i noticed you made the runes professor so much younger than the books

One thing i always found odd, why would the magical world even care about muggle documents? Its two completely different governments

i still dont get whats the big deal with the name thing. my whole family and i are devour catholics but i doubt we would care if we were to meet a girl named jesus christ yknow?

Katie and Rosmerta turning makes no sense. The way I understand it, a person bitten by an untransformed werewolf will not turn they would become like Bill did in canon.

Bout time Harry got rid of the scarcrux, that arc had dragged on Ling enough. I wonder how long it will take him to figure out there is a horcrux hidden in the room where he destroyed the other two.

You have got to be shitting me! Sirius doesn't recognize his own brother's handwriting... or his initials? I gotta call bullshit on that. You really want to drag this horcrux thing out, huh?

Your story is written in English so you started this fic with the understanding that the people reading the story prefer that language. To that end, why write Fleur switching to French in actual French when the majority of us cannot speak French let alone read it?! If you want to describe Fleur speaking in French then it would make more sense to write that dialogue in English formatted in italics to let us pretend that we understand what Fleur saying is in French, kind of like subtitles in a movie. It would be much more convenient to having to scroll to the bottom of the page to figure out what it is she is saying and then try to find the spot we left off in the story.

Rhe scene from Daphne's P.o.V was unnecessary, if Harry bursts into a room with Daphne tied to a table, bloodied, wearing no clothes, with A bunch of questionable Slytherins and Malfoy half-naked behind her, it doesn't take a jet-fuel genius to figure out what's afoot. If you're going to put in explicit mature content I would rather read about Tonks sporting a male appendage buggering Fleur with Hermione off to the side tickling her nipples with a feather duster... but that's just me. Some things can just be inferred and it slowed the scene down a lot when it switched to Daphne P.o. V... just saying.

I know you're trying to build suspense with that last scene from Daphne's father but I really don't see the problem. Let her marry Zabini, she gets on well with Blaise and it would accomplish the same goal as her arrangement with Harry. Problem solved.

Well this harem is getting pretty convoluted, Harry's mistress wants her own mistress. Honestly this story would have been so much better if you just paired Harry with Fleur or Tonks and not tried to make it so ridiculous with a five or six way relationship. Personally I wouldn't mind him pairing with Tonks and Fleur if it had to be a polyamorous fic but Hermione should have never been a part of the relationship and certainly not as the defacto leader of the girls but I am not a Hermione fan so I'm a bit biased there. Bringing Daphne in with Tracy still attached just seems like an unnecessary headache and throws whatever realism the relationship had out the window.

The Mummy wasn't released until 1999.

So now Lily and Marlene are or were bisexual as well? Either the wizarding world does something very unusual to female sensuality causing their libido to shoot through the roof or this story has some serious wish fulfilment issues, ither way it isn't realistic.

Dumbles in a nursing home cracks me up, I can just see him asking an orderly for a glass of water only to be told he can have a glass of shut the hell up.

I did enjoy how Snape was dealt with, I never really cared for the character's attitude in canon but I can respect what the man went through to protect Harry yet still appear to be a faithful death eater. If Dumbles has been placed in an asylum or assisted living home, I am sure Snape will be just as relieved as everyone else is.

Speaking of Dumbles and Umbridge for that matter, their comeuppance seems so impersonal. Shiva basically did the same as Hermione did in canon, abandoning her to creatures in the forest. I guess the main difference with Umbridge in this story is that instead of her being gang-raped by centaurs she gets a drawn out death by giant freaking spiders, but ultimately it comes to the same end. Harry and his friends didn't get to personal kill her and it just felt so anticlimactic.

Likewise, Dumbles gets taken away by the Flamels and from the earlier chapters it's hinted thar he'll be placed in a cushy muggle nursing home which is hardly a fitting punishment considering how comfortable he'll be compared to a place like Azkaban or Nurmengard. Once again a bit anticlimactic seeing as he's been one of the main antagonist in this story up until Voldemort's rebirth.

I really dislike the old 'Harry is provoked by Malfoy but someone stops him from giving the little wanker the thrashing he deserves' cliché. JKR ran that particular scenario into the ground in the books and it has been immortalized in fanfiction ever since.

what was the point of giving Harry all of those cool advantages if you're just going to nullify them when he actually needs them? Now Harry is officially ice skating up his because... plot reasons. I don't necessarily want to see Harry curbstomping his way through the story but it would be nice to see him in one life-or-death situation where the author didn't find some way to pull the rug out from under him before the fighting had even begun. Also, a little curbstomping would be nice just to break the cycle of Harry barely getting through an adventure by the skin of his ass and waking up in the infirmary to scolding from his ever growing harem of bisexual witches.

Gotta say that I wish Hermione wasn't part of the harem, she is sooooooo annoying.

That stunt during the task was only put into this story so Harry shows up at the graveyard with one less advantage. I never was a fan of stories where the author goes out of their way to sabotage the M.C at every turn and this is starting to become one of those stories. It hasn't quite gotten to the point where Harry is trying to ice skate up hill but is heading in that direction. The way Harry is written in this story it's like he's super-intelligent until it suits the plot for him to be a fucking moron with a hero complex.

It would have taken a fraction of a second for Harry to grab the key before chasing after Fred and pissing away his ace in the hole when he revealed that his animagus was magical in front of a crowd of spectators and ministry officials... what a fucking moron! I mean the solution to saving Fred isn't exactly rocket science, does Harry not know how to cast the arresto momentum charm? For that matter a cushion charm would have worked just fine, but noooooo that makes too much sense and isn't heroic enough.