this story is fucking stupid, why would you take one of her eyes fucking retarded author

Loved the story, one of the most imaginative uses for a key blade I’ve seen! Hoping that Keynote can stop some of the bad stuff that happens later, like what happens to Mouse Protector. Hope you come back soon!

Interesting take, I feel like I’ve tried to read it before when I haven’t read Worm yet and was on a Kingdom Hearts kick. I hope you come back to it. The scene changes were a little jarring, probably would have flowed better visually. The background on the Espers seems more pure Final Fantasy than Kingdom Hearts to me but I’ve hardly played Final Fantasy. The slang a few times came off more British than American. I feel like I’m forgetting something else I wanted to say...

Yeesh, this chapter was horrend- er, it could be better. Specifically the bit with Circus. The weird dialogue, unflattering teenage ineptitude, their faulty reasoning, the questionable premise, the laughable 'fighting', and the WTF conclusion...

Needs a major rework because it doesn't seem to belong in the same story. A bit amateurish compared to your other stuff.

Excellent chapter. 4,000/10

I can't wait for the possibility of Kat meeting Mickey. Are they going to meet?

Excellent chapter. 2,000/10

What were the scientists at the facility doing?

Thinker with information gathering abilities... is it possible to say anything more redundant?
I'm just going to assume that it's Taylor that doesn't know that 'information gathering ability' is the literal definition of a Thinker power.

Trying to make Sophia sympathetic is a waste of time.

In canon she was a violent psychopath that the audience was lead to hate on a personal level. In this story you reinforced that animosity before trying to mix her backstory with Aisha's to make us pity her.

Honestly that kind of move will usually just annoy the reader though. At best we'll feel contempt. At worst we'll resent the author for a ham fisted attempt at manipulation.

So much bs going on in this chap I started rooting for Lung and Oni Lee.

Oh, I love what happened to Coil... “Slave in the magic mirror, come from the farthest space! Through void and darkness do thee I summon; Speak, let me see thy face!”

Taylor is Sabisexual

Haha can I just say you are really good at making each character come alive.

Okay wow. I'm glad you didn't write uber and leet as ducks also I love Jess no one ever uses circus as a primary character but I love what you did with the character.

Ooooo that ending totally burns my butt I can't imagine who those two people are who ducked Canary over but if it's Uber and Leet, well I'd just be surprised they would willing do that to her.

I really should have written a review sooner but this was just a great chapter. It's also probably a good thing that ifret went back home at the end of the fight. If Taylor could collect beings like him on the regular that would give her huge spikes in power when she is already set to get powerful.

I looks forward to reading more the ks for sharing.