Jack Harper should maybe start planing his own funeral. Wrex will end him if they can't save Jane before the batarians mark her.

I have read books that are not as wonderfully written as this and beyond that some of the fanfiction’s that I’ve read that are very good hold to Canon and in some ways are almost a retelling of the game yours is unique in the sense that it is all original content thought about you that is amazingly well written you have talent

In this timeline Jane is a 10 year old now captured by slavers. In the original timeline she was 16 when she lost her family. I really, realy hope that fate (aka you :P) isn't so cruel as to her being captive for the next 6 years fighting in the pits so that both timelines end up with a very broken 16 year old Jane Shepard.

Go Wrex, go! Get her home!

Hooo boy,

Wrex's gonna blow like a volcanoe when he arrives to see that the four eyes got away with Sheppie...
Gonna pity the foo's now already.

Awesome story my man, keep on posting please? :)

What a battle to behold! Hello darkness my old friend (and badass too). Shep is complete mess with both memories playing things on her, but still killing stuff left and right!

Well, this just took a side street down through darktown, heading towards holy sh*t's ville.

An amazing chapter. Like, this is up their in my list of chapters among fics that are basically worth reading on their own. Someone could hand me this as just a snippet and I'd still be thrilled.

One minor nitpick since we know this isn't hell, how is a 10 year old firing a weapon powerful enough to oneshot Batarians? (Side note, why are hunting rifles designed to be powerful enough to use as weapons against people in modern armor? Dare I see ME Squirrels let alone space boars?)
We know mass effect weapons have recoil despite all their various dampening systems, some which explicitly break arms. Given the power the weapon would need to go through shields and armor, even normally safe to used ones should have snapped her arm like a twig.

More dark than I was expecting, but good very good, please keep up the warnings. I can't handle rape or sexual assault, this was as close as I can get without empathising too much and becoming nautious. Thank you.

I love the premise behind the story and beyond that you are a very talented writer so not only is it a good premise it’s wonderfully written I look forward to finishing everything you’ve written

Damn, I need some more of this.

Problem is Harper and Wrex know who took her, it wouldn't surprise me if they rallied an entire crusade on top of Whoever took her

This story is not what I was expecting but it is very good I intend to catch up I look forward to finishing it

I found that chapter quite enjoyable, somewhat unexpected, but also perfectly sensible. I had a feeling Shepard might remember, but at the same time I felt like she wouldn't- most likely because both Wrex and the Illusive Man seemed to think she wouldn't.

Good job!

Good chapter. I wonder if the Batarians will even make it off planet or out of the star system and how damaged their ships are form the AA-guns. it would be kinda amusing if the Batarians had to stop for ship repairs thus keeping them in the star system or if back up shows up and blockades the mass relay.

Alright! There we go! Kid Shepard STILL kicking that ass! Also, good on Wrex for giving her weapons this early in the game! I mean, damn!

You can fight like a Krogan, run like a leopard, but you'll never be better than Commander Shepard.

Not even at 10 years old.

Heh... Is this where we get a Conan the Barbarian-esque montage of Shep pushing a giant wheel from a young age, growing big and strong, then fighting in the arena, knowing the pleasures of the flesh, and saying things like "To crush your enemies, see them driven before you, and to hear the lamentations of their women"?