ffs... mc doesn't need to be hungry to make dumbass decisions.

MC joins the PRT after calling them corrupt, brain dead.

This is very discombobulated

I might be missing something but how the heck did MC just teleport from somewhere in Australia to Brockton Bay in USA? Like, seriously, how did he cross an entire OCEAN and get into another Continent just like that? Am I high or was the Author high while writing this bit?

This is so cool! I hope you and yours weathered through covid unscathed. I hope you will continue this, but like most of the best unfinished fanfics out there...probably not... and if not, I hope your original writing is continuing for the better!

I recall reading just ch 1 a while ago. I decided to skip. Then on SB I found this again and de ided to read the interludes. Made me so glad I skipped.
I get why BB would be the ideal setting for a worm fic, but the motives for doing so were just pathetic. Same with the implications from the undersiders interlude. You've fallen for the trap of self insert writting in that these characters have no fucking motive and are retards. 'Yeah Im going to save Khephri!' Proceeds to act while completely ignoring consequences for their actions, or even consider that the future will change. And worse he seems to treat people not as their own individuals, but as some characters in a story. He's now in that story, and can't seem to treat people as people.

Finally I think it was mentioned his name was Kong, and his ethnicity was black (although Bronze skin is more hispanic or heavy exposure to sun). I find it hilariously racist that your calling the black guy a monkey. I wonder if that was the censored portion from that PHO interlude.

Such a fun story. Sad that it’s dead. Guess I’ll see what else you’ve written.

good work I hope you continue this story it's really good I reread it and read the new chapters that I didn't see in the past and I want to see the fight that should be coming up but I'm not willing to pay you $100 on patreon to see a new chapter of this but maybe if I was guaranteed to see a poll where we could vote on it I might pay you the $20 to vote on it but you're probably never going to get back to me but thank you for writing this story

good work I just reread and read some new chapters that I didn't read before I hope you update soon this story has great potential and I feel like it's being wasted by not being updated

bro is a hypocrite, says the prt are corrupt and ineffective but joins em smh

I can see why this story died after you started this “arc” of introducing ki to everyone. You had no idea what to do now lol. I get it. You got stuck cause you did too much. I can see that. Cause it was stupid. Shouldve just left it with the few but you went overboard. Got ambitious and couldnt handle it.

Aw man, you ended it there? I wanted to read about Eidolon get his teeth kicked in :(

Really? The link in the comments was to a Jackie Chan AMV?

Not exactly a fan of how wishy washy he is whenever he follows his Saiyan instincts. I understand not wanting to be controlled by them, but he wasn't wrong in his thoughts about eidolon or Alexandria. And he is the one with the power, and responsibility. THEY are asking HIM to train THEM, not the other way around. And in that case he would be the teacher, they the students. And students need to listen to their teachers and instead of arguing about something, try to actually LEARN what the teacher is teaching. Alexandria and eidolon would not be able to do so. especially because they would barely get the basics, and immediately assume when they are good enough with them that they are masters. This would make it so they would not learn anything but the basics. Especially eidolon, he is so arrogant that the moment he had the basics down he would think he is better than Mahmoud, and then would leave because he thought there is nothing else to learn. So all in all, he was in the right with his attitude, especially because they came in expecting to get whatever they want, as if him refusing is an impossibility. And it's his responsibility to choose who gets training in ki and who does not. He is the one with the knowledge, so he must be careful about who he gives it to, not sharing it willy nilly. Yes they are powerful, but that doesn't change the fact that they are still human and as such have FLAWS. And giving them these powers could just make it so that if those flaws act up the damage would be so much more. All together I just dislike that he turns from a man of his word, to a door mat that backs out from his stance all the while turning submissive (for a lack of a better word, my brain is coming up blank right now) in the face of a little opposition.

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