|Reviews for Moon Fawn|
| Dennis Wayne Daugherty chapter 8 . 11/2
Please update soon i love this story
| tag0 chapter 3 . 9/23
Okay, there's a lot of illogic going on in this chapter. First of all - there's no way in all the hells that Petunia would be able to get a job just by looking in the paper; she would have to apply and go through the interview process, which would take more than a day. Plus, renting an apartment (if it's anything like in Canada) involves applying and having a credit check done before it will go through.
Second, the Elvish grammar seems rather illogical (especially because you said "tan" was sister). Not to mention something that comes up when you're using a different language - if all persons (or at least the POV person) in that scene speak the language in question, it's written in English (or whatever language the story itself is in). The only time you would properly use a different language is if: A) there is no word for that particular thing in the language of the story (example: using "zabuton" for the cushions that are used to sit on in Japan in an English story, because English doesn't really have a word for that specific type of cushion); B) if the person in whose POV the scene is doesn't understand the language; C) it's a term used to refer to someone directly (AKA "Ada" as a child calling a father is a legit usage, whereas using "Arawen's A'Su'Nys and E'Su'Nys" is not legit - it should be "Arawen's niece and nephew").
Otherwise an intriguing story, and I'm interested to see where you're going with it.
| Beth5572 chapter 8 . 7/20
I would love to see what you write next. Your a great writer and your stories are great too. Keep up your great work of art. I also hope you come back to writing more to this great story.
Thank you and Please,
| Traveler301 chapter 8 . 7/8
Fantastic story. I can't wait for the next update.
| Millie chapter 8 . 6/29
Now that we all know Rolen is an elf, can we drop the elvish language. It' irritating to have to figure out or flip to the end to understand the conversations. Otherwise, an excellent tale. A few questions: why haven't the goblins placed Petunia & the children in a Potter property? For protection if nothing else. Violet should be accepted. As the found child is Harry, will he recover enough to go to Hogwarts or is that a lost cause? Are his injuries permanent? Will Petunia be able to care for him? Where is the 'light' side? Did the wards not activate when the children were taken into the house? How did Harry's friends take his leaving? Does he attend human school? If not, why hasn't the government put their two cents in? Lots of little plot holes. will enjoy reading the next update Thanx
| sjrodgers23 chapter 8 . 6/30
more please thank you
| WhiteElfElder chapter 8 . 6/29
Sounds like Harry was in the custody of DEs. If that is the case I hope the rat was Peter and he was fried extra crispy. I have no doubt that Harry is going to be in a very bad way.
| azphxbrd chapter 8 . 6/29
You just made this great. I can feel for both Voldmort and Dumbledoor with that monkey wrench that just through thier plans. Good chapter,awaiting next update.
| Child of Dreams chapter 8 . 6/29
| ctc chapter 8 . 6/29
YAY! Harry is alive!
| davycrockett100 chapter 8 . 6/29
| white collar black wolf chapter 8 . 6/28
| roon0 chapter 7 . 11/1/2016
What a sweet chapter. I love it.
| roon0 chapter 6 . 11/1/2016
Poor Petunia what shocks. Its lovely that the elves found their son though.
| roon0 chapter 5 . 11/1/2016
So is there a real Harry and if so where is he? I am confused but I really like your story.