very good

You need to put spacers between segments. It get's really confusing when I read a line of a scene that takes place at the Hebert house hold, and then the very next line takes place at Parians workshop.

while I do like the relationship between sabah and Taylor and hoe you are building it the problem is because sabah is over 18 and Taylor is a minor legally it would be considered pedophilia. just think about how it looks to any outsiders. an adult woman has taken a damaged, traumatized child into her home, not only does she have influence over Taylor as her employer but she's basically become her legal guardian as well and then a couple of months later she has started a romantic relationship with said child. its the type of circumstance that would set off alarms with anyone

I like dogs.

La magia es una cosa misteriosa.
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Magic is a mysterious thing.

Taylor aprende rápido. Claro, Mog también es un buen maestro.

Ahora Sabah conoce los sentimientos de Taylor.
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Taylor learns fast. Of course, Mog is also a good teacher.

Now Sabah knows Taylor's feelings.

In the 'forum postings' , you have 'cleam' - it fairly obvious that this typo should read "CLEAN"
I really think the leaving off with the comment about BOCO is asking for questions (read, speculation)...

Everything Dinah called the bird before finding out it was named 'Boco' is missing, just cut right out.

how aboubt a villain song like ( I am queen of villains) i think it would be fantisk

Yeah no... It was a good read until this chapter but sorry im not able to keep reading anymore. I dont like anything that have slash, yuri or lemon, to me all that is pretty much trash alongside with the harem trash that keep growing like a ugly cancer in this site.

Is a she or a he, can you please decide?

Well, that sound a lot like FF8 system if you ask me... The most easily exploitable system of all FF

Color me confused with this Circus thing... Wasnt he being described ss a she before unmasking? How ended being a he after that or if he was just a trap creepshow why nobody brough the subject about it?

Man... If this is going to be a Yuri fic tell me now about it to drop it ASAP.

The summons from FF series? *wriste* The party will be hard from now on then

Heroic isnt how i would call her in that outfit... One, it looked like the white ver of the badass coat of the Organization XIII and two... She sort of remind me of those dudes from Assassing Creed... The whole thing about her in the roof of the building just remind me of that.

Why kill Mog? Her hero name being know as Keynote was Assault fault not Mog...