny dot in the face if the other two beasts is the GDL, with a small unassailable pocket to protect the Jedi and their younglings should the worst come to pass.
Honestly, with how many resources and secret fleets both Sidius and C’Boath have going for them, I can’t help but wish things were going a bit easier for the GDL. I love the story so far, but I do so hope you don’t fall into the trap of having overwhelming odds stacked against Harry and the GDL and then have them win because of plot armor. A good bit of iffy ‘it could go either way’ sentiment always makes things more interesting, at least in my opinion.
Anyway, thank you for your writing up to this point. This is certainly one of the best fanfictions of this fandom, and certainly the best crossover I’ve ever seen between HP and Star Wars.

Have you thought about using expanded space to utilize thermal storage units to store the heat produced by the stealth ships? You can even drain that thermal energy - usually by steam-driven generators - to return energy to the ship.

I mean what im about to say in the nicest way possible, but there are so many consistency errors in this novel. I mean i havent wven finished 7 chapters and you change the lore of your own story each chapter. Maybe its because the chapters are so long and you just forget? I wont even complain about the logic behind aayla and harrys conversation about them not feeling jealousy. Thaf literally made no sense because harry didnt even know she was interested in girls, but they were connected so he shpuld have known? She could clearly sleep with soneone and harry would never know. Honestly, aayla sounds like a whore who wants to get a taste of everyone but has no control or maybe its more of a rebellious teenager who wants to disobey the order again because she got away woth it the first time. And harry just seems like a simp who is afraid of anyone falling to the dark side so he will just play along. Now lets get to some of the problems about lore from early chapters to now, like lily traveling with fay. In the first chapter, she couldnt leave harrys side more than a mile and now they are nowhere even near each other. Maybe mention the why. I said it before i think or maybe i just thought it but fay and lily are the most useless teachers ever. Fay literally taught him nothing during the time they were together besides maybe politics. She didnt teach him her mind attack trick, she hasnt taught him to heal which she is suppose to be amazing at. Shes not teaching him how to look into the force for the future like she can, i understand the veil is affecting her but ahe still isnt. And the same thing for lily, she taught him a few tricks and charms on twilek to stay alive but everything else she is forcing him to learn it himself without a teacher. Shes pathetic. At least shes teaching him runes but, oh yeah, shes more focused on teaching fayvrunes. Of course back to fay, she couldnt wven tesch him battle precognition well. When he went to dooku, he could only do one of those little droid thingies. While aayla, a year younger can do 5. Harry is the master teaching fay new force techniques while fay is doing absolutely nothing. She is grotesque. And now he is busy teaching younglings when he should be training him self. Half him create a video and if the younglings cant learn then thats on them or idk, have FAY DO THE MAJORITY OF THE TEACHING FOR ONCE LIKE THE TEACHER SHE IS SUPPOSE TO BE. Instead shes just spending her time with lily. Also, when did padme, aayla and harry get close at all? I remember when they first met, they acted like she didbt even exist. Too caught up with reuniting with one another. And then boom, aayla is giving her a hug a kiss on the cheek acting like they have been friends for a lifetime. But then again, aayla is a whore who wants to grind her body on anything she finds attractive and then put her lips on it. And this might be the most cringeworthy thing in the novel but wtf is with the winking? Do you know anyone in your life that actually winks? Never in my entire life have i seen someone wink without explaining what a wink is. There were a few other problems but i believe i hace alreadyvmentioned them in different reviews and i rather not do it again. Sorry for the long post, and sorry for the spelling mistakes. I actually had to edit this, or maybe im just posting twice? Who knows, i cant read anymore, the amount of lesbianism and polygamy in this i find unappealing. Bye

