Reviews for Because I Love You - Chasing After You |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I love how you wrote the SakuSasu and their developments, and how they slowly becoming close with her opening to him and him choosing to partner with you, and I loved the opening for Hinata to have a possibilty to talk about plants with Naruto after coming to know about him having a plant... The decoy group's storyline is compelling, I never come across something like this in other stories during part one, and the fight scenes are good which I liked. As for Boruto and Naruto Gaiden, how about you can do your own rewrite like you are doing now with this story |
![]() ![]() ![]() I loved this chapter that I had to read twice now, devolopments of the genin are compelling, the training matches are amusing and interesting,which canon didn't have, First Naruhina, I so loved their first fight, and I liked how Hinata was the one to defeat Naruto, as she got his attention after him hearing about she beaten Kakashi, which the way to catch Naruto's attention beside cooking for him... as we know that in academy days' backstory in the anime episodes that Sakura's got his attention when she punched the tree he was sitting on, I liked that now Hinata attracted more his attention by beating first Kakashi and then him and cooking for him...and I love that Sakura and Hinata becoming close friends earlier, and same for Sasuke and Naruto , when Sasuke distracted Kiba to let Naruto eat, and the big development that I loved is the Team 7's becoming real friends in here, and Sakura is the one who takes initiative taking example from team 8, and Hinata being the witness and the third Hokage too... I love your idea of slow burn Naruthina which happens in the story events, not after , during the blank period... |
![]() ![]() ![]() I always wondered about the team 8 early interactions , especially during the missions, with this chapter, I think that in the canon they had more difficulty during the real missions and must be that Kurenai sensei solved it with the genjutsu test like she done it here with team 7, but with Hinata and her issues , while in here Kakashi forced the matter with worrying them that they will be sent back to academy, anyway I liked the Team 8's test with Kakashi which that could happened if he was their chosen sensei, and same with Kurenai..so your prologue arc version is much more compelling that the canon! The Naruhina's small interaction was so cute |
![]() ![]() ![]() The team 7 and Kurenai sensei's chapter is compelllingly intense, I think that she was a better person to deal with them than Kakashi , as she did now, though it was too drastic and cruel, but she wanted them to be an united team earlier to be ready to face situations like this , and the SakuSasu moment at the end of the chapter is so sweet |
![]() ![]() ![]() I liked the inward look into Hiashi's thoughts about Hyuga and Hinata, it shows his humanity, And I loved the sandwich falling from the sky thing, I always find it funny, poor Kiba, Kakashi didn't believe them, maybe Naruto should have mentioned about his lost sandwich. I always loved the team 8 friendship and dynamics so I enjoyed their moments here, and I like their experience with Kakashi's test. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love rereading fanfictions and I particularly love and enjoy this one. I am glad that Hurizen is more aware of the things happening outside Konoha, and being more involved in Genins developments and such, and is aware that things are worsening, and now that he is old he realized that he have to leave something good behind him , so he had to do some changes...and Kurenai being tasked with teaching the genin, genjutsu is a good way to move the story in a better direction. I love the first Naruhina flashback, is so adorable, I wonder if you added in the story ahead , the second Flashback where they meet again after she left her compund during the Hyuga wake of her uncle . I love your interpretation of Hinata and the way you expanded Sakura and Sasuke, I like that Sakura being able to show early own her true self to Sasuke, even if now is accidentally . The bickering wasn't too annnoying, as they weren't exactly friends during the academy years . And I agree that the Genjutsu is an important lesson to Naruto as it will help him in certain situations when there is no one with him. I found interesting the berserk button, and Sasuke not being able to get away with ti after he accidentally triggered her is interesting addition to the story. I will continue reading and leaving reviews . |
![]() ![]() ![]() Those were some good fights. Drama. Comedy. I was especially not expecting the sexy jutsu to appear. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Did Sakura of all people just save Sasuke from Orochimaru? Oh. Nope. Good try, though. |
![]() ![]() Wow! I just came from your profile's Bio page and I am blown away with the thought and care you've put in to this fic. The detail is so nuanced and so well laid out and organised! Such a labour of love! This is a huge fic and I feel like I need to really get a solid week of downtown before I get into it. Definitely on my to read list. If the fic is anything like your bio, I know I'm going to really love it, and if not I can certainly appreciate the effort and attention you gave this. This is what fandom is all about. Congratulations to you! I hope you decide to continue/complete this fic one day :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() I’d seen this before and chosen not to read it. That was a mistake—this is an amazing fic. Here’s hoping for more! |
![]() ![]() ![]() whoa! this was a doozy! great chapter as usual. Naruto working through his feelings about Neji beforehand is so good. it's going to create an interesting dynamic in their fight. This angle on F Danzo is quite unique. us readers don't know what his true goal is. this will be quite interesting |
![]() ![]() At first i wasn't liking the story to much, but when I got to chapter 4 my God that was a really awesome scene something that I have been looking for in my opinion now I am hooked into the story |
![]() ![]() ![]() In the A/N you mentioned that since fanfics are a community project, that you'll like it if we point out even small mistakes. I think I may have stumbled across one such mistake in this phrase right here. It's on the 134th line and I've written the paragraph here: "Exactly. The bridge is a threat to Gatou's monopoly. losing his control over "of country" will cripple his business as a whole, and thus he will undoubtedly seek to eliminate our client." |
![]() ![]() Yeah she probably wouldn’t do that (unless at the suggestion of someone else), She would probably do it more to check if all that blushing caused any internal damage (She is a worrywart afterall) (I’m talking about using the Byakugan to see inside her own skull) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yo I just wanted to start out by saying that this is my first review, so congratulations for that, but also that this story is super awesome and I binged the whole thing for the last month or so. One thing that I love is the characterization of everyone. Everyone has their cannon personality but nobody feels over the top. One example, probably because it's what I read most recently, is the Kyubi. He's not the evil demon that rages at Naruto every time he sees him, nor is he the benevolent creature trying to help Naruto as I've seen him portrayed. He's an asshole, sure, but he let Naruto take his chakra willingly when he was honest with him. And like I said that's only one example. I will say that I noticed quite a few typos or things that had to be read over multiple times to be understood (don't worry they were all pretty minor as far as I recall). I feel like it happened more often in the early chapters. If you DM me I'd be willing to reread the whole story and send you list of every one that I found. This is literally my only criticism, good job for making such a damn awesome story |