Reviews for In All Things Balance |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Oh please, oh please don't make this a Ginny/Harry story. It's been so good so far |
![]() ![]() ![]() So, there is something I have a consistent problem with in HP fics. You have given Harry a completely different upbringing. You have given Harry a completely different personality. He is frankly a completely different person than he is in canon. So why does he have the exact same wand and the exact same sorting. Even if you want to maintain the "Brother Wand" thing, they generally reflect the character. Being that this Harry is a different character, the Wood at least should be different to better accommodate his new personality. The sorting I would have overlooked if you included a bit about him intentionally going to Gryffindor for Nox's plan like you did with Daphne. But, you didn't and, as an honest sorting (at least from what I've noticed from his character so far), Gryffindor is the house he's shown the least attributes of. That's not to say he hasn't shown any, but all of the others are far more frequent. |
![]() ![]() No one with tactical training would've split up |
![]() ![]() great story. BUT... the word is spelled "honored", not "horned" :'D |
![]() ![]() I have to point out, that obi-one didn't use form I. And form one wasn't defensive. It was the first lightsaber form made, just after light sabers were invented. The form is basically a proof of consept that it can be used as a sword and was never meant to be used in the subsucent order aside from training. Obi was the absolute master in soresu |
![]() ![]() ![]() Holy sheet that was an intense chapter. Now I remember why I fav'd this story |
![]() ![]() ![]() good chap...other girls getting more separate abilities. |
![]() ![]() ![]() ohhh someone helping lockhart break azkaban...wow...just wow. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I have to comment this down. This si the best rendition of Chamber of Secrets year, with the petrifications and all while the diary has already been confiscated. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ohh yes, she is going to do this...I really wonder sometimes at this point too. its like a nexus event and writers have only two options for it. Whatever happens or whatever version of Harry it is, from light to grey to borderline psychotic would either save Hermione anyway or wouldn't even remember and let her be killed. Also I like how the fact that Dumbledore is aware of things and instead of direct manipulation is using indirect manipulation of 2nd and 3rd order. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Nice chapter, only thing...I dont know in many of these cases, even if the goblins accepted the respect of warrior, they would have still sent some guards...it is still a violation of the wizards (cuz they don't know it). treaty and that Nox used magic against and to harm a goblin in their land, whatever may be the reason. That should have made that guards at least escorted them...it is a threat to them. For them to able to just let them go into the inner vault so unseemingly |
![]() ![]() ![]() This has been an outstanding story! I loved every chapter of it, and you should be proud of yourself for creating something so amazing. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Okay, I REALLY love the code you've come up with. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Just a comment on the lightsaber form descriptions the only reference for Obi-wan using Shii-Cho is the RoTS novelization once when him and Anakin are both using different forms to trick Dooku into a false sense of security about them, Obi is in fact THE form 3 master if you want a good example for a form1 master go with Kit Fisto |
![]() ![]() ![]() Here Nox behaves like the worst of the Jedi. Harry, his friends, his house are sabotaged, mocked, probably cursed at Snape's instigation and his full support from any punishment. Even an adequate person would like revenge. But all that Harry gets - "humble yourself and be patient, we need Snape for the canon, I mean to confront the light side". Is there no way for an ex-Sith to bring Snape into line without killing him? Couldn't Nox just ask Harry to put together a petition against Snape with all his insults, bullying, destruction of good potions, Slytherins' support for sabotage, one could even attach the memory of these lessons that cast Snape as an incompetent professor and head of house. Then present the collected facts to the Hogwarts Board of Governors? The Prophet? Yes, Doubledore had to suffer a lot to keep his spy at school, and even if he succeeded, Snape would be on the short end from now on. Is not it so? And as a control shot - to threaten to take Harry and his friends out of this school due to mortal dangers (1st year), open sabotage and bullying from the staff. Would Dumbledore Snape be put on a short, muzzled leash so he wouldn't even look at Harry and Co.? Easy. But not doing any of that, only to leave Harry saying "we can't kill him now, so you have to put up with all of his shit and continue boil inside, my boy" seems ridiculous for a ex-Sith. And a commentary on Harry's group. Ron in the group? Impulsive, lazy, jealous, envious of fame and money child in a group of minions to take over the world? How quickly did he actually begin to brag about his chosenness within the walls of Gryffindor? Does Ron know about Harry and Daphne's friendship? The very next potions lesson, Snape would read this information from Ron's mind. Why go to such lengths to keep it a secret and then give it away so easily? Does Hermione still have to be persuaded not to spill Harry's secrets to the school staff? Bribing, convincing her not to do stupid things? Why did she even decide that teachers _must_know_ that there is a study group? Are they going to learn the unforgivable curses or engage in bloody rituals? |