you have this cross posted on Archive, I knew it seemed familiar, yeah I dropped this story cause of the incest shit. dawg, I really don't care whatever the reason for it, it's gross. also much as I like sex scenes in video games, I'm not reading this story for smut and before somebody else jumps on me for it I respect smut writers and know how hard it is, so f off I realize that people like it, I don't however.

The logistics of incentivized population growth was pretty interesting. I approve of the world building~

Well, at least he detoxed from blinking his sister… Also, wonder how many girls he’ll wind up packing into that penthouse~

You know, Lightning’s Gun/Blade really resonated with me too. As for the “Older Sister Route”, at least THAT will be easier to get the Alt Ending for; one hopes… As for the A.T. Field, I kinda thought it’d be called “Rotation/Kaiten” after NEJI’s attack since you already name-dropped Naruto in there. As for JUNIOR showing up at the end… wonder if he’ll run into Yang that way~

“Petty larceny” but with extra steps~
Eager to see how things go with his new ladyfriend~

Jun is just an absolute TREAT~ Especially right there at the end~ And of course, Menu-sama isn’t much better. Wonder if he can STAY out of trouble~

A very fun start. Suffice it to say, I’m hooked~ Binge reading montage, HOOOOOO!

Ugh, this is some revolting shit man. I would say put "incest trash fic" in the description but as this story seems dead which is possibly a good thing. Fucking incest crap in Self Insert fic, man you got problems.

draw agg - draw aggro

"where I met it in the middle with a Flash Step"

This is the first mention of him using Flash Step.

You forgot to insert him actually learning it beforehand

It kinda saddens me that you have Neo speak, it makes her a lot less distinct as a character.

You could have had her use her semblance as a message board or something instead.

"no one attempting to hide would order items for their secret identity to be delivered to the home of their civilian identity—which itself was a bit of reverse psychology to eliminate the apartment complex as somewhere 'Shiro' might live. "

Wow, he really likes out-thinking himself. Trying so hard to be smart, that he instead crosses into pure stupidity.

Disappointing that we don't see the kinky librarian sex.

You should consider adding that to the chapter. :-)

barbeque - barbecue

principle - principal