Reviews for Reborn as Issei
Amatsumi chapter 1 . 1/29/2016
Its DXD of course there will alwsys be a harem! Just don't go straight to the harem yet. Character interaction first that the Canon Issei undergone.

Don't go straight to Lemons (Its DxD!) Before the Juggernaut Drive event, lest the girls become Generic Cardboard Harem Girls Sex Toy cutouts.

Flesh out each Harem Girl candidates' character first. Personality, Good points, flaws that the other fanfic writer's overlook going straight for the Lemon.

You know like friendship, casual conversation, slice of life snips and drama. If you try for drama, don't drop worldview changing simultaneously.

Oh ummm...As a reader can you write character interactions between the Perverted Trio rather than the generic excuse that they are just there as 'Issei's Friends'. Can you make Bro with Kiba [NO GENDERBEND! Ray, can be temporary, played for the laughs ONLY!] slowly with the Perverted Trio, alll four being Bros.

Any mentioned above is simply a suggestion as a reader. Its up to you how you write your fic.

Jiraiya as Issei is simply a new premise and a welcome one. I'm suprised that no one has thought of it before considering how similar thier perversity is.
His simply is In-Character as age old hermit veteran shinobi and as a pervert as his Third Point of View actions.

Other than those...Well done on first chapter..
Chayner chapter 1 . 1/29/2016
This is a very interesting story, one with a lot of potential, given how you've decided to choose Jiraiya, who is quite the complex character.

Anyway, you've been wondering whether Jiraiya should be capable or not of summoning toads, which would also imply dimension travel between the two worlds.

Well, the answer to that is fairly simple.

The Kuchiyose no Jutsu requires more chakra the bigger the summoned object is and the farther it is from the summoner. This can be easily inferred from the fact that at the end of the 4th shinobi war, Hagoromo, the Sage of the Six Paths, had actually needed the help of the spirits of the dead kage in order to summon Naruto & co. from Kaguya's personal dimension. He needed the combined chakra of his own and of another 10 people to bring everyone back.

Now, I know that that overpowered summoning technique was needed because they had to bring back 9 bijū and 5 people, so it would be safe to assume that for just one person, perhaps only the chakra from one of the kage would have been needed. I'm not including Hagoromo, because he could have easily brought back just one person from Kaguya's core dimension.

Also, the home of the toads is an actual place in the Elemental Nations, but it is hidden in that Myoboku Mountain. But even so, it takes considerable chakra to summon a toad of considerable strength and size.

Which brings me to my point. If the Kuchiyose is fairly costly in terms of chakra to summon toads in the same plane of existence, then imagine how costly it would be to summon them from another dimension altogether.

Most likely, it would take almost all of Jiraiya's chakra to summon a toad like let's say Gamaken or Gamahiro. So, it would be counterproductive in a fight, since it would leave him exhausted an unable to do anything much until he recovers. And even if he could somehow summon Gamabunta, it would be redundant if he would not be able to assist the road in battle due to chakra exhaustion.

Now, about the opposite, which is the reverse summoning technique, the same principle should apply. Except that, in the Naruto world, there will definitely be people capable of summoning Jiraiya back. For example, Naruto could help either Shima or Fukasaku by lending them some of his chakra to power the summoning technique.

However, you have to keep in mind one thing. There is just one person capable of interdimensional travel without the summoning technique. Sasuke, with the help of his fancy Rinnegan. But that is also a very draining technique, and Sasuke would definitely not waste it on something like retrieving or sending Jiraiya back to the DxD world. Unless, of course, prompted (read: coerced) by Naruto to do so.

Still, there is one more variable to take into consideration. What is the timeline in the Naruto world? If it is just post the 4th shinobi war, then Sasuke is incapable of using that dimension traveling method, because he has yet to discover/create it, given how he has just obtained his Rinnegan. So, the only option would be the toads, but if Jiraiya were to be reverse summoned, then he would not be able to return to the DxD world. This could be used as a plot point, because if Jiraiya has created any solid bonds with anyone in the DxD world, he would be pissed at being whisked away from them without any warning.

