|Reviews for Locked Away
| RedDeadFreedom chapter 25 . 1/23/2021
This story is the Bees Knees. Seriously. Ash gets to be badass without being a superhuman at Naruto levels of stupidity. His POKEMON get to shine in this story. V for Vendetta levels of badassery. For the Republic! Rebel for life.
| Pokemaster06 chapter 70 . 1/24/2021
Amazing Progression of Ash Ketchum throughout the the story. I mean, in the beginning, Ash was a nobody coma patient but as the story progressed, you balanced out the line between normalcy and well...abnormal. That's what I liked the most about this story. I love how you perfectly defined every feeling and sentiment.
Most authors would have made Iris a happy person because she was free. But you made her aggressive, stoic and blind with anger. That was clear when she declared war on Kanto and did not back down even when she was lying. You realised, that she needed to taste the victory and THAT was clear when she said, "Easiest war I've ever won." Many authors would have forgettem that she was denied a basic right and made her grateful for her freedom instead of bringing out the pent up frustration. And oh! I noticed the AVONU...
Cilan was accurate as well. Being the only one left to handle things coolly, he bottled up his frustration. letting it out by being there for Iris all the while.
You know what? I could write how every character was, but I don't think that would be any good. So I will get straight to my questions. I would be really happy if you answered them. I assume you're still active on this account because this story was finished a few months back...
1) What happened to Delia and Cole? They didn't die did they? (Surely pls answer this one! I am not as interested in the others as I am in this one!
2) Will Paul return to Unova to find Reggie?
3) Are Dawn and Paul gonna be a thing in the sequel?
4) What happened to Abigail finally? Was she able to meet her family or did her husband die?
5) Is the sequel about a counter rebellion from the remaining Rocket members like Agatha?
6) What are you gonna do about Lugia? isn't he gonna get restored?
| RedDeadFreedom chapter 19 . 1/20/2021
ME: Rampaging Charizard? Oh... my... fking... Arcaeus!
AshCharizard: WHERE IS MY DREAM BESTYYYYY?! I'M GOING TO BURN THE WORLD FOR TAKING HIM FROM MEEEEE!
RAAAAAAAAAAAGGGGHHHH! I HOPE YOU HAVE LUBE, HO-HOH!
| Multiairoh1 chapter 70 . 1/11/2021
This story is absolutely amazing. I just read though the whole thing in the last couple weeks. I love the way you just ever so slightly alter the world of Pokémon into something so realistic. Honestly, my biggest problem with this whole story is that I think you may have ruined the actual series for me.
Okay, not really. But there were a couple of things I noticed throughout the story. Firstly, in earlier chapters you seem to at least imply that real world animals exist along side Pokémon. But by about part 2 that seems to be completely dropped.
Second, while I understand needing to set up parts for a sequel, something’s seem to be be mentioned but then never brought up again. For example, Serena gave Ash her number. (Couldn’t she have helped with the towers?) Ash’s Pokémon all got away from the accident at Gary’s lab. Who or what took Wartortle’s statue?
Like I said you might be saving these for the sequel. Or maybe these details were a part of your original, lost draft. Either way, these are just things I noticed while reading the story and wanted to share with you. I’m looking forward to your future stories.
| bigb360 chapter 70 . 1/10/2021
I finally got around to finishing this up. What a great accomplishment you have here. This story captivated me like few have. I love your version of this world.
Obviously I love the Ash and Misty moments, and I think their first kiss after all that time building up their relationship was my favorite moment.
I really hope to see more from you here. You've got a couple stories that haven't been finished yet and I hope to see more of them if you're still into them. Or something new would be cool too.
You're one of the best authors in the Pokemon community and it's great to read your stuff.
I'd love to hear what your original ending would have been as well.
Looking forward to hearing more from you!
| xxblakexx27 chapter 1 . 12/11/2020
I read about 20 chapters of this and have yet to understand what is going on in this story. He was in a coma in a dream world that wasn't real but maybe it was real. Somehow his pokemon know him but people don't. It's all confusing and the more I read the less confused I get. Why were his doctors trying so hard to hamper his recovery? Why is his mom a raging bitch to him? When did the world of pokemon get so political? I keep thinking if I read more I might figure things out but I get nothing but more questions. This would have been so much simpler if he had just woke up, took time to recover physically and mentally, regained his actual memory, and tried to achieve his dream of training pokemon. Also all the political nonsense left out because I get sick of politics in real life. Battlers or coordinator they are still pokemon trainers why the hell are the fighting over stupid titles.
| secret-werewolves chapter 1 . 11/8/2020
Oh! I remember reading this a very long time ago and especially remember this first chapter (I don't doubt that any of the other ones I've read before or the new ones will not disappoint, not for a very long shot).
It makes me so giddy every time, the tension, and just the off-feeling - everything is perfect. I'm glad that you came back to edit and finish this fic. Now off I go to read the whole thing.
| Lady Fairy Moth chapter 69 . 11/6/2020
No body no death lol. But seriously that’s officially a staple and trope
| Lady Fairy Moth chapter 52 . 11/4/2020
I'm going to assume that this happen to goodra, but dragons can outlast it. I have faith in the cute squishy dragon type
| Lady Fairy Moth chapter 51 . 11/4/2020
Giovanni reminds me of all for one in MHA. He's in jail, he's out of the way, and he's still making plays and moves from a maximum-security prison.
| Lady Fairy Moth chapter 50 . 11/4/2020
Yay! Ho-oh is one of my favorites. One of these days, I'm just going to list out legendary Pokemon based on importance and how they are essential. Like Lugia and Ho-oh are essential but the regi trio technically are not. But regigags might be.
So here's to hoping for healing all around
| Lady Fairy Moth chapter 49 . 11/4/2020
Devon corp is the competitor of Silph. Them and Macro Cosmos would be the competitors, lol. Aether would be closer to world wildlife fund or animal rehabilitation center etc. Just dork lore and nitpicks
Also, I'm pretty sure Mewtwo also has been erased from his mind two but that was purposely since the movies happened making me worry about Giratina too. The creation trio are all dragons this is bad. But ho-ho being taken is worse. He can create life.
| Lady Fairy Moth chapter 47 . 11/4/2020
I refuse to believe wartortle is dead. Ash was a statue and was brought back. Wait! Is that how they contained iris and cilan?! Wartortle was taken... Bill is mialove bill he is underused as a professor, even worse for what he did for the world). And apparently, red not only exist but was taken too. You can't hold humans hostage. We get out. With our tenacity and determination, we escape despite the odds. basically its easier to treat them like hans solo freeze them. That way, they don't need food or accommodations. They can't do that to the dragons because they need to implant the control chips .
| Lady Fairy Moth chapter 42 . 11/4/2020
The dragons yay! Also I'm surprised their not holding larivtar and it's line those things would be as huge as full grown charizard if not bigger! It's based of Godzilla! Also get the legends out though now I wonder about victini!
| Lady Fairy Moth chapter 39 . 11/3/2020
But James has his inheritance? The dude didn't collect?! Like his parents should have been died of natural causes by now!