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You use the Nickname Kichi and Gama interchangeable me thinks. Or you call Gamakichi Kichi and Gamabunta Gama. Either way, there is a reason why Gama isn't either of their nicknames: It's to often used in Toad names.
Gamabunta, Gamakichi, Gamamaru.
You see where I'm going.
You can of course call them what you want, but I'd advice to stick to the usual of using the last part of their name as nickname.

Beg your pardon, but shouldn't Gamakichi be around as tall as Gamabunta already? Just slightly smaller if I remember right.
Maybe I got my dates mixed up, but Naruto having been to The mountain means it's past Peins attack and from there on (even if I don't think it makes sense) Gamakichi had a massive growth spurt and ended up big for the finale.

I honestly hope Taylor loses an arm or something horrific in this fight. She has made the worst decision possible at every turn this entire battle, and she deserves to be punished for it.

Seriously, she and Lily showed up to the confrontation with a game plan specifically to perform search and rescue for their family/teammate, and instead spent the entire time “mesmerized” by Lung, who both characters acknowledge they can’t really do anything to help.

After they acknowledge this, and acknowledge that they have not seen either of their rescue targets, Taylor makes the “brilliant” decision to waste all of her mana preemptively on a frankly dumb attempt to illusion him. Honestly, the idea that she’s been summoning the Toads this entire time and Taylor never learned the fact that no one in this world has chakara is just impossible to believe. Like the toads literally have to use their chakra to secure riders to their backs because Taylor and friends don’t have their own chakara…

Anyway she just wastes the last of her chakara on a nothing move, and then, and then triples down by engaging lung anyway. Like she goes through the whole “we still need to find them” thing and tells the toads to just go balls deep. Then when that miraculously seems to do something against the dragon that they were literally just talking about being a hyper regenerator who fought an Endbringers, Taylor jumps closer to check…

Girl you still need to find your friends. If this battle is won dip out and do what you were here for. But no. She gets blown up.

Like I said. She deserved to be maimed.

That whole sequence wasn't the best. Why would Taylor bother entering the fight herself? She's literally a fifteen-year-old child who's only been training for four months. By all rights, she should've died at least a couple times. Hell, her choices and actions were basically screaming, "Kill me! Kill me! Over here! I'm tired of living!" I hope this Taylor can wise up a bit before she escalates things to the point things get too Worm-y. Canon Taylor's stupidity usually results in a lot of suffering, both for herself and others. Hope this fic will be different. The Toad Sages made me think this story would be less grim-dark, but then again it is Worm...

It feels like it's time for Jiraya to pick up some new strays... p

And that's one of the reasons Punisher is among my fav heroes, actions has consequences, lethal force from the villains is met with lethal force from the hero... Too bad this Taylor is softer than canon.

Great job with this fic it was really fun. So sad it was abandoned before we got Gamabunta vs Leviathan.

im gonna be honest, this was a terrible fight. putting aside the lack of understand in power scaling between Naruto and Worm. the choices made for this fight were stupid. Taylor should of just stayed out of the fight from the get go. stayed on the roof out of range. Gamakichi should of taken rune out straight away after dealing with the thugs, then he could of dealt with hookwolf easy.

then if we go into actual power scaling, then Gamakicki would of wiped then all out before they blinked. honestly toad clan solos Wormverse easy

Sooo not Panacea angle who could give her the coils at a level she'd need for Sage more. But something Fukusaku was doing to somehow allow her to reach sage mode. That's actually way more interesting because PanPan is an easy mode answer.

Anyways this was really awesome to read. I was so excited when I realized there was way more of this on FFN than what I'd read on AO3. I'm really hoping you come back to this one. And whatever is going on best of luck to you!

Crouching tiger hidden dragon here but Kichi can also be the size of his pops.

Also.. Panacea touches a toad then can basically give someone chakra coils. Unless your making it so the coils are completely metaphysical. But they shouldnt be really since they can remove eyes and transplant them and reconnect the coils.

damn that was pretty nice, very unexpected plot choice

You have a very good story up to this point, I would love to see where you're going from here.

Oh, it's Greg? Nevermind, not mad anymore

An interlude longer than any previous chapter starring someone I never read about before, and therefore couldn't care less about? Fun

Fuckin lucky I hate missing shit or this long ass chapter would have been right skipped