Great chapter as alwais! Going to revisit all the chapters.

Good chapter, once again! Loved the fluff, as always!

Keep up the good work!

good story.
but I am confused about how Gatou gained control over wave in two days before the mission?

I'm glad that they are all taking what Kurenai said very seriously. Though I feel bad for poor Hinata. So in love and yet can never talk to her crush without it ending in failure. I can't wait to see how you fix that. Should be interesting to see.

And, Hinata vs Hanabi you say? I hope you aren't too brutual with that. I love Hanabi as a character, or at least how she turned out in the end. She kinda got screwed over so hard development wise to the point she was nothing more than a glorified oc. SO I hope you are kind to her, or at least turn her into a loving little sister. -total hanabi fanboy.-

As for the fights. They were well done. Though you did make a few errors when describing some of the stuff Sakura was doing. Like in one sentence you typed. She her hand. I saw a few of those errors but other than that, nothing really major.

Keep it up! the character development is well done and the pace is the right speed.

Great chapter! Really liking the changes.

great chapter bye the way i think you have years instead of days when tazun talking about the reason for him laiying

Fifty

Glad to see your update to the story. Though did you mean years or months when you wrote this sentence? That man arrived in our country two days ago and bought every single port in the island. Because of that, he is the only one selling things to us, and the only one that can buy them.

i'm not sure what to say... i like the add to focus more on the characters developing, in general i feel development (especially for the main team) of Naruto failed miserably, Sakura and Sasuke were basically the same at the 'end' as they were at the beginning but with a lot of bumps and bruises, but overall no real 'development' as people not to mention characters... the epilogue and The Last makes it feel like they had some development off screen, which i'm glad for, but what they needed was for it to be visible... (also kinda said their kid has more development in 10 post-series chaps then they did in the entire 700 combined o.O)

so yea, i like that~ GIVE THEM A FREAKIN' CHANCE TO GROW! :D

on Naruto, i like that Kurenai mentioned his envy, as Naruto's desire to have what others have is kinda his big major flaw, its human, sure and understandable for him, but to have it pointed out is so rare, so i liked that... (plus everything else Kurenai did because GODDAMNIT did they need to SEE what Sasuke's reaction would be!) so yay development~

and i love Hinata *points at own fics* i've spent far too long figuring her out, so its nice to see someone else do it~ i liked The Last for showing that her and Sakura can and would be friends, because yea, they would likely be GREAT friends, (i love Ino, i really do, but at this age she's a bitch and doesn't help at all~ :P) so seeing them interacting positively was a relief~ any external interaction is good as it allows the characters to be more then just themselves~ i also liked her foot attack, if ANYONE in the damn Hyuuga clan was going to ATTEMPT to alter the style, it'd be her~ cause the basic Jyuuken doesn't work with her body type (or women in general really~) and with her (totally canon!) Shugohakke attack and other developments outside main story, it'd be easy to see her modifying the style and incorporating kicks or something to deal with feet (having this dilemma actually right now realizing just how 'stiff' Jyuuken is) its a big flaw, and like a lot of things with the traditional Hyuuga, these flaws ought to be handled and Hinata's like the only one that would bother (provided her resolve can be bolstered enough by those around her to try~)

i hope to have fun with this~ :3 i'm all for a 'natural' development~ XD

till next *salute-waves* Sayounara!
-Ikasury

Ps: *after trolling your profile* i liked The Last... its was a dumb romance from the guy's point of view, a rare thing indeed~ though silly for its overt fairy-tale-esque shenanigans... its was still cute~ cheesy, but cute :P

I like it, this seems like a very good character building story and though it is a bit slow now im sure now you got through the startup it should progress a bit faster ) keep up the good work

Pretty well done fight, though there were a fair number of typos and such so you may want to read over it again. The biggest error was an incomplete sentence early in the chapter that simply said: "This resulted in two logs being carefully hidden by"

I am curious why you had Kakashi using wind release techniques when he never used any in the manga as far as I know. Indeed it is indicated he didn't know any (sharingan can't let you copy elemental techniques if you can't use the element to begin with). I know the wikia says Kakashi at least has potential to use wind release (assuming this is from a databook then it simply means he has potential not that he actually ever learned how to, recall that mastering elements, especially ones that are not their main element, takes most ninja years), but in the actual manga we have Kakashi telling Naruto that the only ninja he knows of in Konoha who could help him with the details of wind release is Asuma (Danzo obviously was good at wind release too but he wasn't really an option).

I love stories that aim to give more detail to various characters and explore various things and you're doing well at that so far. I do kind of hope that you won't be straying too far from the manga storyline though. I know it had flaws, but I overall liked how Kishimoto did things. Ninja history being shaped by a malevolent being (black Zetsu) who desired to restore the godlike being who first gained chakra (Kaguya) was quite epic. And while you called "The Last" movie silly, I loved it overall as well. For me the biggest flaws in the Naruto series weren't the frequent power ups or even the focus on the sharingan but the under utilization of most of the great female characters Kishimoto created. So its my hope this story will fix that while leaving much of the rest mostly the same. And while I do love exploring Sakura's innate knack for genjutsu, I do hope that doesn't mean she won't become Tsunade's apprentice.

It is funny that Sakura being a "genjutsu type" is brought up repeatedly through the manga (and even mentioned in "The Last") but she never actually learns any genjutsu, but one has to admit that medical techniques and super human strength and regeneration are overall more useful. Especially when so many of the villains have genjutsu-using and breaking abilities beyond what most anyone without special eyes can perform, I think the only one on the level of MS that didn't use eyes that we saw in the manga was that one the toads used to trap Pain).

One other nit pick is the line about Kakashi not being able to see chakra with the sharingan. Actually sharingan and rinnegan both can see chakra, just not with the detail that the byakugan can. Course Kakashi had his sharingan covered at the time so he wouldn't have been able to see what Hinata was charging in her legs anyway.

On the note of exploring other characters more, one thing I hope to see eventually is how Hinata, Shino and Kiba react/think when they find out Naruto has the nine tails in him. We never got this in the manga (beyond when Sakura found out during the rescue Gaara mission and when Sasuke found out when he went into Naruto's mind), we just know the rookie nine all found out at some point during or before shippuden. I just find the potential reactions interesting, it would especially be neat to have characters asking Naruto what it is like to actually be able to talk to the tailed beast. I know if I were them there would be so many questions to ask, since it seems even most ninja know very little about tailed beasts (indeed all the children in Konoha seemed to have been told the lie that the nine tails was killed by the 4th hokage, when anyone knowledgeable about tailed beasts would know that even when killed they simply resurrect at a later time).

Not that Naruto would be able to tell them much beyond the obvious (I can go into my mind where time passes differently and speak to a giant monster behind a huge door), he doesn't much like talking to the fox until later in Shippuden and Kurama himself isn't keen to reveal much until late in the story either, but it could still prove interesting.

I liked your description of the battles.
Looking forward to see the next chapter.

Well, Team Kurenai is the most balanced out of three teams.
Looking forward to see how you are planning for Hinata to avoid the spar with Hanabi.

Great work, looking forward to the next chapter