|Reviews for Technician|
| Guest chapter 16 . 4/14/2019
I mean I don't know why he is questioning it. There is a reason everyone has gunswords: Actually swapping between two different weapons takes way too long. Or rather, all fanfic authors the original show decided to arbitrarily make it take way too long.
Which leads to my next point. Yang is a good distance away across the stage, and somehow can burst into a sprint all the way across fast enough that Jaune doesn't think he could have drawn his sword or gun? I'm sorry, is Jaune moving in fucking slow-mo? If someone can move that far that fast, that big of instant acceleration, then you can draw and/or change weapons in a fraction of a second. Straight changing weapons should not be any slower than any mechashifting. The advantage of mechashifting is not having to make any potentially awkward movements, as well as being able to change modes in situations with less maneuverability.
And Jaune missing that shot? I'm sorry but that fight reads to me as Yang's plot armor to remain undefeated - she didn't actually beat Jaune, the plot changed physics so she could win, or something. Five shots nailed with accuracy, then the next lined up at a closer distance - easier shot - somehow misses? Right. In an actual fight it word have played out thusly: If Jaune can get a dustshot off, Yang loses. Her victory condition is to beat him before he is able to. There is no superbly convenient misses.
| Guest chapter 15 . 4/14/2019
. . . When Yang punches you like that, HIT HER BACK YOU PUSSY. Stop letting her walk all over you. My fucking god. Jaune, or at least someone, needs to beat the living shit out of Yang and put her in a fucking coma / hospital for a few months.
| Guest chapter 13 . 4/14/2019
I agree with the strange lady - what the hell was he doing bringing something that important on a mission? I thought he was reading his smut because he left the important book at home.
And, yet again, the chapterly lack of any sort of spine or anything related to Yang. Honestly he's the most pathetic person I've ever even heard of when it comes to her - and she isn't even fucking scary. He's just . . . Mentally ill? Broken? Defective?
| Guest chapter 11 . 4/14/2019
. . . For a book of porn that he actively wants to hide, he sure does love to blatantly leave it lying around, oh you know, ALL THE TIME. Why even bother to claim he wants to hide it at this point o,o He's all but bragging about it.
And sadly he was a pussy w/ Yang again - letting her just take all his rationed water and drain it. I mean really, is she considered his friend due to the simple fact that nobody else wanted to be?
Side note: I realize I'm mostly just bitching in these comments - please know that I'm just not pointing out the parts I do like. It isn't that I think everything is wrong with this story - the fact I'm still reading it and didn't give up on it in a rage hopefully at least hints at that. I do like most of it, I'm just pointing out the things I hate about Jaune for the most part, things about his character in general, not necessarily your portrayal of him.
| Guest chapter 10 . 4/14/2019
. . . You're not a monster, Jaune, you're a pussy.
Yes Jaune, you are pathetic.
You killed unrepentant murderers. You didn't fail to save them. You saved lives but putting them down. They weren't forced to fight for what they believed in, they chose to stand up and seek people out and murder them.
They purposefully are participating in a violent terrorist organization - in a world where widespread terror causes an apocalypse. Put them the fuck down and feel pride, not remorse. Save lives.
| Guest chapter 9 . 4/14/2019
And once again Jaune becomes the epitome of a complete fucking pussy when Yang goes Abusivemode. Please Jaune . . . Stop being a pushover. Nobody will ever respect you as you are.
| Guest chapter 8 . 4/14/2019
She really so stupid as to think his name is Just . . . ?
And if Yang keeps forcefully hurting Jaune, he needs to STOP BEING A BITCH AND SMACK HER. Goddamn Jaune you need a spine you pathetic coward.
| Guest chapter 7 . 4/14/2019
"Hmm here's this smut book I don't feel it's appropriate to read near my teacher and only real female friend - so let's still get it out of my bag and leave it in the open for no reason except to let them see it" . . .
| Guest chapter 6 . 4/14/2019
Jaune did admirably at keeping his distance - considering Yang as a nearly pure melee fighter has to be incredibly skilled at closing gaps against ranged opponents.
However - for someone who primarily has used melee up 'til now, why was he such a fucking potato in close range? I'd say his melee performance was as if he had never fought a melee battle before at all.
Another thing, please don't tell me Jaune is going to be such a pathetic wimp w/ Yang, or even others. Grow a fucking backbone, she hits you hit her back, she tries to force you into something SAY NO. Have free will. Don't be a doormat - you're trying to become a hunter damn it.
| Guest chapter 5 . 4/14/2019
Annnnnnnnnd Jaune is still a pussy. :(
This makes me sad.
| Guest chapter 3 . 4/14/2019
1. He sighs quite awkwardly often
2. That was actually a great pun at the end. One of the few of Yang's I've ever liked :P
| Agent-G chapter 1 . 4/13/2019
Someone told me about this so I deiced to give it a shot but honestly I can't get past the first chapter because it makes no sense and one of my major pet peeves is right here that I hate in stories. Why is there someone under 16 years of age (most likely 14 or 15 at this point) who is just living on his own in an apartment?
You would easily have just had him living with like an aunt and/or uncle or another sister or some kind of relative. That would have made so much more sense. There's no explanation of why Jaune is on his own, how he's living on his own or anything else for a minor that make any kind of logical sense in the first chapter and to me it needs to be explained in the first chapter. I just hate these kinds of tropes because they would never work in real life and really takes me out of the story.
| tylerbraden13 chapter 41 . 3/26/2019
Should definitely update
| Avenger013 chapter 20 . 3/18/2019
I CALLED IT.
I said Jaune was related to Summer and I FUCKING CALLED IT!
Pretty sure other people called it too, but I'm happy I did.
Well shit, there goes my Lancaster dream, up in smoke. Unless you're into 'wincest' then I really don't think you can pull it off.
Oh well, there's always Firewall, Arkos or Knightshade.
| Avenger013 chapter 4 . 3/18/2019
The MINUTE you mentioned Alabaster Arc's SILVER EYES, I knew that her prodigy sister was likely to be Summer, which means Ruby's gonna be Jaune's cousin, so Lancaster's probably out as a pairing.
Then again, I could be wrong, but my GOD it'd be a good twist (not for me, because I am a SUCKER for Lancaster).