Now, if the timeline is post Naruto: the Last, Sasuke would have that technique, and with the help of Naruto's chakra, he should be able to use it to travel to other worlds, given how he spent his time searching through Kaguya's dimensions through the blank period after the last. And he did it alone.

However, of the timeline is post Boruto: Naruto the Movie, then it would pose a problem, as Saduke was shown to be capable of creating a portal capable of transporting around 5-6 people throug the time-space. And it also did not drain him that much. Plus, in this instance, Sasuke or Naruto would be able to solo the DxD verse, given how op they are in that movie.

So, the sensible option that I see, is to make it impossible for Jiraiya to summon toads, or at least until a bit later into the DxD story.

Alternatively, you could have him capable of summoning messenger toads to communicate with his world, but have the toad tell them that he is content with his new life and that he does not wish to abandon the people that he formed bonds with in the new world. So, he would still keep in contact with those back in the Narutoverse, but only through messenger toads.

Also, keep in mind that these scenarios do not include the Boosted Gear factor in the equation, or whether that sacred gear can actually affect chakra and thus help Jiraiya obtain the necessary power to summon toads from dimensions apart.

Lastly, you could just have let's say, Naruto, make a cameo appearance (he could observe Jiraiya/Issei for a while without revealing himself to him). He could see how happy and content Jiraiya seems to be with his new life, so he would decide to not interfere, and forbid the toads (or anyone else) from trying to reverse summon Jiraiya. Which would be easy for him given his status (he's the 7t hokage) and power (he's beyond god-tier if his and Sasuke's fight with god form Momoshiki suggested anything).

And that's all that I can currently think of regarding this summoning problem. If you have any questions, feel free to P.M me.

P.S: Even with the toads, given how natural energy is a thing specific to just the Narutoverse, Jiraiya wouldn't be capable of entering Sage Mode, unless Shima and Fukasaku gather natural energy from their world and prepare senjutsu chakra to transfer to Jiraiya as soon as they are summoned by him.

Also, it's important to note that chakra in DxD is not the same as chakra in Naruto. And Senjutsu in DxD is merely the manipulation of their 'chakra' (which most likely was influenced by the concept of 'ki' in real life; Kuroka refers to it as spiritual power and even life force at some point).

Whereas in Naruto, life force is its own thing, because people lived without chakra before the Sage gave it to them a millennia ago. Only after they got chakra it became a sort of life energy for them, most likely because it got tied in with their own life force.

Anyway, DxD Senjutsu doesn't involve any natural energy, because there's no natural energy in the DxD world. Still, you could have this life force/spiritual power/'chakra' in DxD be an energy similar in concept but different in nature to the chakra that Jiraiya would have. This way you could preserve some sense of identity and uniqueness between the two different energies belonging to two different worlds.

Just remember that in DxD Senjutsu is actually manipulating the flow of this 'chakra' that yōkai are capable of using. So, in a way, it would be the same as Ninjutsu is for chakra in Narutoverse.

P.P.S: Good luck with your story, and may the muse be with you.

Best regards,
Chayner.
LordXeenTheGreat chapter 1 . 1/29/2016
Awesome beginning!
Maelger chapter 1 . 1/29/2016
Great start to the story.
About the toads... Why not replace them with familiars?
reader009 chapter 1 . 1/29/2016
Awesome man . . This is a great story.
bloodjasper chapter 1 . 1/29/2016
finely jiraiya gits the acknowledgment he deserves
he my be a super pervert but he is also a gentleman pervert
Akira Stridder chapter 1 . 1/29/2016
hmmm..lets see this..
Strife666 chapter 1 . 1/28/2016
very very interesting story... i hope that chapter 2 will be up soon.
roguetrick00 chapter 1 . 1/28/2016
Interesting start...
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