Reviews for Summoner of the League |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Loving this so far. Have never touched LoL but this has got me diving into the lore quite regularly for context and then digging in at any available opportunity |
![]() ![]() ![]() 1000 men in the Noxian army seems really small for an expansionist empire |
![]() ![]() ![]() This turning out to be a very good story, against my expectations, to be honest. I thought you would go cliche or Mary sue very soon, but I'm glad I was wrong. I did NOT appreciate the Ahri spoiler, tho, and I'll stop reading your ANs now |
![]() ![]() Yo dude, still alive? Haven't seen any updates in a bit, getting worried. |
![]() ![]() esta buena la teoria espero que sigas subiendo esta historia |
![]() ![]() Just realized what this “unlock your powers by kissing women” schtick is from. It’s the underage version of Qwaser of Stigmata, in which the protagonist drinks the Breast milk of his female companions to power himself up before major fights. If you haven’t heard of it from nuxTaku as I have, I assume you drew inspiration from the show itself. The similarities are uncanny, and I was riddled with laughter comparing the two. I have yet to laugh at an actual joke in the story though, however the writing is good enough that it doesn’t need to be carried by humor. |
![]() ![]() This “knowledge and power inherited from your forefathers” seems like a big fat cop-out. The “your father left a McGuffin, claiming to give it to you when you are ready” is an overused cliched cop-out. And that’s disappointing, because I thought the author was relatively creative. That, however, is the only complaint I have... so far. |
![]() ![]() I like the story I would like to see more chapters |
![]() ![]() ![]() lol that ending was great. |
![]() ![]() ![]() lol i haven't played LOL in a while but climbing to master with fiora back then was a bit hard but manageable. but anyway nice story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Bueno, Naruto sabe la verdad sobre su padre ahora. - Well, Naruto knows the truth about his father now. |
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![]() ![]() ![]() the more I read your work the more I like it and your drink choices! egg nog for the win! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I am writing this because I feel like it needs to be said. You are a great writer; I think we can all agree upon that. But there has been something off about this story ever since Naruto's origins have been introduced; the same kind of problem that occured during the later half of Shippuden during the 4th Great Shinobi World War and that's a divergence from form. Naruto as a series grabbed us with its intricacies. Conflict was smaller in scale but it had vast levels of depth. Every moment in a fight was meaningful in the beginning, more of a battle of wit than of blades. As the story progressed and power levels grew exponentially, Naruto tragically fell into the same trap that so many other Shonen are subject to: a loss of scale. When everyone and everything is overpower then nothing begins to matter; planet cracking jutsu are thrown like candy, new forms come and go like clothing, the weight of a situation becomes lost and set backs feel more like plot devices than actual hurdles to overcome. Your story has gone down a similar path. In the initial chapters, Naruto is introduced as painfully inept; even more so than canon. The only reason he managed to become a Shinobi is thanks to his tactically sound mind, and while he could not do much on his own, he at least had his summons to make up for his deficiencies; almost putting him in the position of the player on the battlefield in a MOBA. Now though, it feels as if he doesn't even need the LOL ladies to get by. Upon awakening his Dragonblood this man just spontaneously defeated two Shinobi capable of overthrowing a Kage, turned into Jonin at 13, allowed him to push back an entire invasion basically on his own and go toe-to-toe with a being described as a tailed beast in human form. I'm not sure if you always intended Naruto do be a Drgonborn but with how much his Draconic Instincts have changed him you'd think that the Naruto of this story pre and post awakening are two different characters. What happened to tactics? What happened to outwitting the opposition? What happened to what this story was about? Maybe there's something that I'm missing but as it looks like right now it feels as if you've lost the core of what your story is about. Hopefully, this criticism reaches you. Do with it as you will. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I've got to say, the crossover works really well ! Love the story, hoping for more chapters soon ! |