Interesting story!
I like your character development so far!
Really want to see them when they realize Naruto has the kyuubi!
Hope to read more soon!
Good luck!

Hello there, Chapter 9 turned out pretty good, especially this nice little naruhina moment at the end of it. You now what would have been a hilarious idea? Hehe its a bit (and with that i mean massively) out of character for hinata, but what if she had been reading... Icha Icha Paradise! Maybe you could someday write a little omake, where hinata tries to read Jirayas infamous legacy to boost her confidence or whatever. You would earn my undying respect in no time! Well, have a nice day.

Hi there, im now reading chap. 7 but i have a question. Did you forget about the hinata vs. Hanabi fight? Maybe i was just too tired and went into brain afk mode. But how you set that up with the talk with hiashi and mentioning kakashi as her sensei for the day, i thought that you would somehow implement a way she can somehow atleast achieve a draw against hanabi. Especially with all the spars she got that day. I can imagine, that hinata doesnt get lots of chances to spar against a high level hyuuga and therefore lacks crucial fighting experience. And since she had plenty of different opponents and even fought sasuke fairly well, considerung she just beat our favourite energy bundle in a tiring spar, she should have made the biggest progress in a day since a long time and could have a chance against her sister. Ignorig the fact, that hinata could never fight hanabi with the intention to straight out dominate her. Anyway, keep the good work up. Im really enjoying your retelling so far!

I haven't started reading this fic yet, but i just read your bio and i must say, I really really really hope that you will go all out to the end and finish your 4 piece installement. Nice titles btw, I really like the sound to them. If you ever struggle with writing this fic, despair not. I am writing a book myself (in german though) and as a fellow author and naruto fanboy I will brace myself for an epic tale. Have a nice day, author-sama.

Very nice chapter. That pretty much sums it up. Really enjoyed seeing the bumps along the road between the people and the interactions between sasuke and sakura were really good. Looking forward to the next one

What's this? Drama between two fictional characters in a fanfiction? Is this real life!? Do you know how hard it is to find fanfics that are not afraid to have the character be flawed and make stupid mistakes? In my personal experience, very hard.

And I think that is what seperates a good fanfic from a great or even a fantastic one, making them have flaws or make flawed decisions are what makes them appear more human and in term more relatable. Most of the time in fanfics that I've read, the author just make Naruto either perfect from the get go or have the relationship between him and Hinata rock solid when they are just starting out as genins. There's almost no dilemma to be seen in their relationship and even if there was one, the author doesn't give it much focus and it's over before it even begins and none of the characters learn anything from it.

So what I find amazing with this fanfic is that the scene between Hinata and Naruto in this chapter is that the characterization is so spot on that it feels like I'm actually reading the manga again, only with just words and no pictures. Which begs the questions... *drum roll*

...Are you Kishimoto in disguise?

PS: Great chapter, loved it from beginning to end.

add an her before ample forehead. maybe make the passagem of time clearer . sakura or else isnt bolded. add apóstrofo to sides and cuz. sorry look at Sakura paragraph needs restructuring

"...I just feel the need to ... beat the crap out if him". This segment with Naruto and Hinata was very funny and well executed!

that was great

Don't you mean Haku? Not Haru?

Good chapter I like how you made Hinata and Naruto mistake what they thought the other thought about them.

Naruto thinking Hinata is scared of him because of the fox and her family.

And Hinata thinking Naruto saw her the same as her family.

It was good seeing them come up to there conclusions, hope they solve the matter themselves though and start a friendship soon.

The Sakura and Sasuke development was good and I hope Sakura has learned her lesson about being pushy with Hinata, she deserved to be pushed into talking to Sasuke.

Wow! This chapter was intense.

I didn't see any glaring errors in this chapter, save for the A/N (you actually misplaced the currencies) and CARALHO MANO, agora que eu percebi que tu é BR!

Anyway... this story is awesome. I like how it has a few quirks from Mexican novels, where you think that things are gonna settle down and the characters are going to like each other and BAM, one misstep or misspoken line creates a whole new vortex of indelicacies. Although everybody knows that in the end, everything will hit full circle.

I seriously LOVE the detail you give to each character's inner thoughts. It's something I'm very bad at (which is why I'm stuck at this one chapter for, like, a year - university also bites me in the ass constantly, but that's a story for another time), and your writing and pace (as well as DryBonesKing's, Kwizzic's and many others) are very good and give me quite a lot of inspiration.

One day I'll get to finish SOME chapter and show it to the world how much I've evolved from the "usual-fandom-content-writer" that I was when I started writing Naruto FF.

Keep up the good work, see you in the next chapter.

Good chapter. I'm wondering where you are going with Hinata afinity. So Haku lied to his sister about their father...is that going to be significant later on or was that for something else?

Once again, I decided to continue and review for two chapters since it seemed like the last one continued into the next. And I was right! And well, to be honest... damn, was this intense!

I've really enjoyed these training sessions with Kakashi and Team Eight and Kurenai and Team Seven. Kurenai's especially, honestly. I'm going to want to look more into this when I get the chance to read more of the fanfic (probably tomorrow... I hope!), but I really loved how she worked with them. Maybe this will cause some 'mental scarring', but honesty, Team Seven needed something extreme to really get some progress done. I love this edge you added to Kurenai's personality to dare consider using a genjutsu with Itachi like that on them and I really hope that this ends up helping them all. Honestly, I think it will.

Not to say that Team Eight and Kakashi was less interesting or something. Far from it. It was incredibly engaging and I find it amusing that Kakashi would repeat the same challenge with them. I do love how it seems to have some more stakes on them, because they are already a team and have some degree of teamwork, but his test basically threatens one of them. I think you explored the thoughts of the genin of Team Eight in good detail, but Hinata especially. Yeah, she's definitely going to become a star character. I love the care you put into her thoughts and her rationale, especially her decision to sacrifice the bells to help Kiba/Shino. I'm curious to read more into seeing exactly all that happened with her passing out! You've really hinted on it being a major event...

One last thing in the chapter; the brief scene of Hiashi in chapter three at the beginning was great. I love the moral ambiguity involved in Hiashi's decision to choose the heiress and having to figure out which of his daughters will get the Caged Bird Seal. It's a horrible conundrum and I love that you are exploring it. A lot of fanfics tend to either not go into detail with it or simply go the other direction and paint him almost like a villain to a degree! I'm curious to see more pay-off in the Hyuga Clan's arc! :)

I saw that notice at the bottom of chapter three and do not apologize any more! Really! :) But yeah; I'm super excited to see where you explore it! Cannot wait.

I'll read and review more when I get the chance. Still no obvious typos or logic-leaps in my opinion! Still incredibly well written!