Reviews for Impose |
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![]() ![]() ![]() If Initiate feels like the weakest of the fics you've written in this series so far, Impose feels like the strongest (though I already feel like Intensity will top it by a mile). You had almost NOTHING of the original plot of PoA to work off of. All of the major story beats you'd already hit in Innocent. Yet you managed to make Impose feel like the counterpoint to PoA (which, in my opinion, is the strongest of Rowling's Harry Potter novels too). You had a lot of delicious internal conflict here that made your story richer and more satisfying. Some highlights of this story: 1) Hermione vs. Her Parents This is something else I'd like to see you explore in more depth. We never got to know the Grangers like the Weasleys in Rowling's novels, and I can imagine them having concerns very similar to these, even if Hogwarts revealed almost nothing to them. This is probably the fic where your Ron and Hermione reach the same kind of informed decision about the forthcoming war that Draco does in Initiate-but they're still children, and that's a persistent theme in this story. It must be even harder for the Grangers, who as Muggles don't believe in raising their children to fight wars (isn't the wizarding world awful, though?). I imagine Hermione often feels very sad and lonely about her parents. I'm glad you addressed their discomfort with what she's doing (to parallel Snape and Narcissa and Sirius) and how out of touch they are. 2) Sirius vs. Harry I love how as Harry grows up and his conflicts with Voldemort and his followers are becoming more serious, Sirius starts panicking here as he realizes he CANNOT protect the boy who by this time is just like a son to him. It doesn't matter, on an emotional level, that Harry has handled everything that has been thrown at him, is an Animagus at age thirteen, has slain a freaking basilisk, and is already an amazing duelist. What matters is that Harry's in the middle of all this danger-and won't back off from it. It is also hard for Sirius, the adult, to process Harry as someone capable of protecting others and taking on dangerous, adult Dark wizards alone, even though he has already done so. A very realistic conflict, and I like how it lasts through this entire fic. 3) Harry vs. Remus (and vs. Sirius for agreeing with Remus) This plays out almost identically to the Harry-Remus conflict in DH, but because of the way you've built the relationships here, it hits a bit harder. Somewhere in between Identity and Intensity, Harry's relationship with Remus becomes something closer than the uncle-nephew relationship they have in earlier fics. While Sirius remains his primary parent, Remus comes to view Harry as a son as well, and Harry accepts this. Your Harry also has a much stronger relationship to Tonks. She's been family for years by this point. If anything happens to him, Sirius has declared he wants Remus raising Harry WITH her. So the prospect of Remus and Tonks breaking up over a baby isn't just the abstract moral concept it is in DH to your Harry; it would literally tear apart his family. (There are shades of this during their temporary break-up at the beginning of Identity as well, but it's much stronger here.) I also appreciate how Harry is more than a little angry at Sirius for his understanding stance toward Remus's insecurities. At the same time, I appreciate that Sirius TAKES an understanding stance toward Remus's insecurities. It shows that this is a complicated situation and Remus's fears aren't as baseless and unjustifiable as Harry might feel. Well done on this. 4) Harry and the Dursleys My favorite subplot in this fic. I like your Petunia, by the way. You give her nuance Rowling didn't until DH in your very first story. She doesn't care about Harry, fears and dislikes magic, and wants Harry gone-but at the same time, she DOES want to protect him for her sister's sake, and you can tell that at one point she did love Lily. Dudley seems like a post-Dementor Dudley already, and while that DOES feel like a stretch, I enjoy this characterization of him. Other minor things I appreciated: Hermione's Time-Turning aging her even older than she was than the others already; definite grace notes of Ron having a thing for Hermione (while I believe they MIGHT have needed counseling, I've always liked the pairing); and the strength and support of Draco's relationship with both the Weasleys. Thanks for writing, LMSharp |
![]() ![]() ![]() AUNT MARGE? OMG THIS IS GOING TO BE AMAZINNGGGGG! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I googled "Puppy black wolf" and omg Harry's animagus just got a lot cuter. |
![]() ![]() ![]() One problem I have with your writing, aside from the lengthy scenes dedicated to things I don't care about, is that you start scenes really abruptly and you seem to forget to include some kind of line break, frequently, which tends to throw me off horribly. |
