|Reviews for Orcbrat|
| MynameisMike chapter 27 . 12/2/2017
I read this story a while ago after reading Treed. This like Treed is well written and unlike treed it took minhs for me to figure out what I don't like about it. Yes, the characters are showing some evolution finally and it only took a human girl AND an elf to do so. The changes are subtle too subtle for this much content but at least they r there. Unlike Treed though the plot of this story is really lacking. I mean after 26 chapters the most exciting thing to happen is a plate goes missing. Really? I feel like you just like these characters and don't give a plop about the story itself. There is zero emotion to this story because your characters are resolute. Still though ur writing voice is so good I don't really care.
| Karileanne chapter 27 . 5/20/2017
I really miss this story!
| Osheen Nevoy chapter 5 . 5/5/2017
I love what you're doing with the Orcs' dialogue and their interactions with each other. This is my favorite chapter so far. Really fascinating interactions, their different points of view, the insight you're giving into the tensions and cooperation of the different Orc groups. I particularly love the conversation between Grushak and Nazluk about Kurbag's obsession and their concern for him. It is very skillfully done, how you work with these people whose values are pretty much the reverse of our perspective on what values should be, and yet manage to make the reader understand and perhaps even, a little bit, sympathize with them.
| yarr chapter 16 . 3/9/2017
I still do check this story for updates. I hope you will update it some day, as I can say that it is one of the best fanfictions that I have ever read!
| DeviousxXxSmile chapter 27 . 5/21/2016
I read Treed before this and I think you have done a fantastic job with your characterizations. I started reading Treed expecting some sort of romance where Kurbag sees the error of his ways or whatever and helps Leni escape off into the sunset. But instead found something far darker and I'm loving it. I find myself completely invested in Leni and Maevyn's survival and I really hope they find freedom and/or vengeance in the end.
My favourite thing about your writing style is the way you sometimes omit details about the horrific acts the orcs commit (such as the first rape scene in Treed). This actually enhances the horror of the event and you've sent chills down my spine on numerous occasions and made me bristle with genuine rage at the atrocities these two ladies must cope with. I've had to stop reading and go do something else for a while to prevent myself from becoming too consumed with my emotions.
It's not often that a connect so viscerally with a fictional story so I applaud you for managing it.
Hope to read more soon! :)
| AHH chapter 27 . 3/23/2016
niece story, though brutal at times. Reeeally makes me want to read more keep updating!
| yarr chapter 24 . 3/15/2016
Good lord, this story was published in 2003. Will it ever be finished/updated?
| TolkienScribe chapter 3 . 3/9/2016
First thought: "Oh GOD, that is an inside joke to Captain's mare."
Anyway, I am learning quite the vocabulary from both author and Orcs. :) And I must say that Orcs have too difficult names. I am calling one H and the other P, if you don't mind.
Okay, out of pure curiosity, geographically, where are we?
| TolkienScribe chapter 2 . 3/9/2016
Frightening. And mesmerising.
I don't think you need to worry about the narrative not being childlike. It would have taken the fun out of the story if it had.
Maevyn's fright is understandable. And I especially enjoyed the sequence of events that follow. I envy you a bit on that. ;) I always found a continuous sequence of a fight difficult to write.
| TolkienScribe chapter 1 . 3/9/2016
"He was eight, far younger than her own respectable nine years of age" This is the first thing I noticed when I began reading the story and I fell in love with it. I knew I was in for a good ride as soon as I read this one line.
Meavyn and Demmi are adorable, typical brother and sister. Which is why you broke my heart into pieces by killing him literally in the first few paragraphs. :P
Grushak... when I read this story before, I am not sure I liked him but I am not sure if I dislike him. I am not even sure if I am happy with that either.
On a last note, I don't mind the absence of canonic characters. It provides a different read and I am eager to see how this story eventually ends.
