Reviews for Anna Grayson and The Order of Merlin
DaveO chapter 29 . 7/27/2018
To our recent guest who provided such a kind review. We appreciate your continued interest in my daughter's work. Katie's family and I really appreciate getting these reviews. It's been 13 years since we lost Katie, but your messages of support and kindness are always welcome. I hope you've read the second Anna Grayson book, entitled, Anna Grayson and the Dragon's Lair. I was able to take all of Katie's notes and chapter outlines about Anna Grayson's second year at Castlewood and create this second volume. I'm not the writer my Katie was, but I hope you enjoy it.
Guest chapter 29 . 7/23/2018
I’m rereading this story (again!). I forgot how good it is. Such a great tribute to your little girl. I can’t read your notes in the reviews without breaking down. I am so sorry for your loss. You seem like an amazing father who raised such an amazing person.
gagaking chapter 39 . 1/15/2017
Wow. Just... Wow. Excellently written.

I was expecting something, but not quite this. I am a bit confused about who exactly "the evil one" is (it can't be Bellatrix, she was in Azkaban, not in the american prison). I am also confused about what becoming a vampire means in the HP world, but I suppose that might be explained later.

Only a few more chapters until the end! This has been a very well done story, and demonstrates a mastery of storytelling and imagination. It is among the best novel-type fan fictions I have read. How did it take me so long to find out this story existed?
gagaking chapter 26 . 1/14/2017
Like the previous chapters of this story (that I sadly have not commented on yet), this was a well written and interesting chapter.

I really like the world building of this story so far and how while it does mention some events in the HP book to keep it in the same world, they aren't heavily mentioned and don't directly influence the story (at least not yet).

I am impressed that you don't focus on going over the classes and glasswork that was discussed in Harry Potter in favor of discussing the main plot and character development so fat.

I like the strong characters, Especially Mr. Greyson. Loving and competent fathers of main characters are sadly rare in fan fictions/stories, so congratulations on doing this so well.

You have set up the plot nicely and I look forward to seeing where this goes.

Thank you for putting this story online where I could read and enjoy it.
feathers chapter 21 . 8/16/2016
I have just read the story behind this story, and I wanted to express my condolences as well as the belief that your work is a wonderful tribute to your daughter, whose characters are memorable and fun to read
Hayden Elrics chapter 1 . 7/5/2016
This was the first ever fanfic I read and I decided to see if it was still around, lo and behold.. I didn't know Katie passed on and I was not expecting it but I will never forget her creations and her introducing me to this wonderful world. Thank you and may love smile upon you.
RoseQuartz1 chapter 6 . 9/9/2015
Man, you had a lot of fun writing this one didn't you?
DaveO chapter 40 . 7/20/2014
Msg to the FanFiction community from Dave O: 7/21/2014 - I wanted to provide another update to Katie's readers who have been waiting so patiently for the second Anna Grayson book entitled, Anna Grayson and The Dragon’s Lair. The book is now nearly finished, but I still have to complete the back half of one middle chapter and then work through my list of “undone items”. This would include a number of small holes that need closure. After this is completed, I will begin submitting chapters to . Some of the chapters are still in early draft (100% completed – but in draft #2 or #3 only). Usually I put together no less than 20 drafts per chapter, so this is why I’ll only be submitting singular chapters (those with completed drafts greater than rev 20) as I work each chapter into its polished final. Thank you all again for your kind messages and words of encouragement to Katie's family as I work to bring you Anna’s second year at Castlewood. I kept a very strict adherence to Katie’s original premise and outlines for the book and I think it turned out great. Book 2 contains 36 chapters and about 240,000 words. In comparison, The Order of the Phoenix was approximately 257,000 words.
DaveO chapter 42 . 1/27/2014
I wanted to provide an update to the second Anna Grayson book that I have decided to write in Katie's memory and utilizing the prologue and premise she left to us. As of 1/27/2014, I have completed 31 chapters to "Anna Grayson and the Dragon's Lair" covering Anna’s second year at Castlewood Academy. My thanks to those of you still following this link about my daughter's work. I hope to finally finish her second story very soon. God Bless. Dave O
crystalclear8050 chapter 43 . 11/11/2012
Dave, I wanted you and your family to know how much I enjoyed Katie's wonderful story. Her characters come to life, and she truly built a magical world. After finishing the story (at 5:30 in the morning!) I read your bio, and I could not believe that this amazing work came from the mind of a brilliant 13 year-old girl. She was taken from this world far too soon, and I am greatly sorry for your loss. I will pass this story on to others so that Katie may continue to live on through her beautiful words.
DaveO chapter 43 . 11/8/2012
I wanted to first thank everybody for your continuing reviews and support of my daughter’s work, Anna Grayson and The Order of Merlin. The Anna Grayson character is something her family continues to cherish greatly and your warm thoughts and messages in Katie’s memory have been so inspiring to us. Every once in a while somebody will remind me that I once said I was going to try and write the second volume of the Anna Grayson story, covering the character’s second year at Castlewood Academy, utilizing the premise, outlines and notes Katie left behind. It remains my greatest ambition, but while I did serve as Katie’s editor on the first book… there is a big difference between editing and being a creative writer. In short, I’m not the talented writer my Katie was. Still, I’ve been struggling away at the task, doing what I could to bring this wonderful character back to life once again given what I have to work with and what little skills granted me. I thought it was time to give you an update on my progress.

