Reviews for An Alternate Beginning
rini anointed436 chapter 8 . 12/13/2021
Kurai is a spiteful person overtaken by greed. Being put in the position to follow in his parents' footsteps is a heavy wait he's bearing on his shoulders. It's oppressing when he doesn't get his personal freedom to follow his heart and pursue his dream. The plot thickens with the entrance of a group of mysterious robed figures that seek the Millennium items. It's apparent that Yami has a connection to the Millennium puzzle since being in its proximity is affecting him strongly. Upon noticing the resemblance in Solomon Muto, it'll jog his memory of the one whom he'd physically assaulted.

Here is a phrase with some grammatical errors that threw me off:

"I'm sure he me please."
Correction: "I'm sure he'll be pleased."
rini anointed436 chapter 7 . 12/6/2021
Since his heart isn't really into the science major, it makes sense why he doesn't do well in the subject of disinterest to him. Deep down, Yugi cares enough to go out of his way to try to get to the bottom of it in discovering how to help Yami. Kurai gives off the classic villain vibe in his character when he seems to be using Yami as a pawn in his scheme. It doesn't sound like he's properly taking on his role as his guardian, especially when he doesn't truly care about his well-being. In time, his true colors would be discovered by Yami when the truth has a way of coming to light later.
rini anointed436 chapter 6 . 11/15/2021
Jonouchi/Joey, Honda/Tristan and Tea are nice to be looking out for Yugi's well-being after being pummelled by Yami. It's a nice opportunity to have them show up when Yugi needs help. They would be good friends to have on his side for support. Yugi is perceptive to figure that Yami's low test score contributes to his frustration, but that's part of the problem. There's more to it that stems from his toxic home environment, which he may find out from further bonding with Yami later. At least Yami is starting to feel remorse for the injury he physically dealt Yugi. It looks like a wound that's hard to naturally heal in a short time. Deep down, Yugi must want to help Yami by covering up for him to prevent his expulsion from school.
rini anointed436 chapter 5 . 11/14/2021
Yugi is nice about inviting him to play a card game as a way to get acquainted. That's a wincingly excruciating scene of Yami physically assaulting Yugi. He is a lowlife to be picking someone weaker than him and doesn't mean him any harm. To add insult to injury, ripping up Yugi's favorite card makes him even lower as a bastard. The imagery is effectively detailed to make his pain vividly portrayed in this chapter. I feel terrible for Yugi while reading that. It's good that someone came to his rescue to prevent him from getting beaten to death.
rini anointed436 chapter 4 . 11/12/2021
This is a light chapter without Yami terrorizing Yugi and taking out his frustration on him. Still, it's unreasonable for him to pick on Yugi just because they share the same hairstyle. Since a person's true self and intentions could be revealed in their moved, dueling is a way for Yugi to get acquainted with Yami even when he doesn't know that it's a game Yami enjoys. It's rather amusing to see Yugi arguing with his conscience. Although his safety would be at Yami's mercy if found out by him, he's trying to brave it despite the risk.
rini anointed436 chapter 3 . 11/12/2021
The raw emotion that you've portrayed gives this a realistic feel. Yami's pain can be resonatingly felt. It makes him relatable in a sense for people who have unresolved insecurities and dealing with internal pressures to fit a certain mold. Yugi being manhandled by Yami is a painful image (which makes me mentally wince to be picturing that). It's apparent that Yugi is concerned about Yami's well-being to be keeping his eye on him. He must wish there's something he could do to help him.

Stories where the lead pair hit it off immediately are cliche. However, it can make sense when the characters have something in common that makes them click and start a friendship. In real life, relationships aren't always a smooth ride. A bumpy ride gives substance to the relationship buildup where character growth is inhibited. That'll make this interesting to stick around for the ride on following their progression.
rini anointed436 chapter 2 . 11/12/2021
That's an unpleasant beginning for Yugi on his first day at the school. It's scary the intimidating aura Yami emitted when he attacked his hair. Yugi has good intuition to pick up that something is really wrong with Yami. His troubles with school and at home are eating up at him in worsening his mood. So much pressure has that effect on a person when left unattended.
rini anointed436 chapter 1 . 11/12/2021
This is an intriguing beginning with some background on Yami's negative development stemming from his insecurities and not being accepted or loved by his guardian. It's like he thrives on the sense of power that being a bully gives him when he doesn't get that control over his own choices at home. That reaction from the students must indicate they notice a resemblance about Yugi.
Yugis-RebornSelf chapter 25 . 11/24/2020
Wednesday at the latest huh? -~-
Yugis-RebornSelf chapter 5 . 11/22/2020
All in all you got most terms right! :
Though remember some require tribute
And why is Yami so mean? Yugi was actually being nice :
Guest chapter 25 . 1/18/2020
Can you please update this story
Crystal Darkness Mare chapter 25 . 4/18/2018
Update please!
Guest chapter 25 . 4/12/2018
Please update soon...
Guest chapter 25 . 1/7/2016
Guest chapter 25 . 8/6/2015
Continue please!
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