Reviews for Locked Away |
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Exceedes chapter 22 . 11/28/2023 Man this fanfic gets really stupid by the second, now they have actual proof of whats he is saying, its just a matter of Misty calling the E4 or Lance and show them proof, and again why is no one thinking about the legendaries |
Exceedes chapter 19 . 11/28/2023 this story is very well written. Its a shame it has a very glaring problem. The only thing Ash needed to say to make people believe him is saying "Legendaries", the fact that just saying one word would resolve everything is really infuriating and it makes no sense, even as stupid as Ash is, Ash would know that Palkia, Dialga or Arceus, all three whom he met would be behind this |
Guest chapter 15 . 10/12/2023 hahaha what a pathetic mess xD Absolute garbage are you for real, I mean damm how obnoxious can you be. |
ChiRhoAO chapter 9 . 10/9/2023 This story is incredible! |
reppad98 chapter 70 . 9/7/2023 Wow. The last chapter. Seriously, you finished this. That. Is. AWESOME. So, first of all, thank you, thank you, thank you, for writing this amazing story, for publishing it and sticking with it, and now for writing a very suitable ending. Yes, there are loose ends, but this is not Ash's dream world, this is the real world, and nothing is solved right away and life will always go on, with good things and bad things. That said, I am happy to read that you are planning on a sequel. I'm very curious to see what you're going to do there. Obviously something is still going on with Ash, the way the fire reacted to him... The scene with Charizard was beautifully done, and a worthy goodbye. The worldbuilding you have done is impressive, and I'm curious to see more in your sequel. As for my favorite moment of the story, I think that's somewhere in the first few chapters, when Misty realizes that Ash is just waking up. I reread that part multiple times. So, anyway, thank you very much for writing this and keep up the great work! |
reppad98 chapter 69 . 9/6/2023 I have to admit that I don't remember much of the political things going on in the earlier chapters, it's been too long since I read the story. Buuutttt it does sound like things are slowly but surely getting back in control, with Dawn, Iris and May pulling at some important strings right now. It's still chaos and it sounds like there are a lot of deaths and damage, but it's now time to start putting the pieces together. Anyway, back to Ash and Misty: it was almost painful to read about how Ash doesn't want to sleep, how terrible it must be for him, to be in a situation like this again. The fear of falling asleep seems very realistic, but he does need his sleep to recover. Not just physically but also mentally. Misty's speech did feel very Misty-like, short and to the point. And then the bit about Charizard... I suppose I should have expected it, but I hadn't realized that Ash hadn't heard it yet... How terrible... Anyway, it looks like this story is drawing to a close, I'll read the last one soon! |
reppad98 chapter 68 . 9/5/2023 Oh, I really thought that you were going to leave Ash forever in his coma world. But then it kept getting worse and worse, and like you said in your note, I can very well understand it because Ash now has new experiences, and no longer has that complete innocence. And then the scenes from Misty's point of view! Really heartbreaking! It almost made me cry reading it, the idea that she would have to say goodbye... But then he woke up! I feel so relieved right now haha. I'm hoping for a happy ending now! Thank you and I'll read the next one soon! |
reppad98 chapter 67 . 9/3/2023 Oh wow, what a chapter. I admit that I had expected we would get back to Ho-oh and Charizard fighting, but apparently not. And apparently Ho-oh decided to leave it at just the Sevii Islands as well, or they are holding news back from Misty. I wonder what happened to Charizard, though. I think you described Misty's panic and shock well, especially with how she thinks a shorter time has passed while it's actually much longer. And then the ending... So painful! Ash is back in a coma, straight from where he started, back with Serena and eating an ice-cream. It would be beyond cruel if you were going to leave him like that... A great twist ending, but cruel haha. But I suppose I'll just have to wait and see what you're going to do with it in the next chapter... Thank you and I'll read the next one soon! |
reppad98 chapter 66 . 9/3/2023 Time for this chapter! This is so exciting! At least everyone seems to have made it out alive, if not unscathed. Your explanation at the end was interesting, and I don't think the death of Mewtwo was anticlimatic, I think it fit rather well with how you have explained it. And I really thought it would be over then, but Ho-oh is obviously not happy right now. I wonder if Charizard will be able to defeat him, even if he is mega-evolved right now. Thank you for writing this and I'm quickly going to continue on to the next chapter! |
reppad98 chapter 65 . 9/2/2023 Oh, it's been so long since I read this story, and after reading this story (and seeing that this story is now complete) I really need to reread the whole thing. But for now, I'm just going to go with the chapters I haven't read yet, starting with this one! The climax of this story! The 'thrown off the edge to your death scene' was well done, and it was really exciting to read - I really thought that perhaps Giovanni would succeed in killing someone or running away. But at least he's dead now. And the conversation between Ash and Mewtwo. Very interesting and exciting, and it's indeed not like in Ash's dreams, that he can convince Mewtwo to stand down. So it looks like we're going to have an epic battle! Thanks a lot for this chapter and I'm quickly going to continue on to the next one! |
MaybeOneday chapter 70 . 7/15/2023 I read this in about two weeks, and enjoyed every chapter. I truly want to commend you on your dedication and drive to see it until the end. I loved your characters and world building. I especially really loved the relationship between Misty, ashy, Brock, pikachu, togepi, and Charizard. Special mention to garry, and the Waterflower sisters. I hope you get the inspiration and opportunity to write or post that sequel . Thank you for your hard work and talent! |
Pauhdz chapter 70 . 4/25/2023 I’ve read this story twice now first in 2022 and now in 2023 (the real first time would be in 2017 but i don’t really count that) anyways, this is forever my favorite fanfic ever. I have such an emotional attachment to these characters in particular the og trio, but not the anime’s og trio (although i am) but the trio portrayed in this fic as well. I just love this world and no fic has ever filled me with dread the way the sad moments of this fic has. Everything is just too good, anyone outside the fandom could read this and take it as a book series. Anyways I’m just rambling. Really hoping for a sequel, but ofc no need to rush nor do you owe us anything. Just here to say i enjoy your work. Thank you! |
SuperSaiyajin4Vegeta chapter 70 . 4/22/2023 Not my usual fandom but I just found this a few days ago and it was incredible. I really hope you get around to that sequel. |
Guest chapter 70 . 3/13/2023 I‘ve just finished reading your story. It was recommended on a Spanish Pokeshipping group on Facebook and I’m so glad I started reading it about two weeks ago. I loved every single bit of it. How brilliant how you made the incoherent bits into a coherent whole (like the coma explaining why Ash stayed a forever 10 year old), grounding the Pokémon world in our reality (kind of). I’ve read a lot of Pokeshipping stories. This is, without a doubt, the best I’ve read so far. Every moment feels heartfelt, as you did a great job in building up the story so as the special moments feel well earned. Well done! |
KaChan84 chapter 70 . 1/29/2023 Wow WOW! This story is amazing, I really loved it and I basically read this in a few sittings only… You should be so proud of this world and characters you build, its a masterpiece! So happy I found this, thank you so much for writing this :) Maybe someday we‘ll be able to read the sequel, but until then: take care! |