![]() ![]() ![]() HAHAHAHHAHA! It’s not supposed to be funny but Sirius’ episode is HILARIOUS. Oh dear. Poor Siri. Honestly I wonder how he isn’t completely insane yet with Azkaban then the Dementors Drought and now this thing messing with his mind. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love your work so much. great characterization! I love kreacher! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love your stories. They deserve so many more reviews than they have! |
![]() ![]() Snape is walking a very thin line here if he doesn't want to lose Draco's trust... I assumed that when he would start Occlumency training, it would be similar to Harry's in fifth year, but it really speaks of your originality that you didn't go that route. I wonder if it's somehow Snape's intention for Draco to eventually figure things out and confront him about it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Good Godric, what sorts of stupid things would these boys say without Hermione. Bless her, for all her stubborn, rule-following bookishness. Looks like Ron's not the only one with the emotional range of a teaspoon. ~Ink |
![]() ![]() ![]() Spoilers ahead. Where to start with this one? I might have read a bit too quickly and can hardly remember what happens early on. The temporary stay at the Dursley's was interesting. Honestly, I was really looking forward to this one, because it just had to deviate from canon the most (other than Innocent) and yet you still managed to include bunch of PoA and GoF material in an interesting way. Was a bit slow to start with I felt, then really picked up. From the moment Sirius' mirror was stolen I read the whole thing in one piece. Rest of the story ended up being quite the page-turner! I honestly wanted to strangle Pettrigrew, he's so much more of a detestable person than in canon. If only Sirius (or Harry, or literally anyone else) had managed to kill him then and there ... Wonder how Intensity will turn out. The resurrection ritual seems like it'll be the same, the Triwizard is already established. I don't see how you could avoid following GoF from here on. Really hesitant to start on Intensity before it's complete, cause I know it'll drive me positively mad to wait another year to get the rest of the chapters :( By the way, was Pettigrew's refusal to take Harry's blood when he offered it deliberate? Because IIRC the blood had to be forcibly taken or some such, didn't it? So if Harry had gone through with the trade (willingly, albeit under duress and to save his friends) and ended up on the graveyard, the whole thing mightn't even have worked out for Voldemort. Would love to hear your thoughts on this! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh dang this was amazing! I love how Snape and Sirious are finally becoming friends, and gosh the scene with Sirius finding Buckbeak was hilarious! As usual you gave me many heart attacks with your fantastic writing, I was very worried about all of them (rightly so) and geez this was a pleasure to read. I love how at the start there are all these disconnected threads and at the end when it all comes together? Perfect! One of my favourite things about all these parts. My brain isn't wotaking enough right now to remember every amazing detail but just know that I loved all of it! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Awwwww Dudders! We really are products of our environment. I like your Dudley, he’s sweetly naive and exactly what the deathly hallows era Dudley should be. |
![]() ![]() ![]() EAT HIM, CROOKSHANKS. EAT HIM! EAT HIM! |
![]() ![]() The way you cling to the canon is pathetic and annoying. |
![]() ![]() This fic is just so fantastic I CANNOT handle it. Like,,,,,, the way you use every single little building block from canon you can find and putting it together into a new (probably better) story is magical. I'm continuously astounded by both your skill and dedication to this work. Your abilities when it comes to character arcs, foreshadowing, planting seeds and developing plot is amazing. On that topic, I got the sense that James's wand being left behind in the RoR is a seed you've planted and that prospect is Very Exciting to me. And Sirius's hallucinations, ugh, it's so my favourite type of angst (mean I know but it's so good). And Sirius and Snape's continuously developing friendship! I can't believe that after all those two have been through it took being friends with each other and acquiring ridiculous godsons to turn them into reasonable human beings. I hope you don't mind the incoherency of this message; it's really late and I don't usually leave reviews, but I'm left feeling rude and bereft when I try to just go on with my life without reviewing because this series brings me so much joy. |