evidently ron never told his father abour snape having the dark mark...ron saw it when snape showed it to fudge...

This is a very good story so far and I like the idea. hope u continue this soon

This is a very good story so far and I like the idea. hope u continue this soon

What? There's no more? Argh! You can't do that to us! And to leave with an A/N saying that the Death Eaters are going to make an appearance... well, that's just cruel. You're going to have to update quickly, or there'll be trouble. Hehe.

Loved this part. It looks to me like everyone is going to be reunited at the Burrow soon, assuming of course that Harry and Sirius make it out of The Leaky Cauldron in one piece. Good to see Sirius kicking Death Eater ass, btw. And all the little details about the Marauders's time at school make for a nice touch.

Whew! Great chapter. I *love* how you characterise Snape. I think the best line was:

"The act was vintage Snape the Death Eater, but slightly painful for a man who might have regretted it had he allowed himself to feel."

Wow, that is Snape in a nutshell. You really should write a Snapefic, you know. Something dark and angsty. Please? :)

Anyway, back to *this* story! I loved the interaction between Harry and Sirius. Characterisation was perfect as ever, and the ending was sweet without being too sappy. "I have you," seems the sort of thing Harry would say to Sirius, and the fact that you didn't have him reduced to tears during the hug shows what a strong person he is, even when things are against him. Fabulous. Can I borrow your brain for awhile? Lol. Pleiades :)

Ah, I knew you'd pick up the pace! This was great. I loved the meeting between Sirius and the Dursleys. It's hard to characterise Sirius since he plays such a small part in the books (so far, at least), but you did a great job. I always make him too girly and young. I suppose it's just hard to get inside the head of a character who lost his best friends and then spent twelve years in the prison from hell! Ah well, I try. Anyway, you got the balance just right - he was neither too young nor too old, and his mischievousness wasn't too over the top.

I only have one small criticism to make (and believe me, it's hard to find anything to criticise in this story!). It's just I noticed one or two 'Americanisms', i.e. words that aren't really used in Britain, but which are common in the States. An example would be when Harry says, 'neat' when Sirius shrinks his trunk, or when Sirius calls his old motorbike 'awesome'. I know, I'm a stickler for detail, but I like my fanfiction to read like the books! Lol, don't mind me, I'm just a nitpicker. Great work, anyway. Pleiades :)

Okay, not a lot happened in this chapter, but I'm sure you're going to pick up the pace soon. I liked the way you characterised Snape, by the way. I've always felt that behind the scenes, i.e. whenever he isn't around Harry, Snape would probably be a decent, responsible man. Often he's portrayed in fanfiction as a melodramatic, one-dimensional character whose sole motivation in life is his hatred of Harry Potter. So it was good to read a story where he recognises that the world is bigger than this, and in which his motivation is his own sense of guilt for what he did in the past. Showing this from Arthur's POV was a clever idea - we get two characters developed for the price of one! Well done. On to the next part -

Well, this is a wonderful beginning, especially for a first HP fic! It's such an original idea for a prologue, having Harry write a letter to Sirius; it introduces the plot in a far more interesting way than simply telling the story. Your experience as a writer certainly shines through. Harry seems to be characterised perfectly, and I'm dying to see what will happen next, though I hope the story will focus more on Sirius than on Pettigrew. I'm rather besotted with Sirius, you see! Lol. Anyway, like I said, excellent work, and I'm going to move on to the next part now. Pleiades :)

Nice work. I'm looking forward to see how Sirius and Harry cope.

OOOOOO! I really like this loads! I wonder who's bird will arive to Padfoot first? Will the birds be too late with their message and Wormtail will have Harry? Ahh! I gotta hurry up and read the next chapter to find out!

Cool Story, but why Wormtail?