Reviews for Immortal
fivejolly32 chapter 1 . 7/10
just finished reading yhe the last chap, and i gotta say, i have never enjoyed a fanfiction more than i have this past 2 hours
jonat.hernan962 chapter 1 . 6/22
Rest In Peace Monty Oum.
herozega chapter 1 . 4/18
dude, where are you?
Andrew Joshua Talon chapter 20 . 1/4
It's been a while. Please, more.
VamPyr00 chapter 12 . 12/23/2023
Dude...this was a hilariously good story up until this chapter. Like, what the fuck am I even reading? It isn't even funny anymore. This entire chapter is complete trash. The MC and cast were totally enjoyable up until this chapter but now everything is ruined. Sure, they had their quirks but now they are all completely ruined. Even the MC is a pathetic FUCKING DOORMAT now, that lets anyone MURDER him with no repurcussions. Seems like he'll need to get permission to go take a piss soon, since he certainly isn't going to defend himself.

Meanwhile, all the girls have turned into petty, jealous psychopaths that literally MURDER him anytime he does something they dislike. Even the ones that DIDN'T MURDER HIM (like Yang/Ruby, Etc) did NOTHING to help him while watching him be murdered by these FUCKING PSYCHOPATHS. He just got MURDERED MULTIPLE TIMES for literally no reason and he didn't even try to fight back with these so called 'amazing skills' he apparently has.

Honestly, you've ruined the ENTIRE story with just this one chapter. Congratulations. I STRONGLY suggest either rewriting this chapter or just deleting it entirely. It COMPLETELY ruins the flow of your story. This is a Crack story that is supposed to be FUNNY, not whatever this shit is. This chapter didn't have anything even remotely funny in it. Anyone that says otherwise is fucking high like Roman.

Normal people don't laugh at someone being murdered over and over again for no reason and under such dumbass circumstances. Especially when he doesn't even defend himself. If he had killed that Velvet girl and maimed a few people in revenge or at LEAST scared the shit out of them, then MAYBE he would have been redeemable. As it stands though, you've RUINED all the characters in this story. Which, in turn, ruins the story itself.

I started reading this just for the Lols, but now I won't even be able to read further because this left such a bad taste in my mouth.
VamPyr00 chapter 3 . 12/22/2023
Lol, no way her shot could miss *pierces his heart* ...I think she swapped her ammo for Gae Bolg! Ruby also seems like she is perfectly normal, mentally, eh? XD
VamPyr00 chapter 2 . 12/22/2023
'Goddess' Pyrrha is freaking hilarious! XD
ZTitanBait chapter 20 . 11/17/2023
Well well well

Didn't expect an update to this in the year of our lord 2023.

Nice
IsaacTheLoser chapter 20 . 9/2/2023
jesus fucking christ Jaune and Port could probably kill the brother gods. i'm scared. i hope you continue this story mate. but be sure to take rest and drink water! :D
IsaacTheLoser chapter 6 . 9/2/2023
i really want to kill Violetta in the most gruesome way possible. i mean, SHE is the one that should go through the pain of what was it? 2,050 deaths? i don't know the exact number at the time of writing this, but yeah Violetta is a bitch. cause really, why would anybody do such a thing to their own son? Jaune just needs to live life naturally but nope. i really understand Jaune's pain for some reason
Guest chapter 19 . 7/18/2023
Is he Chuck Norris or something?
Guest chapter 7 . 7/18/2023
He’s like an Anti-Tucker
sickboy398 chapter 19 . 6/29/2023
Chuck Norris facts
wtf chapter 13 . 6/23/2023
wtf i am reading
Skywolf99 chapter 20 . 6/16/2023
necer thought i'd see this story update again after it went radio silent for over a year

glad to see it back though
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