I mean what im about to say in the nicest way possible, but there are so many consistency errors in this novel. I mean i havent wven finished 7 chapters and you change the lore of your own story each chapter. Maybe its because the chapters are so long and you just forget? I wont even complain about the logic behind aayla and harrys conversation about them not feeling jealousy. Thaf literally made no sense because harry didnt even know she was interested in girls, but they were connected so he shpuld have known? She could clearly sleep with soneone and harry would never know. Honestly, aayla sounds like a whore who wants to get a taste of everyone but has no control or maybe its more of a rebellious teenager who wants to disobey the order again because she got away woth it the first time. And harry just seems like a simp who is afraid of anyone falling to the dark side so he will just play along. Now lets get to some of the problems about lore from early chapters to now, like lily traveling with fay. In the first chapter, she couldnt leave harrys side more than a mile and now they are nowhere even near each other. Maybe mention the why. I said it before i think or maybe i just thought it but fay and lily are the most useless teachers ever. Fay literally taught him nothing during the time they were together besides maybe politics. She didnt teach him her mind attack trick, she hasnt taught him to heal which she is suppose to be amazing at. Shes not teaching him how to look into the force for the future like she can, i understand the veil is affecting her but ahe still isnt. And the same thing for lily, she taught him a few tricks and charms on twilek to stay alive but everything else she is forcing him to learn it himself without a teacher. Shes pathetic. At least shes teaching him runes but, oh yeah, shes more focused on teaching fayvrunes. Of course back to fay, she couldnt wven tesch him battle precognition well. When he went to dooku, he could only do one of those little droid thingies. While aayla, a year younger can do 5. Harry is the master teaching fay new force techniques while fay is doing absolutely nothing. She is grotesque. And now he is busy teaching younglings when he should be training him self. Half him create a video and if the younglings cant learn then thats on them or idk, have FAY DO THE MAJORITY OF THE TEACHING FOR ONCE LIKE THE TEACHER SHE IS SUPPOSE TO BE. Instead shes just spending her time with lily. There were a few other problems but i believe i hace alreadyvmentioned them in different reviews and i rather not do it again. Sorry for the long post, and sorry for the spelling mistakes. The app doesnt really want to auto correct. I should have aplit it into paragraphs, oh well

Did you forget your story? Im sorry if that was vague but im talking about harry being just as powerful if not more so when he was found. Maybe this was just from the councils perspective and they didnt know how powerful harry is? I mean they tested his midichlorians and they said it was 5x more powerful than master yoda. Master yoda was arpund 20k which means harry would be around 100k. Anakin, as far as i know, was only around 30 to 40k. This is partially why im annoyed how he isnt heads and shoulders above everyone else. I understand why he might not be as strong as his clanmates in lightsaber training since he literally only just started that since fey couldnt teach him and they were learning for years. But stealth, the mind, precognitive, and other things that you have suggested that aaylabis better than him at, i feel like he should be able to wipe the floor with her in any force ability. Im really annoyed at lily not teaching her son anything it seems. Fine, dont teach but at least give him some ideas that he could try and learn. He could have ised obliviate on rhose people so they wouldn’t know that he used any of those abilities back on tatooine instead just hoping they believe dooku did it. But she probably never even gave the idea. Honestly, im struggling tonunderstand lilys point in the story besides possibly being a love interest to fay. I mean she is already adamant abput not teaching him anything and letting him learn things on himself. Fay cant teach him anything besides the techniques she already knows which means the entire jedi order should know but it doesnt really seem like shes teaching him some of the unique stuff that she knows. Like her healing, maybe give some suggestions so he could create new abilities to heal people. Shes incredibly strong with legilmency or something similar but it doesnt seem she is teaching him any of that since apparently even aayla has a better mind than him. So what are they doing? He’s brainstorming while fay and lily just talk or distract him? Maybe give some new ideas here and there to see if he could do it?

Honestly not a fan of the harem route if you go that way. It feels forced since harry and aayla have this bond that none other can match. Granted im not a fan of aayla either and im dreading the fact these 2 will be together apparently for the rest of the novel. You know, about whole non separating thing

Rather good chapter for this and as for the Mace force ghost I could see it as something that would potentially happen. They know a bit more about force ghosts and it's something that is more often associated with stronger individuals. Maybe not so much just stronger individuals but those with a connection to someone still living and a strong enough sense of self and purpose to be able to manifest. I would picture him more as the standard type of force ghost sporadic appearances offering brief moment of council.

it would be interesting to see Mace come back as a Force Ghost

My problem is that it doesnt really seem that harry is ang different from the others. He is supposed to have 5x more midichloriana than yoda. So it would make sense why he could do things so much easier than any others. But they are doing things without a focii just as well as harry is unless you stary creating abilities so advanced that there is no hope of these people ever achieving it then it kind of makes Harry not as important. As far as i can twll they arent even doing spells or using their finger like a wand.

I hope Harry uses this as a chance to recruit a large number Vratix and gather the resources to farm the ingredients for making Bacta then send them to Ruusan

Just did a reread/ listen. Just a couple general thoughts. Palpatine thoughts and scenes are still good bc it shows him fighting back and despite all the success the Jedi have had it still shows his mind isn’t a paper tiger.

A thought on lemons and limes. I generally find them to be a waste of time in your stories and skip them. The action, dialogue, world building, and logical perspective you bring to everyone is what I read your stories for. I would prefer if you would just do the fade to black someone is about to have sex scenes. We don’t need details. Maybe that’s just me.

The thing I like most about your stories is that good guys are proactive. In a ton of stories it’s the good guys in a position of power are so incompetent that they can’t find or act against their hidden enemies. You have the hidden enemy thing going to but you have Harry/ Ranma always taking basic precautions and building up their own factions power and preparedness. It just makes them and everyone else much more competent.