inconsistent? like jaune saying "i have a plan" and then a couple of lines later saying he doesnt know what to do? you dont remember what youve written after a few LINES. how does that translate chapter to chapter?

Interesting take, to a point, I think it’s reading it in one go that was burning me out. The family changes so Summer Rose was Jaune’s maternal aunt was a neat twist. Just thinking about what CRDL went through with Port to be so much more competent and less prone to bullying gives me shivers

This is a great story and I’m really looking forward to the next chapter

This story is great, but it's been over a year since the last update (as far as I can see anyway). Please please continue...please... :)

This fic is awesome, I’m afraid it might end after the party, like I have seen many other great fics do. Pls continue this story, it’s my favorite rwby fic!

Forgot to follow

Well done is all I'll say

My favorite yang x jaune story yet

- If Jaune hadn't offered, she'd have seriously needed to reconsider what she saw in him.
- Realizing what they specifically were waiting for, she followed Jaune, and they all fell in behind her. It was an awkward moment, but she understood.

The latest in a series of lines that equate to a logic break. I'm starting to question why I'm still reading this story, as these breaks in logic are starting to get really jarring. Interestingly, these logic breaks only started after the point in the story when Yang and Juane got together. Or at least I don't recall seeing any or noting any that really stood out before that point in the story.

This first chapter is good. Eased into the AU RWBY universe you made.

Please update i love this story

Man,what an amazing chapter I can't wait for the next update great work M! Definitely one of my favourite stories! :)

Awesome chapter!

sweet home Alabama

I really don't get why he is so upset about this whole issue. I mean they were terrorists. They'd already killed plenty of innocent people.