Since 2006 when I first decided to take this project on, I’ve had to struggle with working alone and without Katie to guide me. Yes, I have her notes and her outlines… I know what she intended in Anna Grayson’s second year at Castlewood, but they are what they are… just outlines. Just a series of facts given and an order set, but all the color that made Katie’s stories so rich is obviously missing and that’s where the elements of her talent truly worked its own brand of magic. There were times where I just got stuck with nowhere to go to connect dots A to B, and in those times of struggle I found my soul the most lonely and vulnerable to the realization that I’m just a man, a father… who has lost his daughter. She wasn’t just a talented writer that so many others knew through her stories, but a real person with character and kindness and a level of faith that sustained the rest of us. That’s when I had to stop and take a break from the task given me and promised to you. Starting back up again was always difficult, because the problem of connecting the dots still remained, but I plodded along, doing what I could to remain inspired. I have now completed 24 chapters. Some have more than 30 drafts while others only 2 or 3, so there’s still a lot of work to do on what’s already been written. In addition, I’ve estimated the story might include up to 30 chapters before it’s completed. Again… there’s still a lot to do, but I promise to keep working on it… to fulfill my promise to those who wanted to know more about the Anna Grayson character, a character that in so many ways personified the very essence, the personality and the vulnerabilities of the original author.

From all of Katie O’Brien’s family, we thank you for your continued support and memories and appreciation of our daughter’s work. I cannot tell you at this time when the second book will be finished, but I will continue to work on it. Katie entitled it: Anna Grayson and The Dragon’s Lair.

God Bless you all, Dave O’Brien
GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 21 . 3/1/2012
I like the fun changes you've made to JKR's HP universe. Thorses that are half horse and half thestral. Flying doors instead of flying brooms. Communication using stone bowls with blue flames instead of fireplaces. The route to school is pretty complex but it makes for a very special transition from the mundane world to the magical one. Spellburg is much more welcoming than Hogsmeade. Castlewood seems bigger and more impressive than Hogwarts. More choices for sports, and a mandatory sport for PE. Mandatory common studies. A Mirror of Enlightenment instead of a sorting hat. Knights instead of prefects.

I like Anna. She makes friends easily, she treats people and animals with respect and care. She's not so scrappy that she goes looking for fights, but she's no goody-two-shoes. She's got problems but so far they don't seem bad enough to constantly threaten to overwhelm her.

A few words are misused/misspelled, but not too bad.
GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 4 . 3/1/2012
"doling", not "doweling" most likely. "doweling" is clearly wrong as "dowel" is a cylindrical stick, so "doweling" would be a cage or banister made of dowels.

"steel", not "steal" when it's a metal.

"strength in the mouth"? I'm not familiar with such a saying. Google isn't either. But there is a World Cup article with the title: Strength in the Mouth of the Goal.
GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 3 . 3/1/2012
"perimeter", not "parameter". A parameter is the argument to a function. Not what you want at all when you're wandering near the walls of an office.
GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 1 . 3/1/2012
Very charming beginning.
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