Reviews for I'm Defying Gravity
Axccel chapter 20 . 7/12/2023
It’s disappointing that you’re using artificial stupidity on the Shiro’s part. He had no reason not to mention the ROOT operative and no reason to believe said operative wouldn’t report his encounter to Danzo. You had him not speak up for no reason other than so you could shoe horn Danzo being suspicious of him and handing him some power to threaten the guy with, though you seem to be skipping that and instead using this artificial stupidity as a way to save Danzo for later use in the plot.

By the way, regarding Raiton magnetism via fuinjutsu in the previous chapter, that is impossible. Lightning has nothing to do with magnetism. You might have been thinking in terms of electromagnetic, but not only is lightning totally different from electricity, magnetic fields are made of photons. Electrons have nothing to do with the electromagnetic spectrum nor with magnetics. Besides, elemental chakra is just chakra being used like a natural element. It doesn’t have the actual properties found in nature, which is why they can do things impossible with actual elements such as sharp wind and combining lightning with water.
Axccel chapter 19 . 7/12/2023
There is no reason to not mention the ninja he fought in detail. He could have killed two birds with one stone by subtly implicating ROOT and therefore Danzo. There was no risk in doing so, only benefits, and you had him choose not to despite considering it and didn’t even give him a reason.
Axccel chapter 15 . 7/12/2023
Last chapter burger sounds awesome.

Also, the lightning attack hit, which means he’d passed the test legitimately regardless. Yamato never said it had to be a harmful hit.

Also, Kakashi’s mother was an Inuzuka if I remember correctly.
Axccel chapter 14 . 7/12/2023
Wood release does not suppress chakra. It calms bijuu chakra. Be cause Kishimoto wrote himself into a corner. Unless this was retconned to be for all chakra.
Axccel chapter 13 . 7/12/2023
Sasuke meeting Itachi wasn’t the catalyst. Itachi mindfuck torturing him again for days on end was what did it. A pretty good reason to snap, honestly.
Axccel chapter 12 . 7/12/2023
Your Hanabi is one of the best.
Axccel chapter 8 . 7/12/2023
To be fair to Konoha, other than Danzo’s shenanigans, the village actually is pretty innocent and mostly just minds its own business living peacefully. I think the true reason why Konoha is the good guy and the other villages are asshats is because Konoha was founded specifically to end conflict among its members so the ninja could live peacefully and hopefully someday lay down their arms entirely. Every other village was formed out of desperation in fear of Konoha (or at least, utter terror at the Senju and Uchiha joining forced).

This makes for an extreme difference in culture and ideology. Konoha striving for peace, but the other villages being created solely for war. Especially war against Konoha and later each other.

It also engenders fear, suspicion, and paranoia towards each other. Something Konoha largely lacks as that just is literally the opposite of how it was built and the attitudes of the people who came together within it.
GoMagikarp chapter 20 . 7/9/2023
Damn, imagine giving a heads up on the invasion, yet not forcing a confrontation with Danzo.
Siriusly Grim chapter 20 . 7/5/2023
This is a fun read. I look forward to more!
RageSage chapter 20 . 7/3/2023
Danzo has an eye on Shiro now. Big oof. Not sure about that call chief... Still, thanks for the chapter! Loved the story so far, eager to read the next chapter!
KnownNovice chapter 20 . 7/1/2023
oh no Shiro! you've tipped off Danzo! wonderful update, thank you!
pedro.a.assis chapter 20 . 7/1/2023
Man, the concept of a son of Kakashi is really cool, but the problem is that he's too young to be strong enough and it make sense, like Naruto and Sasuske had the biggest cheast in the world and they were only fighting strong people when they became 15/16, putting a kid 3 years younger then them in the same fights doesn't make any sense. I'll see what you try to do, fighting is not really necessary for good story imo, even if it's part of it in Naruto's world. Thanks for writing and posting.
Noone cares if u disagree chapter 20 . 7/1/2023
hey hey, thanks for the chap
RageSage chapter 3 . 6/30/2023
"I-I'm sorry, did you say something?" - I wheezed so hard when I read this
Tony McNucklz chapter 20 . 6/30/2023
Ah. I'm not a fan of the evil danzo route, Canon or otherwise. It never makes any sense. the guy seems vastly more dedicated to harming the village he was ready to die for, his plans rarely seem to have any rationale to them, unless viewed through a meta lens, in which case the character clearly isn't loyal to konoha beyond lipseevice, because his purpose is to be a shadowy antagonist and enemy to be disposed of eventually, rather than a dynamic character with any depth. And usually fanon takes the already over the top villain for villainys sake danzo and make him a ridiculous caricature whose only purpose is to do a bunch of evil shit that runs completely contrary to his supposed motivations, so the protagonist can take justified lyrics take the evil warmonger down. The character lacks the substance you get with orochimaru, with Pain or zabuza. Characters whose actions, however deranged, are consistent with their general and specific goals and motivations. Danzo on the other hand seems to just... do things that seem highly likely to hurt konoha, because he thinks they will help somehow?

The only thing about the character that makes sense is his contempt for Tsunade and the utterly terrible message her as Holage sends to the rank and file, that desertion and betrayal of the village for decades is something to be rewarded. Fuck even as a kid I was baffled by the notion of putting an infamous deserter in charge of loyal soldiers, many of whom also outlived the people they loved. one whose desertion could have directly lead to hundreds of deaths of shinobi and civilians alike given she could have been managing the hospital, could've made countless medical advancements with all those years of peace, been able to do more difficult surgeries than others could successfully accomplish (after getting some help with her phobia), but instead she abandoned the duty every shinobi under her now command stayed loyal to, and with her in charge, why shouldn't they follow in her footsteps whenever they feel like it?

Sorry, got sidetracked. besides the tsunade issue, Danzo as the evil shadow lord is usually boring for its ubiquitousness. I'd suggest putting some thought into how you intend to use him.
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