(Not running. Not running at all.)
| helenamarkos chapter 27 . 1/9/2016
Goddamn that last sentence! I remember the last time Maevyn was voulenteered for something by and orc (at least Grymawk is safe from this mission). But it is a weird sentence, only because I am trying to think of another instance that you hinted at future events like this and cannot (but I also cannot say that I went back and reread both Orcbrat and Treed in full, so I could simply not be remembering something).
At any rate, the first part of this chapter had me thinking of Entwives. I know you squashed this theory elsewhere, and it is far more likely that what the Orcs sense are Huorns or something similair, but still, I was aquiver for Entwives. Which may have something to do with the Crebain fluttering about. At any rate, shades of Fangorn. It feels as though the narrative is reaching a peak. I'm not really sure how to articulate this, and it could have to do with anticipation for the next chapter, but I do feel like there must be a breaking point soon, if there is going to be a breaking point. We sort of plod forward with even momentum until that poetically written "Subtracting" chapter and then a member of the party is injured and we come to a halt. And our lead character seems to have reached a certain level of ease with her captors that wasn't there before. So, it feels like the narrative is positioning us for something here, but I could be reading into things too hard. I do that, sometimes.
I love the whole section with medic Rukhsash schooling Maevyn. Aside from The Mystery of the Missing Dish, Grymawk's fate is near and dear to me because he is my favorite of your Orcs, so I'm glad a messy death by infection is not on the menu. If you're going to kill him off, I really want it to be a grand killing off. Bragdagash seems to be pulling for him, at any rate.
I feel like I'll read this through a few months from now and think of more to mention, but I did want to leave on this note: I know you are keeping things nebulous, but Braggy seemed to have an inkling as to where they were going when he spies the mountains in an earlier chapter, but no one else seems to be in on it (he IS the one with the map and all). And yet, you mention that some lads are from the south and others are from the north, so I feel like someone should have a bead on this place. I suppose I'm just going to have to wait until we get there. (I guess that's more a statement than a question, but I am really curious about their destination.)
| The Undefiler chapter 1 . 12/4/2015
I laugh at the vulnerability of the silver ink pen. She prides herself in humor, yet her miserable life is laughable in and of itself. You wish me to stop my exploits on your precious stories in an attempt to get to her? Block me as you wish. I shall soon find another outlet. The Undefiler never fails to eradicate those who believe themselves to be better than others.
| CeiJe chapter 27 . 8/16/2015
I must say I’ve matured since I last read this story. I once romanticized the rape between Leni and Kurbag because I truly didn’t understand the scope of the rape as it is a fictional piece between mythological creatures, the fact that Kurbag had redeeming qualities that made him nicer than the other orcs is what stood out the most and gave depth to the question, what is evil? I once thought Kurbag could change and like a lot of people attracted to the bad boy and or girl types the illusion of changing someone from bad to good is appealing. When you take that away what exactly is the point of this peace, are you simply writing a tragedy and your characters have no hope of transformation? The war of the ring is over and I have seen lions befriend bears and humans taming crocodiles. What exactly is your theme in this story why have Maevyn “the orc-brat” if Grushak is merely going to kill her and remain the monster he is and will always be? What I like about some of the darker orc stories with rape is the stripping down of the villain and revealing its motives and instincts. The forgiveness and understanding that some would call a person weak or insane to feel is actually a strength few few can appreciate. I’ve been abused harshly as a child and in turn for a while it turned me violent but with love I changed. I feel this story is in a way pointless angst. If Kurbag is just a piece of careless dung with no hope or redeeming qualities his character is boring and shallow- deep down I hoped for more to relate to as a reader. Great story, I hope you continue.
| Guest chapter 27 . 7/25/2015
Any chance of chapter 28 coming soon? I forgot you left this on another cliffhanger.
| Rodlox chapter 11 . 6/23/2015
Nazluk's more Machiavellian than almost anybody in all Middle Earth. should be interesting to see where this goes.