Needs new updates.

"Saving a couple of witches from being raped and possibly killed was one thing, but when they are the daughters of a powerful man that's a whole other manner."

What point were you trying to make here again? I don't even know what to say.

So this story is decent...but you have Harry go from dumb and oblivious to insanely intelligent and insightful almost unnaturally so, then next chapter back to gullible and oblivious. It's frustrating and unrealistic.

Good story but Kreatur is dead no?
When Dumbledore stole Horcruxe

... aaaaand you've stopped this MAGNIFICENT story... why?
It's 2024! You've had enough of a break!
NOW GET BACK TO WORK... pleeease?

I have seen enough SIMPS IRL. Why do I have to see another here?

I have to admit, I like that better than the original version. Well done.

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really enjoying this... pace is just about perfect, but i am annoyed with the author, 'I won't stop writing' - why do I keep believing that? it will soon be 8 years... September? a pity, it was good... and I really hate when a writer tells readers they won't give up... then give up.

Why? Why are you unnecessarily complicating an already unwieldy narrative? If you want to improve your fiction, simplify.

PS.

Funny. More & more Psychotic* Dumbledore, portrayal, here, had me imagining Harry freeing Grindelwald, weaponizing
as ready made avenger, pointed at Dumbledore. Then paragraphs later, the always masked mystery DE, gets revealed, Grindelwald shows up, lol.

* earlier, pondered the wackiness of your Dumbledore, recalling tropes like late reveals he's got wizard dementia, or magical mental illness.
Other than Grindelwald being biased. Or even with bias, Dumbledore character being pretty painted in the power hungry amoral manipulating evil SOB.

Bandaid for more competent DMLE, ready to go strikeforce during 3rd task, not being sent to Graveyard etc: I suppose considering canon[Dumbledore late revealing Riddle family etc info...location ...]
Harry not knowing location, only the Riddle gravestone there. So if this Harry hadn't studied up, very plausible fix, he reveals important DE convention, but location is merely where Voldy dad is buried. Although considering the improper magic office, obliviation squads, etc. One would think the giant fiend fyre inferno there, would point the way.

Bellatrix to nearby bed and wrapped even more chains around for good measure.

Hey, no severe injuries. So bed to not have Poppy leaning over, cramping her back.

Leave the bitch on the floor.
And really, considering it's Bellatrix. You'd think wise to ASAP, get her chained & inside an uber secure prison cell.

Bit absent minded Harry, needing Fleur mentioning Daphne.

Ditto, Harry not immediately giving the Bella is Daphne info along with Hangelton death eater picnic resurrection party.
Plot action, purposely Nerfing DMLE DoM Ghost squad?

Finally scanned for incompatible Tracy bio.

I'm guessing I mixed up control freak Dumbledore loony paranoid
thought narrative about Katie's parents, as an author or other character narrative about Tracy's family.

Wondering if going to 3rd task clone canon, seeming so common.
Especially considering 2nd task. Would seem obvious, the so called Ghost team, should be hanging around tge 3rd task at Hogwarts.

The Voldy reflecting on newspapers, but deciding it's hype, & Harry isn't a threat, is a slight bandaid, helping with what had been coming off, as stretching a trope to break point. Trope being, the common trope in canon, where Draco [option of Snape also] reporting with bias, that Harry is average or mediocre. The bandaid helps, as otherwise, considering public info/news, about Harry, makes Lucius seem pretty inept.

Although still, bad on Lucius, considering public saw Harry wandlessly toss the horntail, narrative had suggested basilisk parts would be sold etc.

Many chapters ago.

Thought Barty Crouch jr being public news and all.
And there was Neville in scenes surrounding the Barty reveal. Unless I'm mistaken about the reveal.

If not mistaken. With canon
Bella & Barty cruciatus cursing Longbottoms. Seemed a gap there, by affects of that reveal, on Neville, not in the narrative.