This was beautiful. I just relized the foreshadowing you put in place for her blow up at tofu when you described her getting unreasonable upset at ranma and letting her frustration out by hitting him. Marvelous well played. And the ‘he promised’s (chefs kiss) im usually good about picking up clues like that but id never once registered with me she wasn’t talking about ranma. (Harty applause) bravo bravo. Love this story so much.

Un increíble trabajo!

The Amazon thing is dragging on a bit at this point.

What an amazing story. Didn't find the novel on Amazon, so subscribing to your newsletter. I am certain you will be published somehow.

Finally commenting because these scene was crazy funny with Nabiki's friends.

Really enjoying this story, and it is hard to stop reading it. I love the portrayal of the ice queen melting, and the huge added depth to her character. She was always my favorite character in the anime/manga and I think you are doing her justice.

Some of the Waffyness brings tears to my eyes, though this chapter I was literally laughing out loud.

Well done!

Sadness. Also a great portrayal of the emotions and thought process. I have gone through similar shit and its not pleasant. The mind moves from one thought to the next discordantly yet all in a similar manner.

Great work.

Ukyo deserves this chance. I really hope you go into all the little details later because thisblooks like it took a LOT to set up for the grand master plan.

Great chapter!

Great portrayal of nabiki "bringing her might". Also im loving how every new chapter the closeness keeps increasing. You can literally feel the change over time.

Wonderful fanfic, mate. This was a fantastic read!

Very good job, I love your story but I had forgotten to give it favorite haha

I remembered a couple other details that slipped my mind in the Chapter 60 review last night!

I was going to say that it would be an interesting project to see this story over again from Akane's point of view, but I now see that you actually have a section of that exact thing written which I'll read tonight.

The other is that I don't think you are using metric measurements correctly. Like when you say people were keeping a quarter-meter away from Ranma and Nabiki on date night. A quarter meter is 25 centimeters, shorter than most rulers you would see in a collection of school supplies. A meter is just a hair over 1 yard. About 3 feet.

Wow. It must be 'Make Shona Cry Day' or something! (Me, not the Amazon) Not the least of which were Nabiki's friend's stories.

Honestly I spent most of today reading the second half of the story. I couldn't put it down! I actually switched over to AO3 to read since I could read it more easily on my tablet at nighttime and not worry so much about chapter breaks slowing me down.

I've probably forgotten half the things I wanted to say, but here goes. I think you do an excellent job of building tension in your reader when the characters are in life and death situations. I was on the edge of my seat the entire rooftop battle on date night.

I'm a sucker for both relationship building and Ranma/Nabiki stories, so I'm glad to see one that not only has both, but is well written, and finished! I find too many stories that I fall in love with only to realize they've been abandoned.

I liked how despite not having much dialogue, Shona had a lot of personality shine through in her behavior.

The 1st person PTSD chapter with Nabiki was equally terrifying and moving.

Nabiki having _that_ much power and money seemed a "little" over the top but I rolled with it because sometimes you just have to have fun.

I don't think I've ever seen a story of this scale completely from Nabiki's point of view, and I have to say it was a unique feeling at limes. Like her being back in the house while the 'action scenes' are outside and not being described narratively.

I loved the build up of their relationship. How Nabiki kept doing her best to not take advantage because her promise meant something.

All the callbacks to the sisters relationship with their mother was wonderful and doesn't get explored nearly enough in the official material. It was interesting how in the end Cologne was sort of an opposite to that. A failed parental figure for Shampoo.

I do have a couple of minor criticisms, and I hope they're taken as constructive rather than complaints.

Knowing the story was written from Nabiki's point of view helped with some of this, but quite often you'd jump between subjects, or bounce between 1st and 3rd person personal references in the same paragraph and that can make things hard to parse at times.

The Chinese translation notes being at the bottom of the chapters made it tricky to navigate without loosing where I was. I ended up having to open two copies of the story, using the second tab to scroll down to the translations. I did hit a couple spoilers in the process as well.

Overall I loved this story and an saving a copy to my local collection. I'm going to go read the side story now!

I hope things go well with your novel. It sounds interesting and I'm looking forward to picking up a copy!

This one was heartbreaking. Ukyou has long been my favorite of the girls in this series. I think you really did her justice here.

I've never been a huge fan of Shampoo because of how ruthless she and her grandmother can be, and I always figured it would end in a fight with the Amazons.

It's a little strange to see so little from Akanes perspective, especially when she's as deep in things as anyone here.

My biggest disappointment with the anime was that it never really let the characters grow after season 1 or so, and just turned into a Happosai-centric hijinks of the week show. So I really love to see stories that really flesh out these characters I love and treat the quagmire they're in seriously.

I'm really enjoying seeing the world through Nabiki's eyes in all of this, and I'm looking forward to her and Akane really having a big talk.

Nabiki Is very bad ass in this story. The way she defended Rama at school and how she tried to make Ukyou happy.
I saw your note about a section from another point of view, but I can't find it.

I am absolutely loving this! At first I thought things might have been moving a bit too quickly, but I'm glad that things have slowed down and Nabiki is doing some actual introspection.

I'm really appreciating that you treat the Tendos like actual characters and not just the usual caricatures they usually are. I adore when Nabiki is given actual personality and drive beyond money. Her talk with Soun was fantastic, and I'm really loving the buildup of Ranma and Nabiki's relationship.

I'm excited to continue the story as I appear to not even be halfway through it at the moment!

Nice story from her point of view