A fantastic tragedy, a wonderful romance. Brought a tear to my eye.

Short but hella good solid 9/10

This was good too good. im trying not to cry in class

Bitter sweet ending really like rhis story this is a reread

a good show

A summary I made to congratulate this story.

She was strong, she was powerful, and she did not need anyone thinking otherwise. But like all humans, even she needed a way to relieve the ever growing tension, and she found it in the blond fool, using him as nothing more than carnal pleasure, to be nothing more than a tool to be thrown away after its use was over. But no plan survives contact with the enemy, and humans are creatures filled with emotion, and she was no exception, no matter how much she told herself otherwise.

Было приятно читать эту историю. Спасибо за весь ваш труд.

It was a pleasure to read this story. Thank you for all your hard work.

great start bro.

Jesus, this one hit me in the feels more than I expected it too! Amazing writing my friend, binged this in one night!

Nice fic - really makes a juicy drama-tragedy out of a crack ship. :) The sex scenes were SAUCY even with the limits you imposed on the description, :-)- and I do think I got some of the symbolism in them. :) I love the shift in tone where this fic goes from mild smut to a harrowing tragedy, that shift in tone. :) :)

Man, it was painful seeing Pyrrha being tortured like that when she was jealous of Jaune and Cinder's relationship, and when she walked in on them on the rooftop. At the same time, part of me STILL managed to feel sadistically indulgent about the angst! Although speaking of the rooftop sex scene where Cinder rubbed it in Pyrrha's face, I think you should've cut the detail where Pyrrha met Cinder's gaze and knew Cinder was aware of her presence - I can believe Pyrrha forgiving Cinder later if Pyrrha thought she'd just stumbled on Cinder and Jaune at the wrong time and Cinder hadn't noticed her, but I can't imagine even a forgiving person letting go of being deliberately put through something like that unless there was a lot of incentive for forgiveness.

You conveyed the sadness and depression PALPABLY when Cinder and Jaune got back together and it still felt truly hopeless. You actually managed to make me tear up at Cinder's death (Cinder Fall, of all people!), especially when she had her Bad Wolf Bay moment of not getting to tell Jaune "I love you," and my tears continued into the final chapter. Man, making me feel this much for Cinder? In the 'Final Space' fandom I'd call that "pulling a Clarence," and in the context of Unicorn of War's incredible RWBY Volume 8 Rewrite on You tube, I'd call that pulling a Jacques.

I was genuinely blindsided by Jaune revealing that he already knew about Pyrrha's feelings. And a nice stroke of wit with the last few scenes after Cinder's death TECHNICALLY still holding semi-true to the single-POV mould, with a bit of Cinder still experiencing things through Pyrrha's POV when the Fall Maiden spirit goes to Pyrrha. :) I also think you did a good job of ensuring this fic could still satisfy the Arkos shippers and Pyrrha fans (the non-rabid ones that is), by having Pyrrha be the one who kills Cinder at the end and survives the fall of Beacon in a form of role-swap and a form of meta-payback for Pyrrha's canon death. :)

I'd also like to say, I'm sorry to hear about your poor health, and I'm sorry for how dirty you've been done because of the current state of the UK's healthcare. :( I wish you a good recovery and good luck with your Thursday event.

Estuvo increible. Gracias por tal obra a ti y cualquiera que te ayudo.

The fact that you managed to tell this good a story in this many chapters is wild

Incredible story, heartbreaking ending, but an amazing one. Well done.

I love this story. It made me sad.

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