|Reviews for Ruby's Buir|
| key chapter 1 . 1/19/2017
AAAAAAAAAANNNNNNNNNNDDDDDDDDDDD ... no
| Joe McNulty chapter 3 . 7/20/2016
Can you make a rated M version of this.
| Lord Revan Flame chapter 4 . 5/19/2016
Nice take on the Blake back story, too
| Dark holt chapter 4 . 5/19/2016
Hey want a cool fight for sev, here's my oc you can use if you want to give him a hell of a fight. If you use her feel free to do whatever you want with her.
Name: Yin dark
Animal: house cat
Fur color: black with silver tips on the ears
Occupation: first year student, bodyguard for hire
Weight: 159 pounds
Eye color: her left eye is blood red, her right eye is amber and their silted like a cats.
Handedness: right handed
Blood type: O
It's a huge buster glove 9x the size of Yin's hand that holds dust charges and can store aura. The glove weighs 600 pound to anyone other than Yin that try's to use it. To Yin it is light as Cotten. The metal knuckle is made of is an unknown alloy to Ozpin but its durable enough to catch a mortar artillery shell and chuck it back without sustaining damege.
Aura: silver, it makes others feel like they can take on the world.
Dust: Earth, Air, Ice and fire dust charges for Knuckle that add elemental effects to knuckle's attacks.
Skills and abilities:
Is a master marchle artist
Semblance: VFX time control
Yin has a limited ability to control time and incorporates it into her fighting style. She can control time in three ways.
Slow: Yin slows down local time in a 20ft radius, Yin moves at 50% of her usual speed and everyone else moves at 10% of their usual speed.
Has to shout S-s-slow to activate. Can only use 10 min a day.
Mach speed: Yin speeds up her local time to triple her movement and reaction speed. (Basicly like Ruby's super speed just not as fast.)
Has to shout Mach speed to activate. Can only use 10 min a day.
Replay: Yin can loop a 1 min segment of time up too three times after the event happened. Any damege sustained to the target of the time loop stacks each loop. Ex: if Yin punches you and cracks a rib then loops the event 2 more times, the rib will crack more each hit cause the damage stacks each loop.
Has to shout repeat to activate.
Can use as meany times per day she wants but can only loop the same event 3times.
Hand to hand: 150/200
Weapon use: 150/200
Random fact: Was trained to fight by Ajani, the mentor of hero's. (He's a planeswalker, who said he could of never stopped by rimnent.)
Theme song: the hero(English cover)
| Mandalore the Survivor chapter 3 . 4/15/2016
Hmm not too bad, while I would disagree warriors are more then just their armor, armor is still important though.
Though now mention of beskar'gam has my attention, I can picture Sev being type paint it maybe dark grey with blood like trims to it like his old armor.
Hmm here's one idea for Ozpin and Sev, Ozpin would likely become curious more about clones. So maybe Sev does tell him more about his brothers, Ozpin will likely become quite disgusted how Kaminoians treated clones and how heartless lot of them are.
Though I would also see Ozpin becoming curious of Cuy'val Dar as well. Overall nice work, good luck, till next time.
PAR KOTE BAL IJAAT BE MAND'ALOR!
| rob.york.1690 chapter 3 . 4/15/2016
this... this was kinda heart warming to read, plus the idea of a 9 year old ruby rose cheering sounds cuter than a box full of week old kittens (or puppies... or both!)
and after that rather embarrassing moment (jeez can't a guy call some thing cute! especially when it concerns Ruby!)
fare thee well my friend
| Knight7572 chapter 3 . 4/15/2016
well here's an idea have sev go on summer's final and see what or who it was that caused summer's demise
| Lord Revan Flame chapter 2 . 4/7/2016
I love this
I love this so much
Republic Commandos for life!
| HHH1 chapter 2 . 4/7/2016
-Huh. So Sev's been taken from the world of Star Wars into the world of RWBY. Not exactly how I expected it to turn out, but that's perfectly fine with me. That sure gives him a bunch of stories to tell. Maybe he could have story time with Ruby or someone else at some point, giving us a look at what a character from RWBY thinks of what happens in Star Wars.
-Ruby's adorable, as always. Their first meeting was plenty good on its own, but now we need to get a better look at how their mentor-student relationship built up (like how she even got him to teach her sniping and weapons, as well as how that would eventually lead in to Ruby turning into the adorable little badass we know and love).
-Also, there's the matter of Sev adjusting to the world of Remnant. Maybe we can take a look at his first encounter with the Grimm, as well as his first look at what a fully qualified huntsman/huntress can do. Stuff like semblances and auras should seem like a fairly alien concept to him, and seeing it in action provides quite a few opportunities.
-Thanks for the update. See you at the next one.
| TidePoolDevil chapter 2 . 4/7/2016
Naw. That's adorable. I love this, please continue.
| VentXekart chapter 2 . 4/7/2016
A Star Wars/RWBY crossover where Sev is Ruby's mentor? Interesting! I like how you've managed to keep him in character so far as well as using Mando'a in this story. Although I'm kind of confused as to why this isn't under the category of a crossover but its not that big of a deal. I can't wait to see how this story will play out, especially considering how Sev and Ruby have differing personalities.
| Mandalore the Survivor chapter 2 . 4/7/2016
Eh I don't see Sev being time gulp like that. We'll talking about a guy who survived training under Walon Vau after all, one of the most brutal of Cuy'val Dar trainers.
Still it was interesting to see this, Ruby does have a odd habit of touching people's souls with her innocence, the same kind her mother has.
Still overall pretty good work. If your interested, got a suggestion if you want? Good luck, till next time.
PAR KOTE BAL IJAAT BE MAND'ALOR!
| Guest chapter 1 . 3/24/2016
I'm keeping an eye on this.
For Sev ' s life on Remnant...
Maybe he was Qrow's drinking buddy?
| HHH1 chapter 1 . 3/23/2016
-I always did wonder what happened to Sev at the end of Republic Commando. Kind of sucked that they just left him to dry, but that's military life for you. Mission first, and all that.
-Anyways, putting Sev in Remnant is just asking for trouble (for the Grimm and assorted baddies, of course). First question that probably needs answering is if he has a semblance or not, as well as what it may be (if the answer is the former, not the latter). Next would probably be his relation with Ruby as a mentor. How did he teach her, exactly? How does their dynamic work? All that sort of stuff.
-As for some other stuff off the top of my head, the main thing I'm wondering is how much of his Star Wars self mixes in to his RWBY self. This is a crossover, after all. Does he still remember being in Delta Squad? Does he remember fighting in the Clone Wars? Or is it more a case of planting the character in a completely different world, without any ties to the original material he came from aside from personality and such? Just a thought.
-This looks quite interesting, truthfully speaking. I'll be sure to keep an eye on this particular story for any new developments, as well as keep leaving reviews if I am able.
| Mandalore the Survivor chapter 1 . 3/23/2016
Wow, I love the idea that Sev would be one of Ruby's mentor, kinda curious what kinda of role he had with Yang then? But I will say, Sev is one of my most favorite of Clone Troopers.
Would love to see a story involving Sev traveling in RWBY. Anyway nice work, am kinda interest if you plan use any Mandalorians like the Cuy'val Dar in this? Would be awesome to see Vhonte Tervho.
Good luck, till next time.
PAR KOTE BAL IJAAT BE MAND'ALOR!