|Reviews for Loopholes|
| Pikanet128 chapter 34 . 1/18
Still enjoying this a lot
Finally had time to catch up on this story
| Storyteller Kimi chapter 12 . 11/16/2021
Dammit, Tabitha! I’m dying of laughter here!
| Mirrors Cracked And Broken chapter 7 . 11/15/2021
this AN honestly made me giggle
| Halo chapter 34 . 11/11/2021
How to summarize this story…
“Louise, since you have failed to summon a harem protagonist, the gods have decided to give you the role of Yuri Harem protagonist!”
| Guest chapter 10 . 10/30/2021
It should be Frau Sonne. The Sun is female in german.
| Guest chapter 7 . 10/30/2021
Your musings on swords is pretty uninforme and stupid.
| perfectshade chapter 34 . 9/17/2021
Hugging with Kirche, understandable. Wait, what? Fairies? This has become unfamiliar territory fast!
That‘s really unexpected. Even with spirits and elves firmly embedded into the setting it is an unexpected addition I can not see where it is going yet. Neither apparently Tabitha who for a change isn‘t fully knowledgable about a threat and instead it is Kirche. I‘m sure that breaks at least a few of Louise‘s rules on how reality functions.
Tentatively curious how exactly this is going to mesh with aforementioned spirits. Fairies and other things like that are very much not precluded by the spirits existance, but haven‘t ever come up in canon either I believe.
I do think either way that it made for a great scene between Tabitha and Kirche. Something of a continuation of earlier instances where Kirche has shown she isn‘t just backup firepower and emotional support.(who are we kidding, she is carrying this team emotionally)
Particularly when Tabitha shows how she understands Kirche in both emotional ways and through reasoning out why she does a thing right now. Simultaniously demonstrating that they have experience with each other.
Andd while it is not shown through Kirche‘s perspective I thought it came through how she can be… hesitant about the people she cares about. It matches how in previous chapters we see her going back and forth in her mind about which course to takes, the mental hangups she has and how she wants to be forward but is also concerned that either of the other two are too skittish for that. As well as her own commitment worries. We aren‘t explicitly told this here, but I felt that it was expressed through her mannerisms, those that Tabitha picked up as well as the pure dialogue. Very well.
Interesting bit about how they don‘t have Montmorency with them again and no love potion plot, that we know of, to reinforce them right now. Nor a revelation about the gandalfr‘s relation to the spirit yet on account of Kirche doing her job well! (of keeping the others reasonably safe) That is going to impact the plotline in new ways.
Now back to a certain explosion casting mage. Who would have thought this would be the outcome of Henrietta getting told off by Tabitha in combination with her loss? That and no Saito anywhere to focus on… leaving Louise doubly so.
But wow, talk about poor coping and too much alcohol involved in the moping. Though I am not sure if it is solely alcohol. The way she is acting is just bizarre in ways I would not necessarily ascribe to weakened inhibitions alone…
I do find Louise‘s reaction adorably in character. It is not like she ever needed to deal with something quite like this. Not someone grieving and her as the shoulder to cry on. Certainly not by going for some weird kind of rebound. And very much not while thumbing their difference in station and Louise‘s own hangups related to the failure to led to this in the first place.
Poor girl is not equipped to deal with this at all. Really, in light of all that she aquitted herself admirably! Until her handmaiden could lend a helping hand.
And wasn‘t that a suprise? Nearly as much so as it was for Louise I bet. I chuckled at the entire situation of Siesta being that steadfast in acting as everything as normal while Louise was doing her usual thing. Somewhat flustered, getting a reign on the situation and going along with matters as long as events don‘t offend her which is the one thing Siesta can not be found guilty of at all.
Makes me wonder what the head maid of the academy said about all of this though. Just as Siesta‘s own though processes must be undoubtedly go places. Louise is certainly the kind of noble one could work for that almost sprung out of a novel. Attitude and how much goes on in her life matches books at least ;)
I am not sure about the decision to keep description so short in that passage. On one hand the narrative reflects that Louise is following Siesta on autopilot while sinking into her own thought spirals. And nice inclusion with the bond by the way. On the other it was quite close to ending up in a rather featureless plain.
In the end I think the scene came out on the right side of the divide due to Louise herself questioning the transition.
Besides, finally proper introduction to littliest sis! Talk about laughing at Tabitha‘s expectations that usually would be right but look how that went!
Love ending the chapter on such a positive note. Fluffy scene at any rate!
And of course Irukuku being a little clumsy about secret keeping because bigger sis. You may note that I enjoy seeing her interacting with Louise like that.
Just after Louise did… her usual? Thing with a servant. Got to be honest, for a moment I did think it was about Henrietta doing something (more) ill advised after the not quite rejection. Good that didn‘t happen. It didn‘t right? Something to worry about. With Sylphid on her feet Louise could totally end up pursuing the princess who went on an ill advised excursion…
Time to eagerly await what comes of the plot hooks set up here!
| Forum Explorer chapter 34 . 9/16/2021
Read chapter. Reread chapter.
Wait, Henrietta just tried to seduce Louise? I was expecting that to be a dream for the entire chapter.
Actually between the two, Louise's half of the chapter was more trippy that Tabitha's little hallucinations ritual thing.
| Gremlin Jack chapter 34 . 9/16/2021
Was Henrietta on something or was that a shapeshifter? That scene came out of nowhere...
| shiftfiredragon chapter 34 . 9/16/2021
Clearly, Louise is an absolute menace to society! The girls are THROWING THEMSELVES at her!
| ZeaDragon chapter 34 . 9/16/2021
Louise’s Harem Protagonist (EX) Skill is really starting to get into the swing of things, isn’t it?
We shall be watching with great interest.
| Adam Safran chapter 34 . 9/15/2021
oh yes, there will be much doom all around. Yay for this story continuing! And poor Louise, getting that nervous twitch back..
| hyrushoten chapter 34 . 9/15/2021
I'm confused. This chapter reads like a fever dream. Why are faeries now an important thing that we need to go into a lot of detail about? What was up with Henrietta? What was the point of that segment with the guard?
More generally why is this chapter made up almost entirely of dialogue? Previous chapters had actual paragraphs of narration and description while in this chapter the longest section of that is four lines describing how Irukuku looks.
In short while I'm glad your back and writing more, this chapter isn't as well put together as previous chapters.
| Guest chapter 33 . 9/14/2021
Oh my goodness, I was just hoping for a FoZ fic with some yuri in it, but this fic has just blown me out of the water completely! Louise is going to end up with a polycule of beautiful women, isn't she? It's perfect! I could never accept that all these beautiful, talented women would be throwing themselves at an idiot like Saito; Louise is a far more worthy target of their affections. I'm favoriting and bookmarking this story, because I have a mighty need for more.
| Elvenoob chapter 33 . 7/30/2021
Okay, just caught up with this and oh gods, it's like a tiny fragment of my childhood but now it's lesbian. (Which is nice because, since the time I was a fan of the original series as a teenager, I've figured out I am also one of those :p.)