Reviews for Lily Potter and the Witches of Salem
Kai chapter 4 . 5/30/2017
When unicorns are so discerning how is it possible that a murdering Inner Circle Death Eater bitch that STILL broadcasts Death Eater dogma can ride one? And why would Salem employ murderers and allow them to bleat pureblood shit?

I would've expected Hermione to research what behaviour will be allowed in their new school after the shit in Hogwarts, where even the depute punished students from Death Eater families much more lenient than students from her own house, and the headmaster actively prevented people from monitoring a Death Eater student he KNOWS has attempted to murder several others and has used all three Unforgivables.

If such a shit is allowed in Salem Hermione should've done everything to get herself and her girlfriend to a different school.
DschingisKhan chapter 2 . 5/9/2017
With the setup so far and that word count, I sincerely hope this is "Lily and Hermione Bed the Entire Student Body and Half of the Faculty Too: The Book". I realise I'm probably setting myself up for disappointment, but a Khan can dream!
shadowkat87 chapter 65 . 4/16/2017
What happen with becky?
Jesseburnett chapter 65 . 11/16/2016
I would have loved that sooooo much if you were to have had all kinds of pairings and whatnot. but having potter in EVERY single sex scene got SO old. great stuff tho, i just cant help but feel cheated out of what could have been an incredibly entertaining story that i would have prolly read on and off for a really long time. every scene havin potter tho, yea idt ill ever read that again.
Mergirl007 chapter 1 . 11/14/2016
I think you might get a kick out of some of the stats in this blogpost. Congratulations on skewing the gendered pronouns curve! witchsandwich DOT org/fanfic-vs-canon-female-characters-in-harry-potter/
MrBogus chapter 65 . 11/13/2016
This is a very good story. Of course, the main critique is that there is no relation to HP at all. You changed the canon quite a bit, but I have to say, at least for myself, the story works nevertheless. I just wished that you might have written something related to HP and the wizarding world at all. Except their trip to the Forbidden Forest, there was no actual relation to the canon at all. There might have been some interesting plot devices there as well.

The story was quite nice to read and I was surprised every now and then that you were able to write something else then just "pure" smut into your chapters. Your story had a decent plot as well! Don't get me wrong, I don't argue against pure smut storys at all, if they are well written, they can be interesting to read as well. But 65 chapters and more than 400k words just smut, no plot might get a bit boring soon. Another very good aspect, I quite enjoyed is, that you were able to write different lemons with different stuff happening there. You didn't repeat anything at all and were able to make every situation seem totally singular and unique.

Of course, I would have liked a bit more action in your story, since I am male and action is never wrong (hehe), but the amount of action was ok here.
Vysoren chapter 1 . 10/11/2016
I stopped in "Boys are the worst. I always hated them." You are a very talented writer, but not a good person.
HBTsConcludingRemarks chapter 65 . 9/30/2016
Great work! (FINIS. :-)

(This review intentionally added to pad the review count. :-)

I've pretty much said what I've got to say, but I'm posting this review anyway. :-)

Thanks for the terrific read! (x4 :-)

-HBT
HBTsReReview chapter 65 . 9/30/2016
Great work! (Remember me? :-)

Love is a circle. :-)

There, in front of all their friends and the people they cared about, they consummated their love once and for all. Mounting onto the sparkling marble altar all dressed in white. White stockings, white pumps. White gloves. Hermione lay flat on her back and Lily mounted over her face and bent across her body toward her open thighs and now they were kissing each other's netherlips. Kissing and moaning and pushing their tongues inside while the crowd watched with smiles and rapt expressions.

The two girls on the altar were bathed in sunlight and their hands gripped into each other's thighs and buttocks and the sunlight sparkled on the rings they wore. Rings shaped in circles that symbolized eternity, infinite. A symbol which was again mirrored in how they licked at each other in a continual circle of love and lust, Lily licking it into Hermione and Hermione in turn licking it into Lily. A love that would never be broken, never fade. A love that was perpetual and forever.

Light was beginning to glow between their legs and the guests watching were moaning and squirming in their chairs. The power of Lily and Hermione's love continued to grow until finally it was released in a brilliant flash of light that caused everyone touched by it to cry out in orgasm as their love was finally and truly consummated.

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Thanks for the terrific read! (x3 :-)

-HBT
HomeByTwilight chapter 65 . 9/30/2016
Great work! (Hello again! :-)

It's been a show. :-) One of the best. Ritual sex on the altar was my favorite moment, followed closely by the departure of Sappho, worshipping as she was worshipped. :-)

Thanks for the terrific read! (x2 :-)

-HBT
HBTsPreReview chapter 65 . 9/30/2016
Great work!

The story got the ending it deserved, with a celebration of women's love... with the open carnality that has characterized the previous 64 chapters. ;-) It's a loss, not reading a new chapter each week, or writing five reviews in response, ;-) but all good things, etc.

Thanks for the terrific read! :-)

-HBT
HBTsAnonymousReview chapter 65 . 9/30/2016
Hi. :-)

:D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D
Great! :D
This was the end. :D Cuteness and sexiness embodied in a story. :D It really worked. :D
THANK YOU! THANK YOU FOR WRITING A HARRY POTTER STORY! THANK YOU _SO_ MUCH! :D
Thanks! :D
:D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D
prototype gear chapter 34 . 9/25/2016
...this was like a yuri version of a lewd new world to me. I dig it. A fluffy smutbunny. A yuri smutbunny.

Needs more JoJo though. You can never go wrong with adding more JoJo to something.
XLurker chapter 65 . 9/24/2016
The best Fem Harry Potter. :)
JohnSnail chapter 65 . 9/24/2016
Awesome thanks for everything
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