Reviews for Zootopia: At Our Core
Parsat chapter 9 . 5/11/2016
That is an awesome and promising update! In my reckoning this piece will stay one of Zootopia's best stories, and things sound like they can only get better.
lumine5ce chapter 8 . 5/9/2016
Thank you for writing this. Personally this piece seemed a little too serious with a lot of tension. But the character development of hornsby was beautiful... id hoped to see more development of judy and nick... nonetheless it was an entertaining read for me... please continue making interesting fiction and i hope all is well with your living situation... i look forward to reading your future works...
Superfan44 chapter 8 . 5/3/2016
Let me take this moment to say, that I think this is the best Zootopia story I've ever read. I like the way this story continues on the themes of prejudice and racism that were set up in the movie, and I was impressed by the accurate portrayal of police protocols. The character development in the story was also phenomenal, especially with the character of Hornsby, you gave a lot of depth to the character explaining the reasons behind his strict beliefs and made him very three-dimensional. You even did a good job with writing Nick and Judy in this story, bringing out the best of their personalities, and showing how strong their friendship really is, and the appearance of several characters from the movie was also a nice touch. I could see how the final chapter sets the stage for the next installment, and the reveal of this secret group and their potential plans is leaving me on the edge of my seat. Since this is the first story in a trilogy, I can't wait to see what you have in store for us moving forward, and where our characters will go from here. Keep up the great work.
Dagger chapter 8 . 5/1/2016
This story was... Incredible.

I don't even think I can find the words for the tension I felt during the finale. Even though I kept wanting to stop reading, I just couldn't! The characters are right on with the movie, the OCs are also well thought out, and the plot? Most tense I've felt towards something with words, EVER.

PLEASE, for the love of all omnipotent beings above, MAKE THE SEQUEL ALREADY! IT'S BEEN A MONTH AND MY BODY CANNOT HANDLE IT!

*cough* Anyways, I gotta boost. Toodles!
SmilesThroughFandoms chapter 8 . 4/27/2016
I binged read this in a day. So good! Can't wait for the sequel!
purpleradiance chapter 1 . 4/26/2016
very interesting and well written!
Adraen chapter 8 . 4/25/2016
Wow, this was just incredibly well written. You must have a gift or something cause I was'nt able to to stop reading.
Really, that's an amazing work, keep going :)
Soulfire72 chapter 8 . 4/18/2016
A great ending to a great story; that keeps in tone with the movie and feels very much in line with the aftermath of the Night Howler incident. I can see that you've done your homework about Zootopia's regions, terminology and police operation.
After the resolution, I really liked how you did Hornsby. He came off as annoying and really grating at the start, but he makes a lot of sense after his past is revealed. It's even better when I can link his actions to how similarly people in real life could end up going through something similar. I did feel bad for him by the end, by I guessed early on he would take that way out just by how calm and at peace he eventually was. I also liked how he was parallelled with Judy and showed genuine appreciation for her efforts even if he didn't agree with her methods.
Everyone's characterisation was spot on and you even added a few other interestingly shady characters into the mix, even if they weren't around for long. Nick and Judy were the best, obviously.
Honestly, I can say that part of the reason this story was good was because it was focused on the themes from the movie and playing them differently without being bogged down by a romantic subplot (that is ever prevalent in the current fandom). Whether there is a Judy/Nick pairing is unimportant, and you should keep that in mind. You summed up pretty well that their chemistry, romantic or not, is what's greatest about their friendship. I'd say don't worry too much about that decision.
The only legitimate criticism I have is the Epilogue. All the characters in it were never mentioned or hinted at previously, so for an otherwise great and satisfying ending it kinda took it away and made me feel a little distracted and confused as to why you're putting so much focus on these new characters now rather than at the beginning of the next story. That's where they belong, I think, not here.
Anyway I'm looking forward to seeing how your planned trilogy goes. Well done! Good Zootopia fics need to be highlighted where they can.
mm0r31r4 chapter 8 . 4/17/2016
Howdy, I just created a account so I could comment of this story.
I personaly loved it and devored the whole thing in a afternoon. Hornsby was by far my favorite character, since he is a even sadder version of what I liked in Nick: someone who had their dreams torn apart by life and circunstances, and yet, both of them still keep a lil of their young views, even if covered by thick pessimism and sarcasm. I feel overly sympathetic for Hornsby, even after all the stuff he did and said, since by the end you could see he was desperated to find something good to hold on, something to make him stop. I found both nick and judy very in character, as serious as the situation demanded while holding some of the barter that make their interection great.
If there is something I found dislikeble, it was that some of the interactions feel... repetitive, like how Chief reacted exactly the same to Clawhouser saying someone wanted to talk to him, even with the same words.
Anyhow, great job, I am anxious for the next stories and hope you make this new antagonist as interesting as Hornsby. Oh, and, great job in making judy and nick NOT in a couple. Don't get me wrong, I love this ship, but far to many people hush it and make it bad. Either a great friendship or a slow burn romance would be better in characterizing their relationship growth. But I am no writer, it is just a sugestion (and sorry for my bad english).
Soulfire72 chapter 3 . 4/16/2016
Can I punch Hornsby yet?
Soulfire72 chapter 1 . 4/15/2016
A great first chapter! This sets quite a serious but down to earth tone, which keeps the tone very similar to the movie. Already I can guess why the assault happened... especially after making Judy (and me) want to assault that Hornsby asshole. Ahem.
The characterisation is great, which is impressive considering you've only seen the movie once. I'm sometimes tempted to see it again but seeing a movie in theaters is something I almost never do.
Unfortunately, there were quite a few typos here and there. Nothing a little editing won't fix.
The other thing I noticed was with one sentence dialogue; you seem to start a new paragraph after the dialogue even when you're continuing their reaction. For example:
"I thought I was going to pass out! I need a snack!"
The cheetah said as he...
These two lines should really be combined into the same paragraph. Then start a new line when you come to "Judy was silently fuming..."
Apart from that, this story's off to a great start, but just remember some editing and/or beta reading by others can't hurt the overall quality.
ANARCHY RULES chapter 7 . 4/14/2016
Wow, this is starting to sound ominous
dratkins chapter 8 . 4/14/2016
Sorry, lost me with this one. Too uncharacteristic of Judy. And why no pawprint lock on her phone?
dratkins chapter 6 . 4/14/2016
"will you keep your eyes" - "will you keep your eyes closed" or "will you close your eyes"
dratkins chapter 5 . 4/14/2016
another nitpick: cocktail dresses don't have pockets; the keys would have to be in a clutch or handbag.
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