Reviews for A Lesson In Dying |
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![]() ![]() ![]() i LOVE THIS FIC ! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow those senseis suck balls, just letting bullies go rampant bec they are future shinobis and need to deal with that. wth |
![]() ![]() ![]() Excellent writing! Your story is fantastic! Please keep up the wonderful writing. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I do hope you haven't given up the story, it is a good start. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like it Thanks |
![]() ![]() ![]() That was a disturbing end but who is that person?! I feel like it was Kushina or a different no-name ninja. Hope you update this eventually! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hope you update soon and I'm guessing that shadow & that 'red headed woman' is Kushina Uzumaki. |
![]() ![]() Please update soon! I can't wait to find out who's in the alley with her! Love the story so much already! |
![]() ![]() What the fuck...the lady is pretty stupid if she believes thos two bullies trying to help Raika because she "slipped". I can't wait and see what's going to come in Gozen's way- I hope he is beaten black and blue by Raika. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I found myself thinking about this story just earlier today, thats how I know its a really good fanfic, you got me daydreaming about it x I'm still excited to see the next chapter, as always with your stories :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great story! I loved reading it and is it kushina that she almost bumps into at the market and the person that finds her? and I hope Raika gets stronger :) please update soon |
![]() ![]() dude. like save my soul. like I am in pain sooo much pain. I despise bullying. you cannot leave me like this. please. please. and I just bingeread this does that count for anything? it's been like almost wo months preetttttyyyy pleaseeeee |
![]() ![]() ![]() Gorram it what a place to end the chapter... Good stuff the constant small flashbacks and the father/daughter dynamic are interesting |
![]() ![]() ![]() I am in love with this story! I can't wait to read who found her. Honestly, I'm thinking that it's either Minato or Kakashi, but that's just a guess. ... ... it would be interesting if it was Ibiki though. I wonder how that would play out. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really like where you're going with this story. Most people just start to when the main characters are born. I think it's more interesting when people start farther in the past. There's less chances of dialogue from the show being copied and pasted. Those stories are always so unimaginative and seem barfed up. At first I liked your main character. I thought it was unusual how strong her senses were at birth. I thought she was uchiha at first too because of the cats. I liked how she was transitioning in a new world and it didn't seem overly dramatic. It was more realistic...? I donno. It made sense. There were challenges gaining skills such as walking and speaking a new language. I don't like that she has an accent. Accents to me are entirely physical, not mental. It doesn't make sense for her to have an accent when she has a new body. I also don't like how she doesn't stick up for herself or how she can feel guilty for selfish actions. Those "selfish actions" are normal and should always be chosen in the face of strangers. Its more realistic for oc's to not care about saving everyone in the show and be the hero. Survival of the fittest and all that. Like you have no idea how many times I raged for her to fight back against her bully. Then I changed my mind. She deserves to get bullied. Anyone that's training to be a soldier and still can't defend themselves and has the advantage of being reincarnated deserves to get their ass beat. Like at least kick him in the nads. It's pathetic. Hopefully this'll push her enough to learn tsunade's chakra technique (I see what you're doing). Hopefully she'll snap. It could possibly stop her flash backs. Sorry for the rant. I just really don't like your protagonist. I hope that in the future you can make her into a player. Player being someone who makes waves and isn't the one that's always reacting to the more powerful characters. But I honestly can't see her doing that. She's too passive and nonconfrontational. She keeps saying she's an adult, but still let's people walk all over her. Speak up little girl. On a side note I honestly think it'd be cool for her to confess to her dad that's she's been reincarnated. But again, unless she improves herself, I can't ever see that happening. Anyway thanks for the story. It's a good read and I hope you continue. Sorry for not liking your oc and for this long ass review. I just don't understand how people can still act this awkward and spineless when they should already be grown up. It's one of my pet peeves. Hate it when I see people act this way at school. |