|Reviews for Zootopia: At Our Core|
| Rrit chapter 3 . 3/12/2016
Ahh! This seems like a legidement sequel! I enjoy how you keep the characters true to themselves. Excited for more, -Rrit
| KittyKattKatt chapter 2 . 3/10/2016
Wow, I am very much enjoying this story so far. The plot is very engaging and you have a good grasp on all the characters.
The only critiques I have are regarding grammar/spelling. Dialogue tags should be in the same paragraph as the dialogue not a separate one. Placing them in a separate paragraph can be confusing and disrupts the flow of the story. I also noticed a number of places where words were missing or misspelled. I would suggest doing an extra read through of your chapters before posting, perhaps one simply focusing on spelling and grammar (I would usually re-read chapters for my own stories three to four times in an attempt to catch as many mistakes as possible).
Hope none of that came off as too harsh. It's not my intent to offend :). Again I'm really enjoying this story. I'm not surprised to hear that you grew up around cops as you're knowledge of police protocol certainly shines through here. I also thought the predators being fitted with tracking/shock collars was an interesting idea and I'm glad you decided to incorporate it here. I look forward to see where you go with it. I look forward to seeing how this story goes overall. I hope you are able to update again soon :).
| purplefern chapter 2 . 3/10/2016
Your writing is really great and your plot is really interesting. Looking forward to the next chapter.
| Foxlover91 chapter 2 . 3/10/2016
Great story here, love what you got here so far.
Can't wait to see where this is headed, that scene with Judy's next door neighbors was priceless! XD
Keep up the great work!
| Story.Writer.2015 chapter 2 . 3/10/2016
INteresting. Great job with this story. I hope this story updates often.
| Kima chapter 2 . 3/10/2016
Love it, totally wanna see more and see where this is all going.
| the indecisive bird chapter 2 . 3/10/2016
It's good that you're using information you already have with you! Everything here looks great so far. I'm excited to see more :
Have fun writing!
| FallenStar39 chapter 2 . 3/9/2016
Very good job once again, keep up the good work!
| ktrk5 chapter 1 . 3/9/2016
Amazing. Your story is flawless, very on point. Please continue !
| JyrFalcon345 chapter 1 . 3/9/2016
So, you're getting a review. Funny how some of the better written stories on here tend to get next to zero coverage. Anyway, onto the critique. Your writing's on point, definitely- i'm a voracious reader of novels and audiobooks, and it has a flair and flow to it that most of the other stories on the fandom seem to lack- although the movie just came out, so it's still early yet.
You seem to have some grasp of police procedure, which is definitely a good thing. The characters sound like they should, which I can't really verify because I haven't had the chance to see the film yet- but it's on my list.
I noticed a few minor mistakes, but nothing that really stood out. Keep up the good work, keep stress testing your writing, and you'll do great! Also, I'd like to request permission to be a beta reader, if possible. Just PM me. Also, thanks for not starting the shipping off too early. Let them grow into it (if you're going that route.)
| FallenStar39 chapter 1 . 3/8/2016
hey, I'm writing words too, but I doubt people will like these ones as much as yours. Your story was amazing, every character's personality and actions seems to be very inline with what I saw (I only saw it once too) and you seem to have a very interesting story arc started up, lots of places where it could go. Also, I like how at least for the moment, your keeping them friends, I personally think thats more likely, but if you decide to take it further with them, go ahead, its your story do what you want, I'll still read it, but if I could make a request, don't tell us until it happens, if you do, it destroys any sense of drama and excitement, since you know exactly where its going. But either way, loved this story so far, your an amazing author, and I hope you keep up the good work.
| Guest chapter 1 . 3/8/2016
I'm completely hooked, nice job! ())ヾ*。
| foxydysphoria chapter 1 . 3/8/2016
I truly can't wait for more. Your writing style is great, the characters feel right, and your grammar is pretty close to flawless. Top that off with what seems to be a good plot, and you've got a masterpiece in the making