Yeah.
So the whole "let's see where it takes us" part is kinda off. Jaune knew he was in love with her after the dance, he admitted to that. Pyrrha was in love with him from some moment in Beacon. Now Jaune is unsure if he loves her or not because he spend years grieving for her.
That could maybe make sense for a normal teenager.
Jaune isn't one.
He is, by experience alone, a middle aged man. They certainly wouldn't doubt being in love with someone if they'd spend an entire life alone over the loss of their first love.

It kinda feels forced. Like trying to keep a lid on it, so Parrah and Yang can beat the snot out of each other for a while to make things "interesting".
That could've worked if you had made Jaune tell Pyrrah, that he never had a chance to think about her in a romantic way, because she kissed him out of nowhere and then immediately died.
But you didn't.
Him admitting to having been in love with her turns something that could be interesting (or more like interesting enough) into a bore for the reader.
The relationship tag alone already tells us they will end up together. However, it doesn't specify how or when. You could have given it a lot of time. By having them admit their feelings for each other, yet not getting together, you created an impossibility.
She died for him, he grieved her for years and never moved on. They told each other they loved each other. Nothing could ever compare to that! No way of getting them together now will ever feel right because it lacks the deepest moment they ever had between them.
It's like you have the perfect movie scene for the final kiss, but instead of just doing it the boy simply says "it's raining" goes home to play some video games and the girl is perfectly alright with that.

You need to take a hard look at the power scaling. You are trying to "show off" how strong Jaune became in the future, which is perfectly alright, but you kinda make him an OP character in the process by making his own fatherwhom you say was the strongest huntsman in the world for a whileneed the protection from a boy.
This boy.

So he just takes the blame for the fight? Even though a bunch of kids saw what happened and that he didn't instigate it? For someone who is all about justice, that's pretty weird.
You also contradict yourself a bit.
You say he made endless plans for everything, yet he still goes and tells his parents he wants to be a huntsman, when he knows they won't support that decision and would actively hinder his training if they knew.

I tell you what is the biggest turn off for fics like this. it is the fact you alter cannon by adding in stupid changes like this grim king just to give your ‘mc a challenge’ - which in this case is not actually a challenge wince he wipes them all out just the same.

I will say that how you dealt with tyrian was on point. I disagree with letting cinder go, but if you end up playing it as i hope you will, thats fine. But buffing her just to be able to take on jaune? Nah. We came here to see a powered up jaune mc take on the world again. Not to read some fic with extra baggage that ruins the original world.

And the fact that none of the staff are questioning how he and pyrrha can wipe out over 100 grim the teachers cant even scratch? Oz would have asked questions, or have at least spoken to them to some extent. Yet he has done nothing.

If not for this grim king addition- which i will add his only presence in the story is blatantly clear he is only there to add ‘challenge’ to the story, an incredibly amateur addition i will clearly state - this would be a great work. Its just marred with incompetent decisions in the world setting.

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2015 back when people thought team SSSN was gonna be more important and all. I had a hard time deciding which one to read this or Trail, I like Trail better but I still the details I'm this one. And besides why not read both. Hope you are okay and God Bless.

Hope this is updated soon, very good.

4 chapters in and loving it. its got Not this time fate vibes and i cant get enough

Absolutely incredible story so far! Really hope that you continue it at some point!

Really like what you did with Pyrrha's semblance, though I thought that it was based on Naruto's kazekage line, the 3rd kazekage in specific, not whoever Misaka is.

You are telling me he is so obsessed over a dead girl that he even didn't know for long that he even ten years in the future never had a relationship or is over her.

Dam good job 9n the fic soo far,
Makes it hard. To take breaks while reading this.
So...
Just to clear some things, Jaune, Pyrrha, and the King grimm got reborn?

I was hyped for this, the concept is coolif overdonebut the author ruined it with bad grammar and one dimensional characters. It's the same criticism I always make: the mothers in third rate fics always have this weird personality. They get angry and "everyone sweatdrops,everyone gets afraid."

But not only shitty mother personalities, his father is dumb too. And Jaune's school is dumb too. No doubt the author is somewhere between 12 and 15 years old to paint schools as a "bully center."

Please update soonnnn

...wow, grown man beating a child...are you projecting? Never understood that with time travel stories. The first thing is that a childhood bully gets beaten to a pulp...why is it that important to the majority of authors?
Otherwise everything is not so bad...