Reviews for Christmas miracle
DREAMWRITER 08 chapter 4 . 12/22/2015
pistonsfan75 chapter 4 . 12/22/2015
Awwwww, loved it!
pistonsfan75 chapter 2 . 12/21/2015
I really like this story.
zats chapter 2 . 12/21/2015
I think they should adopt her too. Look forward to the next chapter.
TORONTOSUN chapter 2 . 12/21/2015
I hope Dakota's wish comes true. No child should ever go through that abuse. She deserves happiness and love.
Harryfan011 chapter 2 . 12/21/2015
Never expected the second chapter so quickly.. Wow, a lot of things happened here.. Let me first take a breather to calm my nerves and brain... This was indeed a very fast paced chapter with each paragraph revealing a new milestone event..

But, like I promised earlier, I will wait for the next couple of chapters to finally form an opinion about your story.. For now, enjoy the cakes and prepare for Santa.. Hopefully, we will meet sooner..

Till next time,
josiebell391 chapter 2 . 12/21/2015
wow I'm in tears cannot wait to read more
thekiller00 chapter 2 . 12/21/2015
this is a sweet chapter and it has me wondering what will happen when Dakota meets Alexis and Martha. As for adopting her, I'm curious to see how she will react and how the adoption goes.
txgal2015 chapter 2 . 12/21/2015
Yes. I think that they should adopt her

Thank you

thekiller00 chapter 1 . 12/20/2015
This is a sad start, but I'm looking forward to where it goes from here.
Sandy0401 chapter 1 . 12/20/2015
Love the start of this. I have a cousin who was always abused and the aunts and uncles were constantly calling CPS but our system isn't exactly the greatest if you ask me. Every year his one wish was for a new outfit so most of those in our family treated him as if he was their child and bought him the same amount of gifts as the rest as their kids so this story really touches me especially when Dakota goes with the letter to Santa.
I really look forward to seeing where this goes. I hope Dakota gets the family she wants and at least ends up with Kate and Rick for the holidays (lets be honest Castle would go all out on her for Christmas whether she is/was allowed to stay with them or not).
conservativegirl chapter 1 . 12/20/2015
Ooooh I can't wait to see what happens next! Great start
Harryfan011 chapter 1 . 12/20/2015
I have a kind of love/hate relationship with the themes on which this story has been based...

While I love a story in which there is some kind of intense drama and a gripping plot and usually, these kind of stories fulfills both of my desired objectives.. But, I would be lying if I say that these stories doesn't affect me at all...

A small corner in my heart always twists and wrenches in agony when I read about the neglect and horrors, especially if the victim is a little child..

I have been blessed to have a great and a memorable childhood, so I don't think, I could ever understand the pain underwent by the people who are affected by these things.. Stories and movies are the only windows through which I can observe and understand these themes..

So, my only request to as a reader, is please, give these themes, the care and the respect that they deserve.. I can't tell you how much it disappoints me when I see people using these themes just to gain some more hits.. So, please don't insult it..

Now, getting back to the story, since, this is the first chapter, I can't comment on your writing styles in detail.. But, I guess, I still liked the simplicity of this chapter... I have come across a lot of writers both on this site, as well as outside, who makes writing feel like a beautiful painting where each paragraph feels like a colorful and skilled stroke of the brush...

But, I guess, your simple way of writing gets the message across beautifully and each paragraph, especially when Dakota requests to Santa about her wish to have two parents who loves and cherish her, just hits a chord inside your soul.. That was, in my opinion, the most defining scene of the first chapter..

I do hope that this Christmas, Santa fulfills her heart's desires and fill her life with warmth and happiness..

In case, I didn't see get to read the next chapter, which I hope comes out soon, before the festivities began.. Therefore, Merry Christmas to you and your loved ones, in advance!

Till next time,
lb chapter 1 . 12/20/2015
I think I see where you are going with this and there is a lot of potential for a great story. There are quite a few mistakes though and wrong words - She screamed as she pointed his gun at him - for example. I suggest reading through each chapter as if you were reading it for the first time. It might help you word it so that it is a little easier for the reader to understand your intent.
zats chapter 1 . 12/20/2015
Good start with a interesting beginning. Look forward to the next chapter.
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