|Reviews for The Reaping|
| CrimsonMystic chapter 46 . 12/14/2018
I know it’s been like two years at this point, but this really is a great story. Consider continuing it?
| Guest chapter 42 . 11/17/2018
So Damn GOOD! Please start this back again and finish? Please!?
| ReadR13 chapter 46 . 9/19/2018
Love it, hope you continue it.
| Shin1gam1 chapter 46 . 8/28/2018
Hopefully you'll continue it in the future
| wawo20 chapter 1 . 8/15/2018
Fantastic story. Well done and close to how wild now writes.
| MattKennedy chapter 46 . 6/13/2018
Cool story! :)
| Tracer28 chapter 46 . 4/29/2018
This is pure Awesome. Seriously. Taylor playing at the big leagues is no surprise but the escalation is great! And I really like your characterization!
| DALucifer13 chapter 10 . 3/29/2018
you're gonna have Aisha 'accidentally' die on a patrol 'aint ya?
| DALucifer13 chapter 7 . 3/29/2018
dads money wants power cape 53.
| Simianpower chapter 41 . 2/23/2018
"I smiled slightly, at that. The idea was interesting. Contessa shifted slightly. So, she can even pick up on that, eh?"
Wrong. That's how Tattletale's power works. Contessa does NOT pick up on cues like that.
"It figures that Contessa knows what I'm doing. That is how her power works, after all. Gaining the knowledge she needs."
NO IT ISN'T! "Contessa's power allows her to see the steps she needs to take to succeed at nearly any given task and execute them perfectly." That's it. Most of the time she doesn't even know WHY she's taking steps, or what the words she's saying even mean. It doesn't make her Dinah, who can see futures. It doesn't make her Tattletale, who can extrapolate from minimal information. It doesn't work like Jack, who instinctively understands how to manipulate capes.
"There are options. A vial...
I raised my sword and pointed it at Contessa, eyes narrowed. "No, I thought not."
Again, NOT CONTESSA! She wouldn't even have said that. Honestly, you give her every other thinker power except the one she does have in canon. She knows what to say to get someone to do something, even if the words are in a language she doesn't know, and she doesn't make mistakes like that.
Man, do you ever SUCK at writing Thinkers. You glom all the powers of every Thinker in canon into each other one, and then misuse them anyway. I thought you were bad at Tattletale, but you're so much worse with the others. Goddamn, is it ever frustrating reading a fanfiction story written by someone who doesn't understand the source material.
I thought things would get better after that appalling S9 arc was over, but if anything the dumb is just piling up. I don't think I'm going to continue this story. It was around 7/10 material until S9, but it's down to 3/10 now and I don't see any path forward that would interest me.
| Simianpower chapter 40 . 2/23/2018
Aaaand that's not how Crawler works. He has eyes all over EXPLICITLY so that he can't get snuck up on like that.
Aaaand that's not how Hatchet Face/Hackjob works. His power works in a radial fashion, not a cone. You nerfed it explicitly to further Mary Sue your Mary Sue because otherwise she'd lose.
Aaaand that's not how Alabaster works. His clothes are returned to just as pristine of a state as he is. It's why he dresses in white, to show that off.
Aaaand that's not how Contessa works. Her power returns a list of steps needed to accomplish a goal. It cannot be used to "get a grasp on" how someone changes, or to see outcomes (as it did in a prior chapter). That's Dinah. They're NOT the same.
Aaaand that's not how alliances work. You've written a perfect way to turn Taylor permanently against Cauldron. Not just indifferent, but actively working toward their destruction. Why? Because they offered her support and assistance, when she asked for it they denied her because it was too dangerous to put portals up near the Nine (a clearly bullshit answer), then after her (also bullshit) second trigger they put up portals near the Nine, thus proving that they lied in order to betray her. Why the ever-loving FUCK would she ever trust them again, given her already horrendous trust issues? Even if they saved her dad, they turned on her when she needed them, so whatever their reasons or behind-the-scenes actions, there's no way that most people would ever trust them again, let alone Taylor. This was stupid from the word go, and all to get her a second trigger that should never have happened. All to make her "more suitable" for the end... but did they ever think to ask if she'd help them, no matter how suitable she'd be? This could have made her eminently suitable for killing Scion, but also make her believe that humanity doesn't deserve to exist. Without her only anchor to humanity, and with 9 new psychos in her mind, she might just do Scion's job for him.
This, right here, is why I FUCKING HATE S9 arcs in fanon. They're so full of OOC and handwavy bullshit that they're never worth reading. And this one was worse than most due to misunderstanding or misrepresenting SO MANY canon elements that I wonder if the writer ever read past chapter 5 of canon. My opinion of this story has dropped significantly over the past 4-6 chapters. I was really liking it. Then the Nine arrived, and the author lost his shit in fanwankland.
| Simianpower chapter 39 . 2/23/2018
That's not how second triggers work. Ugh! Hard choices are in every third chapter in Worm. The ONLY second trigger we ever saw in canon was Brian. He didn't second trigger when he was literally cut apart, while still conscious and unsedated, and spread all over a room with his nerve ends exposed for maximum pain, because Bonesaw. EVEN THAT wasn't enough to cause his second trigger. Nor was having Taylor walk all over his now-exposed nerve endings. And yet this "Oh, my, who do I save" conundrum is enough here? Did you even read canon?
This is why Slaughterhouse 9 arcs in fanfiction often drive people away from the fictions in question. They're done badly. They take poorly understood canon tropes and weaken them to the point that they're just power-wanking. They have Jack blather away, take a hostage or two, be mustache-twirlingly eeeeeeevil (which is boring), induce second triggers in some contrived bullshit fashion that is never even close to sufficiently traumatizing, sometimes with some torture-porn, then show how awesome/powerful/whatever their Mary Sue is. I'm expecting the next few chapters to include Taylor taking the powers of most/all of the Nine and then angsting about it. This is so formulaic, and so SO much lamer than canon. If this arc doesn't end soon, I'm out. If it ends soon and makes the rest of the fic pointless (often the case in S9 arcs), I'm out. I was really enjoying this fic until the S9 showed up. And I love the S9 in canon. I just hate every fanon rendition I've ever seen.
| Simianpower chapter 4 . 2/22/2018
Yeah... NOT how Tattletale's power works. She gathered that they robbed Lung's casino with absolutely ZERO discussion or input. Tattletale absolutely requires massive amounts of data to be effective; her power doesn't just pull answers out of her ass.
| dan chapter 46 . 1/26/2018
| World Theory chapter 34 . 11/4/2017
I was kinda wondering if the 'Nine would actually stay away this time, simply because Elysium is too big a threat. Should have known, though.