Reviews for Mystic Knight Online
Apollo D'Arc chapter 63 . 8/2
Thanks for the story, Author.
Guest chapter 35 . 7/6
It's around 3am and I am mentally CACKLING
BlueMapple chapter 17 . 6/16
I don't understand why Dumbledore allows so many students to view Harry's life in SAO.

Is he only allowed to do that ? It's a private matter and on top of that, this public exposure threatens Harry's privacy (because a lot of these moments are of a private nature) and safety (considering how much it exposes him : people who aren't close to him will have access to informations they have no business knowing and will be able to exploit it accordingly).

It's practically a public rape at this point.
saltysherd chapter 47 . 6/3
i'm lost, and couldn't find a comment to answer my question: what is Furinken district in Nerima? Is it something very obscure or am I just dumb?
Neotono chapter 51 . 5/21
These outside chapters are so unbelievably boring that they bring the story down. It would be fine without the voyeurism and outside crap.

Its also nearly impossible to follow who is who with all the needless crossovers, OCs and background characters brought to the forefront.
Child of Dreams chapter 3 . 5/18
Secret logout spot?
Neotono chapter 21 . 5/13
The Voldemort stuff actively hurts this story. I honestly couldn't care less sbout hi plotting. In fact all the real world stuff in this story is pretty boring.
Neotono chapter 17 . 5/9
This chapter was really boring. It was hard to follow who was who in the hospital and the rest was a rehash of what we've seen.

There is no point in the 'project' at Hogwarts either since they can't do anything about it. They are just watching Harry like a sick form of entertainment whilst saying it is a project.
melikereading chapter 17 . 5/7
Hi there,

This is my second read through of the entire story, and it’s been wonderful to see how the story develops. It’s simple, yet it gives a good plot to describe the action and development of Harry and friends.

I do have one criticism about this though; it’s more like wondering why would Dumbledore share so much about what’s going on with Harry with other students? I get Hermione and his close friends, but other students? I don’t follow the logic for it. It’s like a principal sharing a video of a student’s accident at a school assembly.

So I guess what I’m saying is, there should more of a logic to do so; it’s strange to share such moments that Harry is going through with a bunch of strangers.

Thanks for the writing!
Neotono chapter 2 . 5/7
The fact they will be watching him is just plain creepy, especially when he has no idea.
Marcii Winters chapter 63 . 4/20
Marcii Winters chapter 39 . 4/19
Aria.RedMika19 chapter 27 . 4/9
the characters development impressed me so far especially silica
Aria.RedMika19 chapter 27 . 4/9
OMG. thank you so much for making this epic masterpiece. i love it so far
The Final Faux chapter 2 . 3/26
"Well then, Miss Silica, call me Hadrian, or if you want, Harry."

Haha, no. Dropping this. Any story that even TRIES to entertain that crappy name for Harry is garbage, and even more so when Harry HIMSELF wants to use it. Nope. It's unfaithful to the source material (because I have literally never heard Harry ever utter that name before, let alone PREFER it to his birth name), so I don't even need to read anymore of this fic to know that it's trash (going by my first impression of it, at least) and that it isn't going to be compliant to the source material in any way. And if that stupid name is going be used CONTINUALLY, hell to the no. Even if it was his username (which would somewhat validate it), Harry could have chosen LITERALLY anything else. He's a kid, so why not show some imagination?

It was an interesting premise, anyway, even if it had a dumb execution. Seriously, Lucius Malfoy deciding to distract the boy-who-lived with a good game so he's not in the way anymore? And his agent somehow foiling the blood ward protecting the Dursleys to kidnap Harry (which literally NO other death eater could do? You've created a plot hole to fascilitate the premise. And by the way, even RECOGNIZING that there was a blood ward there in the first place is illogical). Furthermore, even if they COULD kidnap Harry, why not just... you know... kill him instead? Lucius literally tries to Avada Kadavra Harry RIGHT OUTSIDE THE HEADMASTER'S OFFICE in the Chamber of Secrets (in the movie, anyway; in the book, he just tries to assault him), so he's clearly willing to assault/kill Harry. So why not go the extra mile and skip all of the unnecessary steps? Oh right, you needed the convoluted, illogical behavior to make the story work. Not to mention, as YOU did mention, Harry magically knowing Japanese. If the Minister of Magic can't just magic up a translation and Barty Crouch being useful for know a vast number of extra languages (he's a polyglot), then it's unlikely that Harry can magically learn Japanese either.

But even with all of these plot holes, I'd have still given the story a shot if the name Hadrian just never appeared again. But it does, and I'm petty enough to drop the story because of it, even if it had the potential to be amazing. ...Well, not really. How does Harry being trapped in SAO for two years, at 12 years old, develop his character in the Potterverse in any meaningful way? Because it means he'll be held back at Hogwarts when he's inevitably found, stuck as a 3rd year while all of his friends are 5th years, and that's only if the events of the Prisoner of Askaban and the Goblet of Fire all occurring regardless of Harry's presence don't kill him first. Skabbers will still be spotted with the Weasleys in the Daily Prophet by Sirius from Azkaban. He'll break out, kill Skabbers, and then probably be killed by Dementors. Then Voldemort will plan his resurrection, probably with Lucius just TELLING him where Harry is, and Voldemort will see Harry's defenseless, mindless, emaciated body and probably just mercy kill him before going back home and taking over Britan.

But hey, fun idea!
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